There is a huge problem in Vancouver with heroin addicts committing crimes to support their habits. The “free heroin for addicts” program is doing everything they can to stop the addicts. The problem is that there is a large crime rate due to the addicts. It is obvious that addicts have a hard time getting through their day to day lives. Daily activities such as jobs, interactions, and relationships are hard to maintain because of the fact that they are using. By heroin users being addicted, they will do whatever they have to do to get their hands on the drug. The types of crimes committed are those of breaking and entering as well as stealing. There are no limits to where they will go to retrieve this drug so that they can feed their addiction. The problem with this program is that it won’t help to ween these addicts off using heroin. It is only trying to save the city from rising crime rates that they’re up to. By providing the drug, these addicts will be off the streets, which in turn will prevent them from committing minor street crimes. This will also keep the heroin users out of the hospital. It is pointless that the hospitals have to deal with people that want to use bad drugs or unsanitary needles and find themselves being unable to afford hospital bills and hard to cope without the drug. This program gives people free heroin in the cleanest way possible. This will in turn fix the city  but not the addiction that these people face.

1. There is a huge problem in Vancouver with heroin addicts committing crimes to support their habits.

Problem: The problem is instead of adding unneeded words, use shorten version of words to make the sentence clearer and more precise to get the point across.

Fix: Instead of using “there is” use “there’s”

2. It is obvious that addicts have a hard time getting through their day to day lives.

Problem: The problem is instead of adding unneeded words, use shorten version of words to make the sentence clearer and more precise to get the point across.

Fix: Instead of using “it is”, use the abbreviation for those two words and combine them to “it’s”.

3. Daily activities such as jobs, interactions, and relationships are hard to maintain because of the fact that they are using.

Problem: The part where is says because of the fact that theta are using, it doesn’t give enough support and does not describe what they are using  

Fix: Describe which drug they are using so it is easy to understand.

4. By providing the drug, these addicts will be off the streets, which in turn will prevent them from committing minor street crimes.

Problem: At the end of the sentence the author mentions minor crimes and just ends the sentence there.

Fix: In order to fix this problem don’t just end the sentence after mentioning minor crimes. Instead add a run on sentence and throw in more detail of which “minor crimes” herorin addicts commit.

5. The types of crimes committed are those of breaking and entering as well as stealing.

Problem: Dragging out the sentence to try to add fluff in the middle of the paragraph, which there is no need for this.

Fix: Instead of adding non essential fluff in the middle of the paragraph where it is not needed, explain these crimes in the beginning of the paragraph.

6. This program gives people free heroin in the cleanest way possible. This will in turn fix the city  but not the addiction that these people face.

Problem: No need to have both of these sentences apart.

Fix: Make the second sentence a run on sentence attached to the first sentence by adding a apostrophe between the two.