Video: “The Narrator”
0:00: We see a young man siting on his bed scrolling on what looks like a phone. Perhaps playing a game or browsing social media. His room is very blue colored with only a few dashed of other colors spread throughout, maybe still showing his baby blue innocence and having the dashes of other colors representing some outside sources influencing him in someway.
0:01: Then a sharply dressed man in a suit walks in the Kids room. Either for a business meeting or what have you, he has a odd shading to himself as if he doesn’t belong in the same space as the young man almost. While the young man very much fits in the space, the man in the suit is in his own world somehow.
0:02 – 0:05: The man in the suit begins to speak to the young man in a very formal and almost instructive way on the temptations of young people now a days, saying such temptation as Electronic cigarette and skateboarding to name a few.Also to add we get a better look at the man in the suit’s his odd shading, which is that of what seems to be a old timey television style from I’d say the 70’s or 80’s with a somewhat static look. As if he crawled out of those very TV’s like the girl from the ring.So saying “temptations of young people now a days” would definitely feel a little ironic thinking about.
0:06 – 0:07:We move back towards the young man listening to the man in the suit with a very confused and perplexed look on his face.The phone is still in hand but his eyes are more focused on the man and the odd information he is providing to the him.
0:08 – 0:10:We return to the man in the suit talking about how much nicotine a vape pod contains saying it can be as much as a pack a cigarettes.
0:11 – 0:14:Now we have a more close up shot with the man in the suit as he talks on how vaping can get the young man into a life long addiction and cause lung damage, he shows this with a plastic replica of a human lung he shows the boy.
0:15: We’re back to the young man who unsurprisingly still has the same confused look on his face about this random sudden lecture in his room.
0:16 – 0:18:As we’re back to the man in the suit as focus.We see him pull out a foldable sign from the top of the frame and educates the boy to “think twice, before making a poor decision”.
0:19 – 0:23:Then we are shifted in to a more meta engagement with white text being put on screen stating that “The health Film guy isn’t the best person to talk to your kid about vaping”. Almost stating how we must debunk our older ways of confronting poor addictions that could threaten kids lives and well beings.
0:24: We are then put into a close with the young man as his eyes shift towards another figure enter his room, as we here a female voice asking if he has a few minutes.
0:25: We then see the other figure being the young mans mother wanting to talk to him few minutes as she sits down next to him. Most likely about the very same subject of addiction but this time with a more familiar and loving voice to listen.One that won’t seem so instructive and demanding, but one that truly understands the complicated mess it can be to be young and adventurous and just so full of life.
0:26 – 0:30:The rest is ad provide with the young man and his mother talking in the background of a website link title “TalkAboutVaping.org”. As well as in the bottom of the link there is the partnership of the American Lung Association and the ad council this PSA’s production was made from.
Summary: The video opens with a young man in a blue-toned room, Either playing or scrolling on his phone. He’s interrupted by a sharply dressed man in a suit, who talks to him about modern temptations like vaping. The suited man has an odd, vintage TV-like appearance, creating a stark contrast with the young man’s environment. As he lectures about the dangers of vaping comparing its nicotine content to cigarettes and demonstrating with a plastic lung the young man appears confused. The man then encourages him to “think twice” before making poor choices. The video takes a meta turn, stating that the “Health Film guy” may not be the best choice for discussing vaping with your kids, highlighting the need for more relatable approaches. It concludes with the young man’s mother entering, suggesting a more understanding and personal conversation about addiction, contrasting the formal lecture he just experienced.
Counterintuitive Fall 2024 
KFury, you don’t appear to want to tell me much about what you’re seeing. Remember, please, you are my guide to a scene I cannot see. I depend on you for every detail you can share that would help me visualize and interpret the scene.
0:00: We see a young man siting on his bed
—A bed can be a hospital bed. It can be a bed that is shared by a couple. It can be a wicked jailhouse single. You call it “his bed.” Does that mean it’s in his bedroom? And how did you conclude that?
scrolling on what looks like a phone.
—It’s hard to imagine what angle would hint at “scrolling on a phone” without showing the phone clearly enough to know whether it’s a phone or just what “looks like a phone.” Are we viewing this scene from the ceiling? from the floor? from behind the young man?
Perhaps playing a game or browsing social media.
—But not frantically sending a distress call? How did you decide this is leisure activity? Not applying for a loan online? Not doing homework?
—What sort of video is this, by the way? A commercial advertisement for a new phone? A public service reminder to register to vote? A “return to your original programming”? It’s only been a second, but you’ve already started to form judgments. It’s your job to share them.
—Just as it’s your job to begin in your first sentence to let your readers know exactly what your thesis will be.
His room
—His phone on his bed in his room. How do you know?
is very blue, colored with only a few dashes of other colors spread throughout, maybe still showing his baby blue innocence and having the dashes of other colors representing some outside sources influencing him in someway.
—Fascinating. I can’t wait to see what that looks like. Thank you for sharing your impression.
0:01: Then a sharply dressed man in a suit walks in the Kids room.
—Believe it or not, to those of us in the dark here, it matters whether we see that man enter “from behind,” as if we are entering the room with him, or whether we see him enter through the door face first, as if from the Kid’s perspective. In other words, which are we, the Kid or the Man? Are we intruding on the Kid or are we the Kid facing an intrusion?
Either for a business meeting or what have you,
—Strange first impression, but I appreciate that you’re trying to analyze it. Is it the suit that suggests a business meeting? But . . . a business meeting to be held in the Kid’s bedroom? Pretty sinister. Couldn’t it equally likely be Dad come in to hurry up the young man for his ride to school? What are we going by here?
he has a odd shading to himself as if he doesn’t belong in the same space as the young man almost.
—Odd shading meaning the video creators have passed his image through a filter to create a spooky or alien effect?
While the young man very much fits in the space, the man in the suit is in his own world somehow.
—We’ll have to go with that mysteriousness for awhile, I guess. I can’t wait to see it for myself. Regardless of what I find, I’ll still be looking for improvements to the first couple of seconds that will satisfy my curiosity about the questions I’ve raised.
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Wow. You did not begin to prepare me for what I saw in the first second. Yes, it’s clearly the Kid’s bedroom, but you CANNOT just say so without providing at least a few of the clues that made that instantly obvious to both you and me. About that blue . . . to me it suggested a big sky and then, when I saw the astronaut poster, it said space. When the alien enters, he gives me an old-style science fiction vibe. Don’t wait for the Summary to share these impressions. The place to SAY WHAT YOU THINK is while you’re describing WHAT YOU’RE LOOKING AT. Carry on, please.