Annotated Bibliography – LoverofCatsandMatcha

When I first began working on my research essay, I had intended to dissect the value of interpersonal relationships on one’s development and integration into society. However, as my research progressed, I found a growing interest in the mindset and background of school shooters. To be more precise, what motivates them to commit such heinous acts. In my research, I narrowed it down to three primary factors: inherent mental illnesses, home life, and peers. However, it is imperative to note that there is no way to quantify the percentage of school shooters that were impacted by one category more so than the others– moreover, it is impossible to develop an adequate conclusion with only 3000 words. Despite this, there is substantial evidence to defend the likelihood of the three aforementioned factors being at the root of most school shooters. 

SOURCE ONE

Leng, M., & Song, H. (2023). Contributors to Antisocial Behavior in Adolescence from the Perspective of Developmental Psychology: A Case Study on a School Mass Shooting. Journal of Education, Humanities and Social Sciences, 9, 158-165. https://doi.org/10.54097/ehss.v9i.6442

Background: The signs leading up to a school shooter executing his plan. “Meanwhile, at the end of October 2021, Ethan’s best friend moved away and his family dog died, which caused him to become depressed.” This quote is among many others that will help to develop a foundation for my claim that inadequate socialization can cause mental disturbances on a person’s psyche. In this specific reference, the school shooter’s behaviors leading up to the event indicated mental instability, including the change in contact with his best friend. By losing that socialization, that foundation for human contact, the perpetrator fell down a slippery slope. 

How I used it: I used this quote to showcase how the lack of socialization, or the change in socialization, in one’s environment can negatively impact their psyche and perception of the world around them if left unchecked. The weeks leading up to the incident are indicators that the perpetrator was already thinking about committing his crime for an extended period of time before it occurred. If he had been properly socialized, if he had someone there for him, he wouldn’t have been considering those things. In my final research paper, this source is consistently quoted, as the Ethan Crumbley case provides significant evidence for home life and peers being contributing factors. 

SOURCE TWO

Alevizopoulos Giorgos. (2017). School shootings: A Review of the Characteristics and the Psychopathology of the Perpetrators. Journal of Forensic Sciences & Criminal Investigation2(5). https://doi.org/10.19080/jfsci.2017.02.555598

Background: The common factors of a school shooting, and the signs that were missed. “‘Shooters were considered outcasts and “weird” but not all of them were “loners”’ [12]. Their peer groups shared analogous interests in violence, making even harder the ‘reality check’ on behalf of the perpetrator [14].” This quote is a strong indicator of what a “typical school shooter” can be described as. Of course, there is no one category, but it is important to note similar aggressive and antisocial behaviors that may indicate hostility. 

How I used it: I used this source in a similar fashion to how I used its predecessor. It will serve as a valuable foundation for my argument of the poor socialization of individuals that leads to poor integration into society and increased hostility and violent behaviors. Even in cases when the perpetrator did have friends, those friends were seen as negative influences, and similar to the individual that committed the crime. The shooter’s peers often encouraged violence, and shared many of the same ideals. This is in great contrast to the typical assumption that school shooters were loners. 

SOURCE 3

Reindl, M., Burkhard Gniewosz, & Reinders, H. (2016). Socialization of emotion regulation strategies through friends. Journal of Adolescence49(1), 146–157. https://doi.org/10.1016/j.adolescence.2016.03.008

Background: This source examines the relationship between socialization through friendships and the positive impacts it has on emotional regulation habits. It insinuates that the more socialized an individual is, the better emotional regulation habits they develop as they grow up. 

How I used it: This source was valuable in setting up the foundation of my view for my final thesis, and overall paper. Though my original idea for my thesis was to observe friendship, this source encouraged me to delve further into how socialization can impact an individual. In fact, this source led me down the rabbit hole to disproving my original hypothesis regarding socialization’s impact. As we observe in Source 2, whether or not an individual has friends does not impact whether or not they are violent. Even school shooters could have friends: despite what the assumption typically is.

SOURCE 4

Parker, R. (2013). A Qualitative Data Analysis: The Effects Of Loneliness On Social Interactions Among Middle School Students6(3). https://doi.org/10.5561/5062

Background: This source displays data surrounding how loneliness impacts social interactions in middle school students. During one of the most fundamentally influential parts of a young adult’s life, they are their most impressionable in middle school. This is, typically, the time that they start developing the personality traits and belief systems that are going to stay with them into adulthood. Individuals in this age group that are displaying lonely tendencies are going to struggle with social interactions at that time, and they are going to be unable to adequately acclimate to social norms as they grow up and enter the world. 

How I used it: This qualitative dataset provided an interesting take on socialization during a pivotal point in one’s life. As these middle school students grow into teenagers, and begin to have access to more things, the socialization that they experience may determine what kind of person that they become. This data aided my initial research, and my hypothesis that those who are lonely and poorly socialized are not as well acclimated to society as those who have friend groups and consistently socialize. This data helped to develop my final claim, and the concept that I introduce regarding how peers can impact each other. The people we surround ourselves with can 

SOURCE 5

Soares, F. B., Anatoliy Gruzd, Jacobson, J., & Hodson, J. (2023). To troll or not to troll: Young adults’ anti-social behaviour on social media. PLoS ONE18(5), e0284374–e0284374. https://doi.org/10.1371/journal.pone.0284374

Background: The internet behaviors of the “antisocial” individuals of our society are much different than the average social media user. Many individuals that are not adequately acclimated in society will log online to troll people, and post crude content to illicit reactions from unsuspecting users of various platforms. But why? Are they seeking these reactions as revenge for their social inadequacy? Is this their way of interacting with others? Do they want attention or companionship? 


How I used it: These behaviors raise more questions than answers, but provided interesting insight into the behaviors of those who are deemed antisocial. I used this data to observe some of the less extreme behaviors of those who are not as well adjusted into society. Not every socially awkward individual is inherently a violent person. Some may just not be comfortable interacting with society face to face, and prefer to retire to the digital sphere, so that their face is hidden, and they have less social norms and obligations. Since my paper was focused on an extreme side of the social spectrum, this data helped me to understand the less intense aspects of being socially inept.

