Causal Rewrite—Ladybug122718

Y.B.A.M.O.C

We find that consuming too much caffeine can affect both our minds and bodies. Some studies show that our mind is awake so long that our body can’t keep up with it. Caffeine reduces the amount of deep sleep that we enjoy from our mind being awake. Studies by Christopher Drake and others show that having over,

“400 mg of caffeine taken 0, 3, or even 6 hours before bedtime significantly disrupts sleep. Even at 6 hours, caffeine reduced sleep by more than 1 hour. This degree of sleep loss, if experienced over multiple nights, may have detrimental effects on daytime function.”

Our sleep cycle is significantly affected by this as when it’s time for us to sleep we can’t do to our brain telling us to get up. It’s like our mind is in an endless loop and we don’t know whether we are awake or asleep. I found that high school students can’t even focus in class due to them being always tired, they gave us a small video from CBC News on students who are sleep deprived which is called, Generation sleep deprived: How lack of sleep is hurting Canadian teens | In-Depth.

Caffeine affects our sleep by blocking our adenosine receptors which are supposed to help produce chemicals in our brain that help us wake up. The more chemicals that are produced the more we feel sleepy but the caffeine blocks it all. From it builds up so much the caffeine blocks this process, which makes us remain alert and vigilant at all times. I found a video that talks about how coffee can ruin your sleep from the Sleep Foundation. Which tells us how to avoid caffeine if we want to sleep better, but the reality is a little more complicated. Studies show that caffeine and adenosine compete with one another for receptors in our brains. But caffeine doesn’t decrease the adenosine in our body like it does with sleep. Instead, it prevents the amount of adenosine from being received by our brain making us feel less drowsy.

References

Christopher Drake, Ph.D., F.A.A.S.M., & Timothy Roehrs, Ph.D., F.A.A.S.M., & John Shambroom, B.S., & Thomas Roth, Ph.D. (2013 Nov). Caffeine Effects on Sleep Taken 0, 3, or 6 Hours before Going to Bed.

CBC Radio-Canada. (2018). Generation sleep deprived: How lack of sleep is hurting Canadian teens | In-Depth

Frances O’Callaghan, Olay Muurlink, & Natasha Reid. (2018 Dec) Effects of caffeine on sleep quality and daytime functioning

Sleep Is The Foundation. (2023, Oct). Coffee Is Ruining Your Sleep – But It Doesn’t Have To (Our Tips!)

Associated Coffee. (2019, April). Fight Grogginess With A Coffee Nap

Miguel S CabalagDavid McDonald TaylorJonathan C KnottPaul BuntineDeVilliers SmitAlastair Meyer. (2010 Jan). Recent caffeine ingestion reduces adenosine efficacy in the treatment of paroxysmal supraventricular tachycardia

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5 Responses to Causal Rewrite—Ladybug122718

  1. davidbdale's avatar davidbdale says:

    Hey, Ladybug! There’s good evidence and good work here.
    Don’t undermine it by insulting your readers.

    Nobody likes to be preached to or lectured by a college student writing a research paper. If you want to make friends with your readers (and you DO if you’re hope to persuade them), create COMMON CAUSE with them. Use WE, OUR, OURSELVES as your preferred pronouns. Make sure your readers know you’re ONE OF THEM.

    Eliminate all the capitalized 2nd person language in the following paragraphs. I’ll come back when you’re finished to offer more feedback:

    Like this: Consuming too much caffeine affect both OUR minds and bodies. Some studies show that YOUR mind is awake so long that YOUR body can’t keep up with it. Caffeine reduces the amount of deep sleep that YOU enjoy from YOUR mind being awake. Studies by Christopher Drake and others show that having over, “400 mg of caffeine taken 0, 3, or even 6 hours before bedtime significantly disrupts sleep. Even at 6 hours, caffeine reduced sleep by more than 1 hour. This degree of sleep loss, if experienced over multiple nights, may have detrimental effects on daytime function.” YOUR sleep cycle is significantly affected by this as when it’s time for YOU to sleep YOU can’t do to YOUR brain telling YOIU to get up. It’s like YOUR mind is in an endless loop and YOU don’t know whether YOU are awake or asleep. I found that high school students can’t even focus in class due to them being always tired, they gave us a small video from CBC News on students who are sleep deprived which is called, Generation sleep deprived: How lack of sleep is hurting Canadian teens | In-Depth.

    Caffeine affects YOUR sleep by blocking YOUR adenosine receptors which is supposed to help produce chemicals in your brain that help YOU wake up. The more chemicals that are produced the more YOU feel sleepy but the caffeine blocks it all. From it bring builds up so much the caffeine blocks this process, which makes YOU remain alert and vigilant at all times. I found a video that talks about how coffee can ruin YOUR sleep from the Sleep Foundation. Which tells us how to avoid caffeine if we want to sleep better, but the reality is a little more complicated. Studies show that caffeine and adenosine compete with one another for receptors in YOUR brain. But caffeine doesn’t decrease the adenosine in YOUR body like it does with sleep. Instead, it prevents the amount of adenosine from being received by YOUR brain making YOU feel less drowsy.

  2. davidbdale's avatar davidbdale says:

    You have not enough material here to qualify as a complete Causal Argument, but I’ll grade it preliminarily to acknowledge you published a first draft for consideration.

    Make significant improvements before you return for additional feedback.

    Provisionally graded. Revisions are always recommended (required for two short arguments) and Regrades are always available. Put your post back into Feedback Please and request a regrade when you’ve made significant improvements.

    • ladybug122718's avatar ladybug122718 says:

      I’m still adding information to the causal rewrite, I submitted what I had so far so it wouldn’t be turned in late.

  3. davidbdale's avatar davidbdale says:

    I’m guessing the YB means Your Brain, and the OC means On Caffeine, but I’m puzzled by the AM (And Mine? After Midnight?)

    Your Body And Mind On Caffeine?

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