Rebuttal Argument Rewrite—GamersPet

A Daily Dose of Caffeine Addiction

I firmly believe that my statement about caffeine being a psychologically addicting substance based on researchers’ reports about how caffeine does to our brains is factual. Of course, there is no surprise that there are other alternative opinions about what caffeine is based on their hypothesis.

An article in “National Library of Medicine,” during the era of COVID-19 by researchers, Mohammad Aghamohammadi, and his team proposed an idea of vitamins B1, B3, B6, and caffeine as key ingredients for a drug design to fight the pandemic. Scientists in the article believed they could use caffeine as part of a chemical reaction where the effects could help our respiratory system by helping our muscles relax to improve our breathing. I approved the science and logic behind Aghamohammadi’s hypothesis of using caffeine to counter the pandemic. Still, if that were the case then that would mean that we would take twice the amount of caffeine than usual since certain foods that we eat have already provided for us.

Tea and soda are the most common food products for children to obtain and consume based on the article Trends inCaffeine Intake Among US Children and Adolescents,” which proves that caffeine intake builds up slowly to become part of our immune system. Amy M Branum, one of the researchers of the article, claims that approximately 73% of children consumed caffeine on a given day which is a significant increase from 63% of kids ages 2 to 5 years old to 75% among the older age group. Our preferences for tea and soda will indeed change as we grow, but that’s when coffee and energy drinks will come into our lives where we cannot escape caffeine itself.

We already know how COVID-19 affects a person’s body by saying that it has similar effects to the flu, but it goes further past beyond the limits to the point that the disease has become severe. It is not ideal for Aghamohammadis team to double the amount of caffeine in our immune system if we already have caffeine in us from our early childhood. The government would need to find a way to get rid of Covid-19, however, the method of adding caffeine into a vaccine wouldn’t benefit us entirely because the negative side effects will affect our minds and bodies.

People were skeptical and scared when the government announced the release of the vaccine because the effects were either minor or severe. It’s a fact that adding more caffeine to the vaccine would mean that we would be overdosing ourselves to where we would likely get the chance to get a headache.

Another hypothesis suggests that caffeine is a physical drug that enhances our bodies, especially among athletes in sports. Researchers from the article “Caffeine-containing energy drinks Improve Physical Performance in Female Soccer Players” on the website of Springer Nature Link, claimed that consuming caffeine can help improve peak performance in sports games. Respectfully, our brains are the main controls of our bodies than the other way around. I acknowledge that caffeine can boost physical since it acts like a stimulant, but the problem with their argument is that they only talk about the benefits that caffeine can provide for female athletes instead of the negative side effects that come after it.

The reason is that they admitted that their report findings aren’t complete because they only gathered information about short-term effects rather than long-term effects. Athletes who use caffeine before their competition match will eventually lose their momentum and focus as time goes on during a late game. There will be a sudden change in an athlete’s mental health because of caffeine where minor pains such as headaches will hinder their physical performance in sports games.

To further support my argument about caffeine being a psychologically addicting substance is back to caffeine that can mimic as an antidepressant drug. In the article “Caffeine-induced Augmentation of Antidepressant Therapy,” by Pravin Popatrao Kale and his team in Science Direct, caffeine can take in form of a psychomotor stimulant which means a drug that can react towards the central nervous system. Depression is a huge problem that can’t be eliminated since over the past few years, there has been an increasing number of prescriptions for antidepressants. Caffeine can “lift” a person’s mood up drastically for those who seek the spark they need to get through their day. The psychological effect plays a key role when it comes to controlling our behaviors where the effects can trigger the dopaminergic system that causes us to feel “happy”,

Even though drinking coffee can “lift” our spirits and soothe our anxiety, we would soon feel the urge to grab another cup of coffee to feel euphoric again since the effects are not long-lasting. There are other methods of reducing depression such as medications, but we would rather lean towards caffeinated food products since they look visually pleasing than pills. Drinking caffeinated products while being depressed is not the only reason why a person would drink it in the first place. I’ve encountered people who drink caffeinated products for different reasons such as the joy of feeling the taste of coffee even though they are not depressed. Another case that I encountered was when I went to a local coffee bean shop where I saw a slogan that said, “Caffeine is not a drug, it is a vitamin,” which is a huge bold claim to define what caffeine is.

I firmly believe that obtaining caffeine is a byproduct of a psychological drug addiction that makes us feel alive or happy. I’m continuously drinking coffee every day because of the “spark” that caffeine gives me to start my day, regardless of the negative side effects. As long as we look after ourselves by calculating the dosage amount, we eat or drink that involves caffeine then we would be able to decrease our chances of suffering the side effects. Caffeine may not be described as addictive, but the effects that come from it can be described as a psychological addiction.

Reference

Lara, B., Gonzalez-Millán, C., Salinero, J.J. et al. Caffeine-containing energy drink improves physical performance in female soccer players. Amino Acids 46, 1385–1392 (2014). https://doi-org.ezproxy.rowan.edu/10.1007/s00726-014-1709-z

Pravin Popatrao Kale 1, et al. “Caffeine-Induced Augmentation of Antidepressant Therapy.” Journal of Experimental & Clinical Medicine, Elsevier, 23 Oct. 2010, http://www.sciencedirect.com/science/article/pii/S1878331710000124?casa_token=qIgsBPashCoAAAAA%3A5k38trTBGFJNWMtu3cRM9FNUX4WMRkjXvxebK_vq3xteqM2FJPMQqg4YVh-1Wf7XEPUWrSHEm6c.