SOURCE 6

Tuvblad, C., & Baker, L. A. (2011). Human Aggression Across the Lifespan. Advances in Genetics, 171–214. https://doi.org/10.1016/b978-0-12-380858-5.00007-1

Background: Genetic and environmental factors both contribute to aggression. Around 50% of aggressive behavior is due to genetics, while the other half is influenced by personal life experiences. Some people may be more impacted by their environment because of their genetic makeup, with family problems and social challenges playing a role. To test this, studies with twins and adoptees were conducted.

How I used it: This source was invaluable in attributing hereditary factors to one’s aggression. By referencing the twin studies, I was able to establish a connection between parents and offspring that could not be boiled down solely to social aspects. SInce mental illnesses can be genetically passed down, this source was imperative in establishing that connection. Depending on their parents, people can be more predisposed to different things, like addiction or depression, even if they do not interact with the people passing those traits down. 

SOURCE 7

Langman, P. (2008). Rampage school shooters: A typology. Aggression and Violent Behavior14(1), 79–86. https://doi.org/10.1016/j.avb.2008.10.003

Background: This article examines 10 school shooters, categorizing them into three types: traumatized, psychotic, and psychopathic. Traumatized shooters had abusive backgrounds, psychotic shooters had schizophrenia-related disorders, and psychopathic shooters displayed narcissism and lack of empathy. Additional factors like family structure, role models, and peer influence were considered, though most individuals with these traits don’t commit violence.

How I used it: I used this source in my rebuttal, though I wish that I had found it sooner. It provided thoughtful insight and examples about ten separate school shooters, and who they were before their respective shootings. This data proved imperative in my development of a counterargument, as it provided a basis for me to poke holes in. However, some of the data presented in this source also supported my conclusion, and assisted my knowledge when I revised my other papers.

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Annotated Bibliography – Burnbook04

  1. “The Noble Quran – the Holy Book of Muslims.” QuranOnline.net, quranonline.net/.

Background: The Quran addresses a wide range of subjects, including theology, worship, guidance for personal conduct, and social laws, with an emphasis on monotheism, justice, and compassion. Unlike previous scriptures like the Bible and the Torah, Muslims consider it to be the last and most comprehensive revelation from God. It is an essential part of Islamic worship and culture, and Muslims all around the world memorize and recite it.

How I used it: I felt that I would be able to comprehend and see the views and the extent to which the Quran influences Islam if I read it and conducted a more thorough analysis. Having a reference was crucial when it came time for me to examine the Bible.

2. “Matthew 1 | NIV Bible | YouVersion.” YouVersion | the Bible App | Bible.com, 2015, http://www.bible.com/bible/111/MAT.1.NIV?parallel=116. Accessed 26 Oct. 2024.

Background: The Old Testament and the New Testament are the two primary parts of the Bible, which is considered the sacred text of Christianity. Christians view it as the basis text for their religion and practice and as the inspired word of God. These volumes, which include Joshua, Kings, and Chronicles, describe the history of the Israelites, their victories, their conflicts, and their leaders, notably the kings David and Solomon.

How I used it: Anyone with a brain could see that the Bible is the primary source of Christianity, providing insight into human nature, God’s will, and the way to redemption. I wanted to learn more. I believed that reading the Bible carefully and consciously would be crucial to developing a deeper comprehension of the Christian religion. This approach entails more than just reading; it also calls for applying the text’s lessons personally and giving critical thought to the text’s historical, cultural, and theological background. I therefore utilized the Bible to think before comparing it to the Quran.

3. “Guide to the Book of Genesis | Key Information and Resources.” BibleProject, bibleproject.com/guides/book-of-genesis/.

‌Background: The article breaks down the beginning of the Bible’s genesis and highlights important themes. It facilitates a more thorough comprehension of how things happened and who was involved in the world’s upbringing.

How I used it: The article helped me have a better knowledge of origin. I’ve read Genesis several times on my own and can recite every story, but I wanted to highlight some of the most important ideas so I could compare them to the Quran later.

4. “First Chapter of the Quran.” Islamreligion.com, 2022, http://www.islamreligion.com/articles/10190/first-chapter-of-quran. Accessed 3 Dec. 2024.

Background: a dissection of the Quran and a more profound comprehension of the first chapter and the true meaning of Islam.

How I used it: I read a dissected version of the Quran online to see if it would be organized similarly to the Bible’s main ideas and perhaps support my theory that the Bible and the Quran are quite similar. In order to understand the beginning and the origin of Muhammad, I needed to have essential points.

5. Fadi, Al. “The Quran vs. the Bible.” The Billy Graham Evangelistic Association of Canada, 18 Apr. 2012, http://www.billygraham.ca/stories/the-quran-vs-the-bible/.

Background: Al Fadi, a Saudi Arabian Wahabi Muslim, became a follower of Jesus Christ in 2001. He is currently pursuing a master’s degree in biblical communication. He has joined forces with a few other ex-Muslims to write “The Quran Dilemma,” which examines the Quran’s composition, content, interpretations by various Islamic schools, and wording about the Bible. Decision recently asked Fadi to clarify some of these significant distinctions.

How I used it: to observe from a new perspective the reasons behind a person’s desire to convert or their attitude toward both religions. In the hopes that it would enable me to compare and contrast the two, I also wanted to gain a deeper understanding of the meaning of both religions from the perspective of someone who had converted.

6. “Do You Know These 7 Differences between the Bible and Quran?” Zondervan Academic, 2016, zondervanacademic.com/blog/do-you-know-these-7-differences-between-the-bible-and-quran.

