Section 9:
At home after school, she makes Katie a pancake snack and then, while Katie shows me the website for a summer camp that teaches military spy skills, Brannan gets back to work. Because she also helps thousands of other people—measured by website and social-media interactions—through Family of a Vet, a nonprofit created “to help you find your way, find the information you need, and find a way not only to cope with life after combat…but to survive and thrive!” Brannan founded the organization in 2007, after panicked Googling led her to the website of Vietnam Veteran Wives (VVW) when Caleb returned from his second tour. Life after the first tour had been pretty normal. “Things were a little…off,” Caleb was edgy, distant, but he did not forget entire conversations minutes later, did not have to wait for a stable mental-health day and good moment between medication doses to be intimate with his wife, and then when he finally tried, pray to Christ for one of the times when it’s good sex, not one of the times when a car door slams outside and triggers him, or the emotion becomes so unbearable that he freezes, gets up, and walks wordlessly out the door.
All that didn’t happen until after the second tour. Brannan was in a terrible place, she says—until she talked to Danna Hughes, founder of VVW. Danna had been through much of the exact same turmoil, decades ago, and had opened a center to help get Vietnam vets benefits and educate their spouses and communities about their condition. “What choice do I have?” Brannan asks about running her own organization. “This is the only reason I am well. People care when you tell them. They just don’t know. They want to help and they want to understand, so I just have to keep going and educating.”
1.) Brannan gets back to work Because she also helps thousands of other people—measured by website and social-media interactions—through Family of a Vet, a nonprofit created
This section contains factual and credible that the author describes Brannan’s capabilities in what she does in her line of work. It’s a factual claim that Brannan helps thousands of people by credible claims from the measures by websites and social media interactions though Family of Vet.
2.) “to help you find your way, find the information you need, and find a way not only to cope with life after combat…but to survive and thrive!”
This whole quote is a proposal claim of the words “to help you” and using the word find to show what the company’s motto is to the people. The biggest proposal claim that was used in the companies motto is “to survive and thrive” to get to the main purpose. By helping someone to find their way and not to feel regret after a tragic event is by prosper, and flourish.
3.) “Things were a little…off,” Caleb was edgy, distant, but he did not forget entire conversations minutes later, did not have to wait for a stable mental-health day and good moment between medication doses to be intimate with his wife, and then when he finally tried, pray to Christ for one of the times when it’s good sex, not one of the times when a car door slams outside and triggers him, or the emotion becomes so unbearable that he freezes, gets up, and walks wordlessly out the door.
This part is an illustrative claims where the author compared heaven and hell towards Caleb praying to Christ like he was in heaven when he was having a good make out sessions than hearing noises that would make him feel like he was in hell. It describes him like how he found his holy peace when he prays Christ than being stiff from abrupt noises that would send him to hell.
4.) “What choice do I have?” Brannan asks about running her own organization. “This is the only reason I am well. People care when you tell them. They just don’t know. They want to help and they want to understand, so I just have to keep going and educating.”
This whole section is what Brannan said based on her moral claims about what had happen after the second tour. The main question “What choice do I have?” stood out before the reasoning because it brought Brannan feeling cornered. The author puts the evaluation before the moral to explain why Brannan said those words because of the cause of the second tour which effected Brannan choices.
3.) “Things were a little…off,” Caleb was edgy, distant, but he did not forget entire conversations minutes later, did not have to wait for a stable mental-health day and good moment between medication doses to be intimate with his wife, and then when he finally tried, pray to Christ for one of the times when it’s good sex, not one of the times when a car door slams outside and triggers him, or the emotion becomes so unbearable that he freezes, gets up, and walks wordlessly out the door.
This part is an illustrative claims where the author compared heaven and hell towards Caleb praying to Christ like he was in heaven when he was having a good make out sessions than hearing noises that would make him feel like he was in hell. It describes him like how he found his holy peace when he prays Christ than being stiff from abrupt noises that would send him to hell.
—What you hint at without saying it is that the whole section is a long Comparative Claim.
I wish I could agree that any of this has something to do with prayer, but I think the allusion to Christ is nothing more than the author overhearing someone say, “I hope to God this is one of the good days.”
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