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Counterintuitive 
Don’t use it as a subject
Use the actual subject
Sources are hard to find
People can be general when they aren’t certain.
Good lesson. Sources are hard to find. When we go looking for confirmation of something we’re eager to “prove,” the world of published information can disappoint us, which is why the ONLY valid approach to a research paper is to start with a hypothesis and then read widely and deeply to see WHAT THE WORLD PROVES. Thesis comes last, after we know what is demonstrable.
What does “people can be general when they aren’t certain” mean? I have a theory, but I’d like to know yours. Reply, please.
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first drafts always have room for improvement
eliminate it as a subject when the antecedent is available
the best sentences use their most important term as the subject and the most active and robust verb possible. IT never qualifies as the most important term.
wrong
being dependent on a drug, it has made addicts lives very difficult
right
drug dependency has devastated addict’s lives.
white paper assignment full of research through methods learned into today’s class.
That makes sense.
Scores are low today, but the curve cures all.
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Started out class by doing some house keeping in regards to feedback and a brief discussion of when grades and how grades will be coming out. Proceeding that we had a brief grammar lesson on how to eliminate It as a subject if an antecedent is available.
Eliminating It Notes
-in poorly made sentences, sometimes it’s really difficult to find the subject of a sentence but it should never be It
-being able to have affective and robust verbs helps when getting rid of it once you have the subject
– it causes confusion when the subject is clearly stated in the sentence.
Live Research Challenge:
We’ve discovered that sanitation had a direct link to exposure To polio but the build up of immunity also comes from this
This may sound ridiculous and slightly insane, Nick, but your instincts in these simple class notes are wrong. They generalize (which means they transmit LESS information than they could) where being specific would actually be more economical. In other words, they say less to NO ADVANTAGE.
A week from now, you won’t know what that means, Nick. If, instead, you had written:
You wouldn’t have to trust your memory for anything.
That lesson alone, if you can internalize it and apply it to all your writing, will make you a far better communicator.
There’s a REALLY valuable paper to be made of that counterintuitive observation, don’t you think, Nick? IMPROVED SANITATION increased the likelihood that young people would succumb to polio. How unfair can the world be?
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-Eliminate “it” as a subject when the antecedent is available. Really good sentences use the most important term as the subject and “it” never qualifies as the most important term
-Use specifics when researching to try and find articles that have the most to do with your topic
-Use websites like Google Scholar and the Library Database
-We explored databases to try and come to a conclusion on why children are more likely to get polio than adults are
-a white paper is a work in progress and tends to be informal and of uneven quality
-cluster your material into areas based on themes
-need at least 2 working hypothesis
These are strong, practical, specific notes that you’ll find useful if you ever need to refer to them again, Chippy.
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Ask for feedback in the feedback please tab.
Grades will be posted soon.
Eliminate “IT” as a subject when the antecedent is available
Why are children more vulnerable to polio than adults? -using google scholar, library databases, and google
–poor sanitation at the time resulted in constant exposure to the virus, which enhanced a natural immunity within the population
White paper assignment-due Monday midnight
–informal, well developed and poorly developed
-what we know and what we need to know about the topic
-a couple ideas, links, article summaries for structure
-at least 2 hypothesis- what we want/able to prove
These are strong, practical, specific notes that you’ll find useful if you ever need to refer to them again, Donuts.
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Ariana Grande is great
When writing an essay, eliminate “it” if there’s nothing to refer to. Replace it with the subject and the most active and robust verb possible. Write sentence so the actual subject is the subject.
Example: By being dependent on a drug, it has made addicts’ lives very difficult –> Drug dependency has devastated addicts’ lives.
By having an age restriction on sugary sodas, it will make it harder for children to purchase them.
Subject: Age restriction
An age restriction on sugary sodas will frustrate children’s efforts to purchase them.
General Background Information
Google
Google Scholar
Library Database
Most common challenge is normally finding which source has the best, viable information
Good, practical advice that will reward later readings. Thank you for confirming my belief that Ariana Grande killed it in that performance.
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-if you write a sentence using “it” you will be able to find the antecedent
-in some sentences it is very difficult to find out what the subject is: whatever the subject is, it should never be “it”
-example: By being dependent on a drug. it has made addicts’ lives very difficult
-if the subject of the sentence is dependent on the drug, we do not need “it”
Starbucks, you don’t have a topic yet for your research paper, and that puts you in grave danger of failing. I appreciate that you attend class, but you’re not participating if you haven’t started your research, so you’ll have to get by on the minimum grades for showing up.
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Reply, please. This is getting serious.
Quick Grammar Lesson:
Eliminate it as a subject when the antecedent is available
the best sentences use their most important term as the subject and the most active and robust verb possible. It never qualities as the most important term.
Example: By being dependent on a drug. it has made addicts’ lives very difficult.