Background: Although almost every religion has a sacred text, not all sacred texts are created equal in terms of their nature, authorship, transmission, and application. This is revealed by Nabeel Qureshi in his examination of the facts supporting Islam and Christianity in No God but One: Allah or Jesus. Qureshi highlights seven significant distinctions between the Bible and the Quran in this provocative and illuminating study. “There is no doubt that both texts are revered by their respective people, but their applications, histories, and even their fundamental natures are interpreted differently” (104).

How I used it: an additional resource for contrasting and comparing, but more importantly, to determine what the Bible and the Quran don’t have in common and how I may use those commonalities.

7. Ciesielka, Wyatt. “Bible vs. Quran: Where Is the Truth?” Tomorrow’s World, 30 Apr. 2014, http://www.tomorrowsworld.org/magazines/2014/may-june/bible-vs-quran-where-is-the-truth.

Background: The Article talks about how The Holy Bible is acknowledged by true Christians as the infallible word of God, delivered to His people in flawless form. In its name, nominal Christians have carried out crusades and committed horrific crimes, sometimes against other nominal Christians and other times against people who hold other books in high regard, and how they engaged in violent deeds that the God of the Bible denounces as sin.

How I used it: I was interested in how each God was upheld and how each faith supported itself. To be able to compare their morals and how similar one faith was to the others, I also wanted to do the same with their morality and beliefs.

8. Sayyid Abdullah Al-Musawi. “What Is the Last Chapter of the Quran Revealed?” Islam4u | Islamic Online Educational Platform, 3 Dec. 2023, islam4u.pro/blog/what-is-the-last-chapter-of-the-quran-revealed/.

Background: Surah An-Nasr is the final full Surah from the Holy Quran to be revealed to the Messenger of Allah. The first revealed Surah is: In the name of Allah, the Most Gracious, the Most Merciful (Read in the name of your Lors, and the last revealed Surah is: In the name of Allah, the Most Gracious, the Most Merciful (When the victory of Allah has come and the conquest. This is the story that Imam Ali ibn Musa al-Ridha (peace be upon him) told about his father, Imam Musa ibn Ja’far.

How I used it: In order to truly gain a deeper comprehension of the Quran, I wanted to compare and contrast the final chapters in the same manner that I did with the first. My primary goal was to determine whether it was related to the Bible or any other comparable references.

9. “Book of Revelation | Guide with Key Information and Resources.” BibleProject, bibleproject.com/guides/book-of-revelation/.

Background: The author introduces himself as John in the first paragraph, which may allude to the author of the Gospel and the writings of John or to another early Church figure. In the first paragraph, John, whoever he was, makes it apparent that this book is a “revelation.” The Greek term apokalypsis, which describes a genre of literature present in the Hebrew Scriptures and other well-known Jewish writings, is employed here. According to Jewish apocalypses, a prophet had symbolic visions that showed God’s heavenly view of history, allowing the present to be understood in the context of history’s ultimate conclusion.

How I used it:I wanted to read the final chapter, much like I did with the Quran, to see if there were any parallels and to have a better comprehension of revelations. I was curious to see if the stories would match up or whether the same individuals or even locations would appear.

10. Cox, Daniel. “America’s Coming Religious Divide.” Institute for Family Studies, 31 Jan. 2023, ifstudies.org/blog/americas-coming-religious-divide.

Background: Two words sum up the most significant trend in American religion: uneven and steady. National polls have consistently revealed a decline in religious affiliation, attendance, and even belief in God for almost thirty years. However, these same surveys also reveal that there are significant regional, generational, and religious commitment differences in this national fall.

How I used it: examining the most common religion in America and the ways in which religion affects our daily lives. In addition, I wanted to know if it leads to arguments over who is right and who is wrong or if it’s a matter of waiting till the day comes.

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Annotated Bibliography – student12121

Barr, K. P., & Harrast, M. A. (2005). Evidence-Based Treatment of Foot and Ankle Injuries in Runners. Physical Medicine and Rehabilitation Clinics of North America, 16(3), 779–799. https://www.pmr.theclinics.com/article/S1047-9651(05)00018-5/fulltext 

Background: This article looks at the treatment of foot and ankle injuries most commonly sustained by runners. It goes through the injuries one by one and explains the causes and how to treat them.

How I used it: I used this article to see what injuries could come from increases in ankle eversion. It helped me understand what the risks were and what that specific change in movement could do.

Dudley, R. I., Pamukoff, D. N., Lynn, S. K., Kersey, R. D., & Noffal, G. J. (2017). A prospective comparison of lower extremity kinematics and kinetics between injured and non-injured collegiate cross country runners. Human Movement Science, 52, 197–202. https://doi.org/10.1016/j.humov.2017.02.007 

Background: This study looked at the form of collegiate athletes that were injured and collegiate athletes that were healthy and compared the differences between the two.

How I used it: I used this to help make the connection between ankle eversion and increased injury risk. Many of the injured athletes showed significantly greater levels of ankle eversion.

Fields, K. B., Sykes, J. C., Walker, K. M., & Jackson, J. C. (2010). Prevention of Running Injuries. Current Sports Medicine Reports, 9(3), 176–182. https://doi.org/10.1249/jsr.0b013e3181de7ec5 

Background: This study looked at the prevention of running injuries by looking at their causes.

How I used it: The article looked at sudden changes in routine and said that they could account for 72% of all running injuries. It also said that those running higher mileage are at higher risk. These two combined helped me establish that changes in routine and or form for a high mileage runner can be a huge injury risk.

Gijon-Nogueron, G., & Fernandez-Villarejo, M. (2015). Risk Factors and Protective Factors for Lower-Extremity Running Injuries. Journal of the American Podiatric Medical Association, 105(6), 532–540. https://doi.org/10.7547/14-069.1 

Background:  This study looked at the causes and risk factors for running injuries in the legs.

How I used it: I used the part that specifically mentions that small changes in gait and impact pattern affects the whole leg and increases the risk of injury. This helps me show that the small changes such as increased ankle eversion lead to injuries.

