There is a huge problem in Vancouver with heroin addicts committing crimes to support their habits. The “free heroin for addicts” program is doing everything they can to stop the addicts. The problem is that there is a large crime rate due to the addicts. It is obvious that addicts have a hard time getting through their day to day lives. Daily activities such as jobs, interactions, and relationships are hard to maintain because of the fact that they are using. By heroin users being addicted, they will do whatever they have to do to get their hands on the drug. The types of crimes committed are those of breaking and entering as well as stealing. There are no limits to where they will go to retrieve this drug so that they can feed their addiction. The problem with this program is that it won’t help to ween these addicts off using heroin. It is only trying to save the city from rising crime rates that they’re up to. By providing the drug, these addicts will be off the streets, which in turn will prevent them from committing minor street crimes. This will also keep the heroin users out of the hospital. It is pointless that the hospitals have to deal with people that want to use bad drugs or unsanitary needles and find themselves being unable to afford hospital bills and hard to cope without the drug. This program gives people free heroin in the cleanest way possible. This will in turn fix the city but not the addiction that these people face.
- There is a huge problem in Vancouver with heroin addicts committing crimes to support their habits.
The Problem- The sentence takes time to get to the main point of what it is trying to get out.
The Fix- Eliminate “there is”
Rewrite-Vancouver grapples with a significant issue as heroin addicts resort to crime to sustain their habits.
- The “free heroin for addicts” program is doing everything they can to stop the addicts.
The Problem- the sentence is weak
The Fix- Eliminate “is”
Rewrite-Despite the “free heroin for addicts” initiative’s efforts to curb addiction, a surge in crime persists among addicts
- The problem is that there is a large crime rate due to the addicts.
The Problem- The sequence of words are prolonging the main point
The Fix- Eliminate “is that there is”
Rewrite-Large crime rate in Vancouver due to the addicts
- It is obvious that addicts have a hard time getting through their day to day lives.
The Problem- The problem “It is”
The Fix- get rid of the It is
Rewrite-obvious that addicts have a hard time getting through their day to day lives.
- Daily activities such as jobs, interactions, and relationships are hard to maintain because of the fact that they are using.
The Problem- the part where is says because of the fact that theta are using, it doesn’t give enough support and does not describe what they are using
The Fix- Describe what they are using so it is easy to understand also eliminate that
Rewrite-Their daily lives, encompassing work, interactions, and relationships, become increasingly challenging due to their reliance on the drug.
- By heroin users being addicted, they will do whatever they have to do to get their hands on the drug.
The Problem- at the start of the sentence is describing stuff we already know and the effect of it comes after.
The Fix- Get rid of the beginning of the sentence
Rewrite- Addicted will do whatever they can to get their hands on it.
- The types of crimes committed are those of breaking and entering as well as stealing.
The Problem- They are dragging out the sentence by prolonging what types of crimes are being committed
The Fix- describe the crimes in the beginning
Rewrite- Breaking and entering as well as stealing are some of the crimes these addicts do to get drugs
- There are no limits to where they will go to retrieve this drug so that they can feed their addiction.
The Problem- bad sentence could be rewritten in better ways
The Fix- rewrite the sentence
Rewrite- To retrieve this drug there are no limits they won’t take to go
- The problem with this program is that it won’t help to ween these addicts off using heroin.
I don’t see a problem with this sentence
- It is only trying to save the city from rising crime rates that they’re up to.
The Problem- the sentence would be stronger if rewritten
The Fix- get rid of is
Rewrite- It’s only trying to reduce the crime rate from the addicts more than helping them.
- By providing the drug, these addicts will be off the streets, which in turn will prevent them from committing minor street crimes.
There is no problem with this sentence
- This will also keep the heroin users out of the hospital.
The Problem- the weak point in this sentence is “this” at the start
The Fix- get rid of “this”
Rewrite- The hospital wouldn’t be so full with heroin users.
- It is pointless that the hospitals have to deal with people that want to use bad drugs or unsanitary needles and find themselves being unable to afford hospital bills and hard to cope without the drug.
The Problem- This sentence is weak because of “is” and “this” and also the use of other words would be better synonyms then the ones used in the sentence
The Fix-eliminate the words “is”, “this” and “Bad” and replace with better words
Rewrite- Pointless that hospitals have to deal with people that want to use drugs or unsanitary needles. In results of doing so they find themselves being unable to afford hospital bills and difficult to cope without drugs
- This program gives people free heroin in the cleanest way possible.This will in turn fix the city but not the addiction that these people face.
The Problem- This sentence could be conjoined into one sentence
The Fix- rewrite the sentence and make it one conjoined sentence
Rewrite- By offering heroin in a controlled manner, the program aims to clean up the city, but it overlooks the essential need to help individuals break free from addiction.
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