Drug dependency has devastated addict’s lives.
By inviting Syrians into the country. it creates more problems than it solves.
Problems caused by Syrian immigrants outweigh the advantages of inviting them.
General Background Information- scholar
Scientific Experiment- library/database
Conflicts that complicate vaccination- google
White Paper:
cut and paste sources and proposal
topics for smaller papers
definition/ classification argument
cause and effect argument
rebuttal argument
working hypothesis 1 and 2
Most of what you’ve recorded here could be assembled from the Agenda, Moana, but your Notes do qualify as a quick reference to the content of today’s course material.
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-Leave feedback for the feedback that he left me.
-Eliminate “it” as a subject when the antecedent is available
-The subject of my sentence should never be “it”. The subject of your sentence should be “it”
-Real subjects active and robust verbs.
-We use google for news articles, library data base for peer reviewed articles, and google scholar for scientific studies.
-The subject of my sentence should never be “it”.
The subject of your sentence should be “it”
Huh?
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On the bright side, our openings could be considered high class crap.
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The subject should never be it. Whatever it means is the actual subject.
Real subjects, active/robust verbs.
Of his three choices, Beethoven clearly chose the right career.
With practice, it makes it easier for batters to anticipate the path the ball will take.
Batters will better anticipate the path of the ball with practice
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Live Research Challenge:
The best source of sources is your first source!!
Going to wikipedia can be a good source of sources
Using the search function for key words within a web browser could prove helpful
Irony=better sanitation led to more costly results of polio
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White Paper Assignment:
First version will be due at midnight on Monday
Can use “Why We Still Have Polio” as a reference.
Cluster Materials into themes
Seek Structure
A06 White Paper
Definition of thesis is a waste of words
Interpretation is key
–> Key Term
Good work, BlackHawk.
Nobody else recorded even one of the “it” sentence “solutions.” Why?
I have to wonder about this:
The fault may be mine, but that makes no sense.
Reply, please.
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I poorly described your explanation of spending 1000 words defining the thesis being a waste of words (considering we only have 3000)
I see what you mean: spending 1000 words to define a term not in dispute would be a waste of 1000 words.
Every draft is the first draft.its all crap, the key is to make it better crap.
Quick Grammar Lesson
Eliminate it as a subject when the antecedent is available
-In badly made sentences it is hard to tell what the subject is
-It should never be the subject
-It should refer to the subject
-Real subject and active verbs are the key to good sentences
Examples:
What she wrote:By being dependent on a drug, it has made addicts’ lives very difficult.
-“It” has no purpose in the sentence
What she should have wrote: Drug dependency has devastated addicts’s lives.
-the sentence has a good subject and powerful verb.
What she wrote:By having an age restriction on sugary sodas, it will make it harder for children to purchase them
What she should have wrote:An age restriction on sugary sodas will frustrate children’s efforts to purchase them.
When he put his finger in the saw, it showed that the safety device protected him.
should be:
He demonstrated the surprising effectiveness of the safety device by putting his finger in the saw
With practice, it makes it easier for batters to anticipate the path the ball will take.
Should be:
With practice, batters learn to anticipate the path the ball will take.
It is often quite easily then out of the sentences, with examples like these
Live Research Challenge
General background- google scholar
scientific experiment-library database
conflicts that complete vaccination-google
White Paper Assignment
-It is a work in progress
-its informal, simply a snapshot of where you are at this point
-cluster the material into themes, things for and against the counterintuitive argument
-start by copy and pasting proposal and resources
-At least two working hypotheses is necessary
Topics for smaller papers
-definition arguments, cause and effect argument a rebuttle argument
-3,000 words each
-dont’ spend 1,00 word describing polio(or the topic of paper) that is just a waste of words
Huh?
You recorded the “solutions” the the “it as a subject” puzzles, GreenEggs. I admire that.
Fine. But what ISN’T a waste of words?
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Eliminate “it” as a subject when the antecedent is available. “It” should never be the subject of your sentence. “It” serves no purpose when the subject is already stated. Change the sentence so that “it” is removed, and the most active and robust verb is used.
Research takes a long time. Finding a specific piece of information can take hours, or even days. Don’t wait until the last minute to do research. Most of the time, your first source is your best source.
Research challenge: Over time, adults develop their own natural ways to fight off polio due to more exposure of diseases. Children haven’t built an immune system that is strong enough to fight off polio.
The more I see from you, the more I like how you operate, Aeks. You’re a thinker who takes time to process. When you come to a conclusion, you record it for later review. I will always want to read what you come up with.
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-eliminate the use of “it.” Use the actual subject in the writing to enhance the quality.
-Always use the most robust verbs.
– “Language was invented for one reason, boys – to woo women – and, in that endeavor, laziness will not do. It also won’t do in your essays.” -Robin Williams: Dead Poet Society
Nice quote. Worth a point.
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