Hata, K., Noro, H., Takeshita, T., Yamazaki, Y., & Yanagiya, T. (2022). Leg stiffness during running in highly cushioned shoes with a carbon-fiber plate and traditional shoes. Gait & Posture. https://doi.org/10.1016/j.gaitpost.2022.03.021

Background: This study looks at the impact and loading rate of carbon-plated shoes and compares it to traditional shoes.

How I used it: I used it to shape my ideas around which areas of stress were impacted by the shoe. The study finds that impact levels and leg stiffness are not and that helped guide me in a different direction.

‌Hobson, B. (2023, May 31). Meet the coach, Claudio Berardelli. Runner’s World. https://www.runnersworld.com/uk/training/a43781904/claudio-berardelli/ 

Background: This is an interview with the coach of many elite Kenyan athletes. He talks about himself and his coaching philosophy.

How I used it: I used this article to learn more about the coach and his background when I introduced him in my paper.

Kiesewetter, P., Bräuer, S., Haase, R., Nitzsche, N., Mitschke, C., & Milani, T. L. (2022). Do Carbon-Plated Running Shoes with Different Characteristics Influence Physiological and Biomechanical Variables during a 10 km Treadmill Run? Applied Sciences, 12(15), 7949. https://doi.org/10.3390/app12157949

Background: This is a study on the effects of Carbon-plated shoes on an athlete over time.

How I used it: This study was vital to my research because it showed a difference between the studies that only looked at a short period of time and this. The study found changes in form in each athlete wearing Carbon-plated shoes near the end of the run. They gradually altered their form which was essential to proving that carbon-plated shoes alter form over time.

Matties, J. (2024, May 1). BIOMECHANICAL AND ENERGETIC TRENDS IN RESPONSE TO 8 WEEKS OF TRAINING IN ADVANCED FOOTWEAR TECHNOLOGY [Review of BIOMECHANICAL AND ENERGETIC TRENDS IN RESPONSE TO 8 WEEKS OF TRAINING IN ADVANCED FOOTWEAR TECHNOLOGY]. https://scholarworks.calstate.edu/downloads/2b88qm33k 

Background: This study looked at the effects of training in carbon-plated shoes versus non carbon-plated shoes for 8 weeks. They found that there was a significant redistribution of load in the ankle and MTP (metatarsophalangeal) joints.

How I used it: I used the studies findings to show that there was a significant change in load in the foot and ankle region. Other studies showed that the change of load described could lead to injury.

Messier, S. P., & Pittala, K. A. (1988). Etiologic factors associated with selected running injuries. Medicine and Science in Sports and Exercise, 20(5), 501–505. https://europepmc.org/article/med/3193867 

Background: The study was conducted in order to identify the most common factors that can lead to injuries in long distance runners.

How I used it: In the study they specifically mention increased rearfoot motion as a factor. This is also one of the results of using carbon-plated shoes and as such I used the study to show that one of the effects of the shoes causes injury.

Moore, S., Martinez, A., Schwameder, H., & Stoggl, T. (2023, July 12). THE MEDIOLATERAL CENTER OF PRESSURE MOVEMENT DIFFERS BETWEEN TRAINING AND RACING SHOES: A CASE STUDY [Review of THE MEDIOLATERAL CENTER OF PRESSURE MOVEMENT DIFFERS BETWEEN TRAINING AND RACING SHOES: A CASE STUDY]. Department of Sport and Exercise Science, University of Salzburg, Austria Red Bull Athlete Performance Center, Thalgau, Austria. https://commons.nmu.edu/cgi/viewcontent.cgi?article=2665&context=isbs 

Background: This is a specific case study done on an elite long distance athlete. She wears carbon-plated race shoes and they look at the differences in impact pattern between her trainers and her race shoes.

How I used it: There are case studies on both sides of the argument and this was used to show how personalized one’s response to the shoes can be. She had immediate adverse reactions to the shoes which is a known risk of using them.

Olivier, J(2024). Impact of Carbon-Plated Running Shoes on Rearfoot Motion. Proquest.com.https://www.proquest.com/openview/780cb1c3a10d506c522fa4285d63f35a/1?cbl=18750&diss=y&loginDisplay=true&pq-origsite=gscholar 

Background: This study focused on the differences in rearfoot motion between carbon-plated shoes and non plated shoes.

How I used it: While the results only approached significance and did not breach it they still showed an increase in ankle eversion and rearfoot motion among the subjects. I used it to continue to prove that the shoes cause increases in rearfoot motion and thus injury.

Ryu, S., Kang, J., Kong, S., Choi, Y., Yoon, S., Ryu, J., & Park, S.-K. (2023). Effect of running shoes with a carbon plate on running biomechanics. Footwear Science, 15(sup1). https://doi.org/10.1080/19424280.2023.2199280

Background: This study looked at the effects of a plate on biomechanics when compared to a normal running shoe.

How I used it: The study found that there was a change in load at the ankle that was statistically significant. I paired this with other studies to both prove the existence of biomechanical changes and to show that those changes have the potential to injure athletes.

Sinclair, J., Brooks, D., Taylor, P. J., & Liles, N. B. (2021). Effects of running in minimal, maximal and traditional running shoes: a musculoskeletal simulation exploration using statistical parametric mapping and Bayesian analyses. Footwear Science, 1–14. https://doi.org/10.1080/19424280.2021.1892834 

Background: This study looked at the effects of different amounts of foam in the running shoes on the athlete’s body.

How I used it: The study found that maximal shoes increased ankle eversion. Maximal shoes are a category that carbon-plated shoes belong to and so when this study is paired with other studies that identify the plate as a cause of eversion it can be shown that the carbon plate enhances a problem already present.

Subramanium, A. (2024). Effects of advanced footwear technology on running mechanics and performance (Doctoral thesis, University of Calgary, Calgary, Canada). Retrieved from https://prism.ucalgary.ca. https://hdl.handle.net/1880/119375 

Background: The study looked at the redistribution of load across the joints. They found minimal effects in the knee and hip but significant changes at the foot and ankle.

