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There is a huge problem in Vancouver with heroin addicts committing crimes to support their habits. The “free heroin for addicts” program is doing everything they can to stop the addicts. The problem is that there is a large crime rate due to the addicts. It is obvious that addicts have a hard time getting through their day to day lives. Daily activities such as jobs, interactions, and relationships are hard to maintain because of the fact that they are using. By heroin users being addicted, they will do whatever they have to do to get their hands on the drug. The types of crimes committed are those of breaking and entering as well as stealing. There are no limits to where they will go to retrieve this drug so that they can feed their addiction. The problem with this program is that it won’t help to ween these addicts off using heroin. It is only trying to save the city from rising crime rates that they’re up to. By providing the drug, these addicts will be off the streets, which in turn will prevent them from committing minor street crimes. This will also keep the heroin users out of the hospital. It is pointless that the hospitals have to deal with people that want to use bad drugs or unsanitary needles and find themselves being unable to afford hospital bills and hard to cope without the drug. This program gives people free heroin in the cleanest way possible. This will in turn fix the city but not the addiction that these people face.

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In Vancouver, droves of heroin addicts are committing crimes in support of their illicit habit. In response a pilot program called “Free Heroin for Addicts” has been making waves in the attempt to provide to provide free heroin to addicts to potentially reduce the number of thefts and breaking and entering committed. Addicts will do whatever they can to get their hands on their next fix and this severely hampers their ability to live healthy and productive lives. “Free Heroin for Addicts” is not a cure for the city; however, it is more like a band aid in the city’s attempts to provide heroin to those severely addicted in order to keep them off the streets, out of the hospital, and the system in general. The program while good for the city, is not an attempt to help those afflicted with addiction but to clean up the streets from petty crime by giving out free heroin for use in sanitary conditions.