Trends in Caffeine Intake among Us Children And …, publications.aap.org/pediatrics/article/133/3/386/32320/Trends-in-Caffeine-Intake-Among-US-Children-and. Accessed 25 Nov. 2024.

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5 Responses to Rebuttal Argument Rewrite—GamersPet

  1. davidbdale's avatar davidbdale says:

    Very nice opening, GamersPet! I love how boldly you proclaim your position. 🙂

    However, you’ve created a Fragment, which is not a sentence.

    These are sentences:

    1. Caffeine is a substance.
    2. Caffeine is a psychologically addictive substance.
    3. I firmly state my claim that caffeine is a psychologically addicting substance.

    These are fragments:

    1. Caffeine, a psychologically addictive substance.
      • Lacks a verb
    2. Caffeine, the most psychologically addictive substance known to man.
      • Lacks a verb for Caffeine
    3. While caffeine is a psychologically addictive substance.
      • Has a verb for caffeine, but is NOT an independent clause
      • Has a subordinator (while) that makes it a dependent clause

    Back to sentences again:

    1. While caffeine is a psychologically addictive substance, coffee’s effects are not immediately obvious.
      • Has a dependent clause
        • While caffeine is a psychologically addictive substance
      • Also has an independent clause
        • coffee’s effects are not immediately obvious.

    I hope that helps.

    Check the rest of your work for fragments and fix them. I found two more.

  2. davidbdale's avatar davidbdale says:

    Your job as the writer is to ANSWER questions, GamersPet, not ask them. And certainly you shouldn’t be using questions AS arguments. I’ll rephrase the first one for you. You change the rest.

    1. If that were the case, then why is it required to increase the amount of caffeine when we already have been eating food that contains caffeine throughout our whole lives?
      • If that were the case, we wouldn’t have to increase the amount of caffeine we ingest beyond what’s in the foods we already eat.
    2. If we as kids are already exposed to eating caffeinated products from the start, then does that mean the vaccine is giving us twice the amount then what we need?
    3. What happens when athletes who consume caffeine products before their competitive match eventually start to lose their momentum later in the game if the game lasts for a very long time?
    4. Would there be a sudden change towards their mental health due to the effects of caffeine or will there be a sudden change in physical performance?
  3. davidbdale's avatar davidbdale says:

    You are also very fond of “stringy” sentences that are technically correct but which “don’t know when to quit.” They are very tiring for readers following your logic through several steps in a row. I’ll fix the first one for you.

    1. An article that was published in “National Library of Medicine,” during the era of Covid-19 where researchers, Mohammad Aghamohammadi, and his team were studying the roles of vitamins B1, B3, B6, and caffeine as potential role ingredients for a drug design to fight against Covid-19.
      • This one, despite its length, is actually a FRAGMENT because it lacks a verb for “article.”
      • Here’s one possible fix for it:
      • An article published in “National Library of Medicine” during the era of Covid-19 BY researcher Mohammad Aghamohammadi and his team SUGGESTED roles FOR vitamins B1, B3, B6, and caffeine as ingredients for a drug DESIGNED to fight Covid-19.
    2. We are already well informed of how COVID-19 affects a person’s body by describing it as a flu which acts like a flu, but it can go over the limits of what a flu can’t do.
    3. Caffeine inside our bodies builds up slowly at a young age based on the article “Trends in Caffeine Intake Among US Children and Adolescents” where tea and soda are easy to obtain and are the most consumed caffeine products for children.
    4. Of course, during the pandemic, the government would need to find a way to get rid of Covid-19; however, the method of adding caffeine into a vaccine wouldn’t benefit us entirely because the caffeine side effects can easily affect our minds and bodies.
    5. We would have to make an ethical, and moral choice of whether we should take the vaccine for COVID-19 because the most common adverse side effects are headaches, trouble breathing, and tiredness which are the same aftereffects as what caffeine does.
    6. What happens when athletes who consume caffeine products before their competitive match eventually start to lose their momentum later in the game if the game lasts for a very long time?
      • Athletes who consume caffeine products before their competitive match eventually lose their momentum in long games.
    7. This is how the effects of being addicted come into play because caffeine can trigger our dopaminergic system which plays a key role in controlling our behaviors.
    8. When we first consume caffeine, we feel our spirits “lifted” with subtle joys and reduce anxiety that only lasts for a short amount of time until we feel the urge or a need to obtain that euphoric feeling again.
      • The “lift” to our spirits from consuming caffeine are not long-lasting. OR
      • While coffee briefly lifts our spirits and calms our anxiety, we soon need another dose to feel euphoric again.
    9. Even though there are other methods of reducing depression, we would lean towards food products with caffeine rather than medications since food looks more pleasing to our eyes than pills or tablets.

    The number of words in a “stringy” sentence is not the primary problem. Mostly they contain too many clauses.

    NOT STRINGY:

    The short-haired stray I brought home looks comfortable on the dog bed.

    STRINGY:

    The dog that I found did not have an owner but it had short hair and since I have brought it home and put it on a bed that is specifically for dogs it looks comfortable.

    I hope you find this helpful, GamersPet.

  4. davidbdale's avatar davidbdale says:

    One more note, GamersPet. I’ve been providing Feedback on all your short arguments without seeing any Revisions from you. Bring that into balance, please. I’m happy to work on your essays as hard as you do.

  5. davidbdale's avatar davidbdale says:

    Even this third short argument, which did not make it into your Portfolio, shows massive improvement and responsiveness to criticism, GamersPet. I’m very impressed with the work you’ve done late in the semester.

    Regraded.

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