How I used it: I used this to show that there was a redistribution of load at the ankle. It helped me because they specifically used the same shoes with the plate and with it removed isolating the carbon plate as a variable.

Willwacher, S., Sanno, M., & Brüggemann, G.-P. (2020). Fatigue matters: An intense 10 km run alters frontal and transverse plane joint kinematics in competitive and recreational adult runners. Gait & Posture, 76, 277–283. https://www.sciencedirect.com/science/article/pii/S0966636219317795?via%3Dihub#sec0060 

Background: This is a study done on the alteration of form over an intense run. It focuses on form fatigue and its effects on the body.

How I used it: The study showed an increase in ankle eversion over time. It both said that this was an injury risk and added that it could be made worse with a confounding variable such as footwear. This helped me say that the use of these shoes over time/ when fatigued, is a large increase in injury risk.

Supershoes are reshaping distance running. (n.d.). MIT Technology Review. https://www.technologyreview.com/2024/06/25/1093520/supershoes-running-kenya-carbon-plate-shoes/ 

Background: This is an article looking at the effects of carbon-plated shoes on the professional running world both for the athletes and the sports structure as a whole

How I used it: The article includes the people I chose to rebut. It looks at professional athletes, and their physical therapists and coaches. They argued against me and I used the opportunity to emphasize individuality and the broad and more formal nature of my evidence.

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Patrickthestar-The Banned 2nd Person



1.Taxpayers often question if spending more money on education makes a difference. And it does. Ask any parent whose child attends an expensive school.


2.There are different types of injuries that happen in each sport. Would there be objection to the idea that surgery performed before an injury could make an athlete stronger?


3.Imagine someone’s body being consumed by a drug. They would do anything to obtain this drug, not worrying about the consequences that come with it.


4.Inviting Syrians could cause more problems than are solved.


5.Not having money on hand might seem like a minor issue

6.That little green piece of paper in one’s pocket holds no actual value beyond the cost it took to produce it. Yet, many will work their whole lives to collect more of these pieces of paper, only to deposit them in a bank.

7.It’s important to remember that a bank statement or dollar bill represents a made-up value that was made up by others. Without it, people might still be trading goods like livestock and produce.


8. A dollar is now worth what it can be traded for


9.The ability to carry money without holding it in hand brings back the idea of stone currency like stone currency, there is no need to be in physical possession of Bitcoins to own them.


10.
People often talk about the American Dream, which requires having enough of these pieces of paper to be financially stable.


11.
Money is an adroit concept, and its pursuit lasts a lifetime. The goal since the start of school is to join the game of making enough money to improve one’s quality of life.

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Rebuttal Rewrite—Patrickthestar

Focusing on the Symptoms:
Why Ignoring Systemic Inequities
Won’t Cure this Mental Health crisis

The Covid-19 pandemic not only harmed our physical health, it also created a mental health crisis. Many people felt nervous,isolated, and anxious during that time. However it was even more challenging if you were part of a group that was being excluded.No matter how helpful private therapists and community groups are, they just couldn’t handle the demand. The pandemic awoke people  and made one thing  very clear, the government needs to do more to make sure that everyone can get and have confidence about their mental health care.

Not everyone agrees with this. For example, Dr. Sally Satel believes that community-based solutions and personal responsibility should be the focus of mental health care, not government programs((Klick & Satel, 2011) . While efforts from both individuals and groups do matter it is important to realize that systemic problems need systemic answers. To make sure that mental health care is accessible and works , the government needs to step in. Not as a replacement, but as the backbone of these systems.

Klick and Satel argue that many health disparities are the result of factors like income, education, and employment, rather than race or ethnicity itself. While it may be true that economic status has a significant impact on health outcomes, the authors overlook how deeply structural racism and discrimination can amplify these issues. Black Americans, particularly those living in urban areas, face systemic barriers like racial profiling and housing segregation challenges that make it harder to access basic needs which includes healthcare. The effects of these inequities are deep and impact people both financially and in quality of life. In fact, research highlights the staggering toll of this inequality: “The overall economic burden of failing to achieve health equity goals was $1.03 trillion, including $421.1 billion for racial and ethnic minorities, with two-thirds attributable to premature death” (JAMA, 2023). This reality makes it clear that focusing solely on income disparities without taking into consideration is counterproductive. 

Furthermore, there’s  significant evidence showing that healthcare providers often carry implicit racial biases.This in turn makes it harder for patients especially from marginalized communities to receive proper care and diagnosis. Unfortunately, Klick and Satel’s argument doesn’t fully address this issue.While it’s easy to assume that this is a personal choice in reality it’s a deeply ingrained bias in the system that directly affects the quality of care people receive. For instance, one study found that African American patients diagnosed with schizophrenia were much more likely than their white counterparts to also screen positive for major depression—yet these mood symptoms were often ignored due to racial biases in diagnosis (Strakowski et al., 2019). These biases have real word consequences leading to inappropriate treatment.What this shows is that these problems go beyond individual choices and point to systemic issues that negatively impact patient care, as providers may unknowingly interpret symptoms through the lens of racial stereotypes.

While Klick and Satel made important points about personal responsibility and solutions within the community they fail to address the much larger issues that contribute to these factors.The reality is that these health disparities need much larger responses especially when it comes to mental health care. The pandemic exposed the problems that are within our healthcare systems when trying to access valuable resources. To address these issues, we need the government to step not to replace local solutions but to support them.This means going beyond just recognizing the economic factors that influence health and directly confronting the structural racism and discrimination that make these problems worse. Focusing only on personal responsibility without addressing the systemic barriers that cause these issues completely misses the bigger picture. 

References

Klick, J., & Satel, S. (2011). The health disparities myth: Diagnosing the treatment gap. The AEI Press.

