Author Archives: Patrick The Star

Visual rewrite- Patrickthestar1

Posted on November 18, 2024 by Patrick The Star

1.0:00-0:03 :The opening scene of this baby in its chair and his father or caretaker picks up his pacifier that fell on the floor while this scene is only a few second it serves to empathize with viewers as it … Continue reading →

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PTSD Claims—Patrickthestar

Posted on November 18, 2024 by Patrick The Star

Claim Type:Casual Claim- this is a causal claim because of the assertion that multiple concussions can cause “serious long term injury” and as a result of the concussions time is needed to heal            2.”A fight ensued. Hovda says some of … Continue reading →

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robust verbs- Patrickthestar1

Posted on November 18, 2024 by Patrick The Star

revised paragraph: Heroin addiction in Vancouver is causing a crime wave as addicts commit crimes to fund their habits. The “free heroin for addicts” program attempts to lessen these crimes, but it fails to address the root of the problem. … Continue reading →

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Elevator instructions-Patrickthestar1

Posted on November 12, 2024 by Patrick The Star

1.Stay on the first floor until the Up Button is pressed for a higher floor. 2.Wait for all passengers to get on or off before responding to any up commands. 3.After 20 seconds close the door when closing doors if … Continue reading →

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Summaries–Patrickthestar1

Posted on November 12, 2024 by Patrick The Star

It seems counterintuitive that Fabienne Cherismas death, A fifteen year old girl shot by police following the 2010 earthquake in Haiti could be anything other than a senseless tragedy. Fabienne was killed amid the chaos and a period of desperation … Continue reading →

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Proposal+5 -PatrickTheStar

Posted on October 1, 2024 by Patrick The Star

The pandemic has disproportionately affected marginalized communities, exposing pre-existing mental health disparities. This proposal aims to explore the systemic inequities that have contributed to these disparities, focusing on how the pandemic has highlighted gaps in mental health care access and … Continue reading →

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