It is Counterintuitive to say that death is meant to be splattered on the walls of a journalist’s room. To have it be so crudely waved around like a moment to be captured as if it were a moment not unlike those of film. 15-year-old Fabienne Charisma was a young Girl in Haiti during its period of earthquakes, who tragically died by police on January 19th, 2010, and is now being used as a symbol to rally people to Haitia’s aid.
Though the gesture itself is kind, the photo of Fabienne was deemed unethically ambiguous and a sort of violation of death. To ask, Why a photographer’s first thought when seeing a young girl dead on the ground after a disaster, was to capture the moment and use it as a symbol is beyond what any person who saw that photo would dream. To show the whole world such a dreadful sight in hopes of help when all around so much more destruction and death by nature’s hands are around them, they chose the one death by human hands to cascade their thoughts and prayers to.
It is a complicated scenario that leads to many topical conversations on the usage of photography for said disaster, such as where we draw the line between right and wrong to photograph the death of a person and to have been known as a falsehood more than anything else.
Counterintuitive Fall 2024 
KFury, I’ve been struggling to find a metaphor for your energetic—frantic, even!—summary. It has all the twisty complexity of an Olympic gymnastic uneven parallel bars routine, but your sentences lose track of how many times they’ve spun and your gymnast face-plants into the mat.
I’d love to help you keep the energy and the audacity but practice enough control so that your readers can follow the routine and your gymnast plants the landing.
A thorough unpacking of your sentences would be much longer than your summary and would probably annoy you more than motivate you, so can I offer some simpler sentences that, to my mind at least, convey the same analysis you bring to the project?
If I could grade you on ambition and verve alone, you’d do very well here, KFury, but your writing has to succeed in communicating your ideas clearly to your readers to be graded well.
You can stand on what you’ve done, or incorporate my version into a new one (If you do, be sure to object to the photographer’s failure to get permissions from the family for the images, and be sure to tell us how many thousands died in the earthquake), or start fresh with a new approach to combine your high rhetoric with clear language this time.
Put your post back into Feedback Please, or into Grade Please, following any significant improvements.