LaVeist, T. A., Pérez-Stable, E. J., Richard, P., et al. (2023). The economic burden of racial, ethnic, and educational health inequities in the US. JAMA: The Journal of the American Medical Association, 329(19), 1683–1691. https://doi.org/10.1001/jama.2023.5965

Gara, M. A., Minsky, S., Silverstein, S. M., Miskimen, T., & Strakowski, S. M. (2019). A Naturalistic Study of Racial Disparities in Diagnoses at an Outpatient Behavioral Health Clinic. Psychiatric Services, 70(2), 130–134. https://doi.org/10.1176/appi.ps.201800223

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Rebuttal Argument- patrickthestar

Focusing on the Symptoms: Why Ignoring Systemic Inequities Won’t Cure this Mental Health crisis

The Covid-19 pandemic not only harmed our physical health, it also created a mental health crisis. Many people felt nervous,isolated, and anxious during that time. However it was even more challenging if you were part of a group that was being excluded.No matter how helpful private therapists and community groups are, they just couldn’t handle the demand. The pandemic awoke people  and made one thing  very clear, the government needs to do more to make sure that everyone can get and have confidence about their mental health care.

Not everyone agrees with this. For example, Dr. Sally Satel believes that community-based solutions and personal responsibility should be the focus of mental health care, not government programs((Klick & Satel, 2011) . While efforts from both individuals and groups do matter it is important to realize that systemic problems need systemic answers. To make sure that mental health care is accessible and works , the government needs to step in. Not as a replacement, but as the backbone of these systems.

Klick and Satel argue that many health disparities are the result of factors like income, education, and employment, rather than race or ethnicity itself. While it may be true that economic status has a significant impact on health outcomes, the authors overlook how deeply structural racism and discrimination can amplify these issues. Black Americans, particularly those living in urban areas, face systemic barriers like racial profiling and housing segregation challenges that make it harder to access basic needs which includes healthcare. The effects of these inequities are deep and impact people both financially and in quality of life. In fact, research highlights the staggering toll of this inequality: “The overall economic burden of failing to achieve health equity goals was $1.03 trillion, including $421.1 billion for racial and ethnic minorities, with two-thirds attributable to premature death” (JAMA, 2023). This reality makes it clear that focusing solely on income disparities without taking into consideration is counterproductive. 

Furthermore, there’s  significant evidence showing that healthcare providers often carry implicit racial biases.This in turn makes it harder for patients especially from marginalized communities to receive proper care and diagnosis. Unfortunately, Klick and Satel’s argument doesn’t fully address this issue.While it’s easy to assume that this is a personal choice in reality it’s a deeply ingrained bias in the system that directly affects the quality of care people receive. For instance, one study found that African American patients diagnosed with schizophrenia were much more likely than their white counterparts to also screen positive for major depression—yet these mood symptoms were often ignored due to racial biases in diagnosis (Strakowski et al., 2019). These biases have real word consequences leading to inappropriate treatment.What this shows is that these problems go beyond individual choices and point to systemic issues that negatively impact patient care, as providers may unknowingly interpret symptoms through the lens of racial stereotypes.

While Klick and Satel made important points about personal responsibility and solutions within the community they fail to address the much larger issues that contribute to these factors.The reality is that these health disparities need much larger responses especially when it comes to mental health care. The pandemic exposed the problems that are within our healthcare systems when trying to access valuable resources. To address these issues, we need the government to step not to replace local solutions but to support them.This means going beyond just recognizing the economic factors that influence health and directly confronting the structural racism and discrimination that make these problems worse. Focusing only on personal responsibility without addressing the systemic barriers that cause these issues completely misses the bigger picture. 

Citations

Klick, J., & Satel, S. (2011). The health disparities myth: Diagnosing the treatment gap. The AEI Press.

LaVeist, T. A., Pérez-Stable, E. J., Richard, P., et al. (2023). The economic burden of racial, ethnic, and educational health inequities in the US. JAMA: The Journal of the American Medical Association, 329(19), 1683–1691. https://doi.org/10.1001/jama.2023.5965

Gara, M. A., Minsky, S., Silverstein, S. M., Miskimen, T., & Strakowski, S. M. (2019). A Naturalistic Study of Racial Disparities in Diagnoses at an Outpatient Behavioral Health Clinic. Psychiatric Services, 70(2), 130–134. https://doi.org/10.1176/appi.ps.201800223

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2nd person- Starfire.04

  1. Taxpayers wonder whether the amount spent on students makes a difference. Carefully analyzed, yes it does. Any parent whose child goes to an expensive school can confirm this to be true.
  2. There are different types of injuries that happen in each sport.  Would some object to a surgery being performed on an athlete before any injuries occur that could strengthen the athlete?
  3. Imagine a body being consumed by a drug. That individual would do anything to get the drug no matter the consequences.
  4. Inviting Syrians in only causes more problems rather than solving them.
  5. The idea of not actually having money on-hand may sound trivial.
  6. That little green piece of paper in a pocket holds no actual value other than the cost it took to produce it, and yet many will work their whole life just to acquire more of those little green pieces of paper just to take them and stick them in a bank.
  7. It would smart to remember that a bank statement or dollar bill is a made up value that someone decided to make up. Without it, trading with goods like livestock and produce would be necessary.
  8. I now understand a dollar is only worth what it can be exchanged for.
  9. Having the ability to walk around with money without holding the money goes back to the idea of the stone because, just like stone currency, physical possession of these Bitcoins are not necessary to own them.
  10. We hear people talk about the American Dream, which requires a significant amount of these pieces of paper to be financially stable. if analyzed thoroughly, it is easy to notice that these pieces of paper called money become the most important part of life and surviving.
  11. Money is an adroit concept and its pursuit lasts a lifetime. The goal from the moment of the start schooling is to join the game of making enough of these pieces of paper to make living life more fun and acceptable.





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2nd person – figure8clementine

  1. Taxpayers wonder whether the amount spent on students makes a difference. Careful thought reveals that it does. Parents whose children attend expensive schools often affirm this.
  2. There are different types of injuries that occur in each sport. Some might object to surgeries performed preemptively, even if they could make athletes stronger.
  3. Imagine a body consumed by a drug. The individual would do anything to obtain it, disregarding the consequences entirely.
  4. More problems are created by letting Syrians in than resolving any.
  5. The idea of not actually having money on hand may seem trivial at first glance.
  6. That little green piece of paper in a pocket holds no intrinsic value beyond its production cost, yet people work their entire lives to acquire more of these pieces of paper and deposit them in banks.
  7. It is worth remembering, upon reading a bank statement or holding a dollar bill, that the value it represents is entirely constructed. Without it, trading goods like livestock and produce might still be necessary.
  8. It becomes clear that a dollar’s worth is tied only to what can be received in exchange for it.
  9. Walking around with access to money, without physically holding it, is reminiscent of the concept of stone currency. Similarly, ownership of Bitcoin does not require physical possession of the currency itself.
  10. Discussions about the American Dream often highlight the need for financial stability, represented by those pieces of paper called money. Reflecting deeply reveals a life heavily based on acquiring them.
  11. Money is a clever concept, and its pursuit spans a lifetime. From the start of schooling, the ultimate goal often becomes joining the game of accumulating enough of these pieces of paper to enhance life’s enjoyment and acceptability.
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Visual Analysis of One Second Video – figure8clementine

0:01. The ad starts with a wide shot of a boy sitting in his bedroom playing video games. It’s kind of hard to see at first glance but I’m pretty sure it’s a DS. The boy’s room is painted a greyish blue and has astronaut/space memorabilia littered about. The inference that can be made about this boy is that he is into more modern things and technological things. He has a baseball sitting next to an enclosure of some sort on his desk. You can make the assumption that it’s a lizard enclosure from the heat lamp and decorations on it. The boy seems very focused on his game, holding it closely to his face and not paying attention to anything else. A man in a brown suit steps into the boy’s room, grabbing his attention while doing so. The man’s color scheme doesn’t match the rest of the room. He seems very out of place with his reddish undertones contrasting with the blue in the rest of the room. He seems so out of place that he appears to be green-screened into the shot (which he most likely is). His suit and skin are shown as almost an old-timey filter. His style of clothes and hairstyle resemble the 1950s. He is made to be the focus of this shot with how out of place he is. The audio in the background is an older song as well, with radio static in the background, further suggesting the 1950s type of energy this man is radiating. He could be a radio host from the 50s, time-traveling to the present to speak to this boy. He turns into the room and the boy slowly lifts his gaze up from his game. Smoking in the 50’s was known to be very commonplace for people, including younger people, which adds a level of irony to this man being the person to educate this boy. His walk is straightforward and confident, he very obviously is there to give information to this kid.

The camera angle changes and we can see more clearly that he does not fit in place with the rest of the background. The boy’s attention is on the man now, we can see his head directly looking at the man in the suit. The boy’s back is facing the camera on the right-hand side of the screen, with him facing the man. He has Polaroids hanging on his wall, a dart board on the bottom half of the screen, and a guitar in front of a deep blue closet that the man in the suit is standing in front of. 

0.02

The man continues walking into frame and pauses in front of the boy, presumably about to present information to him. The dramatic music kicks up and the man starts to glitch like an old television, reiterating again that he is not from this time. He fully turns towards the boy before telling him that young people are tempted by many things today, as though thouse things were not there in his time. 

0.03

Nothing much changes between this and 0.02 seconds

0.04

The boy’s attention is still fully on the man. The man begins to speak at the last half of this second. 

0.05

The man mentions things that are tempting kids today, using skateboarding as an example as well as calling what most people would call a vape, “electronic cigarettes” (another mention of the time difference). The skateboarding thing seems to be a non-issue used to contrast the electric cigarettes. The mention of electric cigarettes too, seems to be specifically brought up to make them seem like more of a problem than normal cigarettes, which they very well may be, but it begs the question of this man not finding normal cigarettes to be something plaguing the youth. 

0.06

The camera angle has shifted to a closer-up shot of the boy sitting on his bed. We get a closer look at some of the things in the boy’s room, his bed is made but he has a flannel, that he has recently taken off presumably. Maybe he has jut come home from school and is sitting on his bed enjoying what is now very clear to be a phone, not a DS. We can see from the posters on the wall, that they’re obviously made to emphasize the fact that this boy is modern to contrast the man from the past giving him new information. One poster on his wall leaves the word “Modern” in the frame, despite the rest of the poster being cut off. We can also now see that there is a skateboard posting on a slanted part of the boy’s ceiling, which was not previously in view. This could mean that the man mentioned skateboarding not only to prove his point, but to try to relate to this specific boy and his interests. The boy looks up from his phone, hearing what the man is saying but is very visibly confused at his presence, even glancing to the side in confusion and in disbelief. 

0.07

The boy glances back at the man and continues staring in disbelief. 

0.08

The man starts to discuss the amount of nicotine a vape pod contains, the camera is still on the boy as the man is talking to him. 

0.09

The camera pans back to the man and he continues with the same statement from the last second. We can see the old-timey television filter crackling across him as he speaks. He finishes his sentence from before, making the full sentence That a vape pod contains as much nicotine as a PACK of cigarettes.

0.10

The camera moves closer to the man at the end of the second. We can see that his hair is pomaded and his overall appearance is very well kempt. He’s wearing a watch as well, possibly showing that he has a higher status. 

0.11

The man expresses that what he said in the last sentence, leads young people to lifelong addiction to nicotine. 

0.12

The man moves his hands around as he talks, with his right hand moving down to his side at the end of this second. His facial expression conveys a genuine concern.

0.13

The man moves a prop lung up to his chest to convey more strongly his point that this can cause lung damage.

0.14

The camera cuts back to the boy on his bed, in the same position as before and still in just as much disbelief as he was in before. 

0.15

The man starts talking to the boy again at the end of the second, pleading with the boy to consider the facts of what would happen if he were to decide to smoke an electronic cigarette.

0.16

The suited man brings a scroll down from out of frame, with it just appearing in thin air. He begins to point to it to emphasize its importance. The scroll reads “The facts about vaping” with an image of what vaping does to someone’s lungs while doing it.

0.17

The man starts to point his finger toward the boy with a lecturing manner.

0.18

Still the same as before but his point faces the boy and he begins to move his hand closer to his chest. 

0.19

Text begins to appear on the screen underneath the scroll that he’s pulled down from out of nowhere. A boldened “The” is the first word shown. 

0.20

A narrator begins to talk over the man and the full text is revealed at the end of the sentence to be “The Health Class Film Guy.” This reveals that the man in the suit is supposed to represent an old/outdated health class video that has been replayed to kids for years and years. 

0.21

The text continues to fill the screen and now says “isn’t the best person”. I’m sure within the next second, that same text is going to be completed, but for now we can hear the narrator saying that the health class man is not the best person to be teaching your kid about the dangers of vaping. This man held an aura of confidence when he stepped into the room at first but is now made clear to be an outdated lesson that shouldn’t be taught in the way that it was being taught. 

0.22

The text now shows “The health class film guy isn’t the best person to talk to your kid.” This means that the narrator is making a plea to the parents who are meant to view this PSA and asking them to educate their child themselves, instead of letting a video teach them what they need to know. 

0.23

The text that was moving across the screen is finally completed, saying “The health class film guy isn’t the best person to talk to your kid about vaping.” The camera then cuts to the boy very up close to show his face. He still seems confused but seems to have taken in the information he heard with little emotion or reaction other than confusion. 

0.24

The boy blinks and suddenly we can hear the voice of his mother asking him if he has a few minutes. The health class man has disappeared and is now replaced with who is supposed to be educating the boy about the dangers of vaping. The boy blinking symbolizes the shift in the conversation, with it ending the existence of our time travelling health class man, and bringing his mom into this situation. When his mom speaks to him, the boy’s disinterest dissipates, as his eyes widen and he is now more willing to hear what his mom is saying rather than some old video. The second ends with the narrator again emphasizing that you should be the person to talk to your kids about these things by saying “You are.”

0.25

The camera pans back to the shot of the boys back, but instead of the health class man, his mom happily strolls into the room. The boldened text “You are.” appears over the mom, once again emphasizing that this is her responsibility to educate her child. He is more attentive and responsive to her than he would be to that stranger. 

0.26-0.30

This is the final shot of the video. The camera goes back to the beginning wide shot of the boys room, with his mom coming over to him to join him on his bed in this discussion, a stark contrast to the health class man who gave the boy a stern lecture. The boy has lowered his phone and moved his body to face his mother. He is very obviously interested in what his mom has to say which is again, a very stark contrast to how he reacted when the health class man presented him with this information, as his phone remained up the entire time. More text has also appeared on screen, with the organizations that created this video appearing on screen. The narrator comes back to ask parents to talk to their children about this information today. The video ends with the mother and son having that discussion. 

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Definition Rewrite—Patrickthestar

Covid-19 Highlighted Mental Health Disparities
in Marginalized Communities

A mental health crisis in its traditional understanding can be understood as an unanticipated surge in mental health challenges that arise when the available resources aren’t enough to support demand.While this definition remains true for the general population, the pandemic has brought attention to issues that specifically affect low income communities, racial minorities,and immigrants.These populations experienced heightened levels of stress and social isolation caused by financial strain,lack of resources and a lack of support systems. For these populations the phrase “Mental health crisis” describes not only a state of mind but also systemic failures that interfere with their ability to access necessary resources in healthcare as well as social support.The mental health crisis for individuals with these disadvantaged backgrounds goes beyond just individual concerns.The mental health issues within these population serves to highlight the shortcomings in our public health systems which have not adequately provided the necessary resources for community outreach.The pandemic did not generate new problems however it showed the obstacles faced by underserved populations.

Individuals from low income backgrounds in the past have experienced barriers in accessing mental health care.A big factor contributing to this is the lack of healthcare coverage that is accessible.Not only is insurance a barrier but there also is a lack of providers in these communities. Furthermore the shift from traditional office setting to remote work and online education had a major impact on low income households. Many of which could not access the technology required or internet access.The differences in accessing these resources combined with managing pressures of work and family during lockdowns led to an increase in feelings of isolation and created new emotional turmoil.

During the Covid-19 Pandemic racial and ethnic minorities,especially Black, Indigenous, and latino communities, experienced a significantly higher mental health burden. A study published by the American Journal of Public health in 2021 indicates that Black and Latino Populations faced notably elevated levels of anxiety,depression,and posttraumatic stress throughout the pandemic. Many individuals within these populations felt increased stress and anxiety over ongoing racial tensions throughout the pandemic.These tensions were demonstrated by the tragic deaths of both Breonna Taylor and George Floyd among others.The psychological burden of racial trauma by the anxiety surrounding possibly contracting the disease increased mental health challenges within these communities.

Immigrant communities particularly those without legal documentation faced their own set of unique challenges during the pandemic including accessing mental health resources over fears of questions on their legal status in the country. “Poorer mental health has been further amplified during the pandemic because of lack of adequate and clear information regarding COVID-19‒related health and social services and limited financial resources for basic necessities. Social isolation may also increase the risk of mental health stressors among older immigrant adults who face cultural, linguistic, and digital access barriers” (Đoàn et al., 2021). Moreover the pandemic also affected immigrant communities economically since many of the industries that employed them such as construction and hospitality were the first to shut down.

In response to the growing mental health challenges during the pandemic, telehealth emerged which allowed users to connect with health care providers virtually as in person services became unavailable.Telehealth became a new platform and an additional means to delivering mental health services though challenges in accessing this type of care still persisted.

The Covid-19 Pandemic has undeniably highlighted the ongoing “mental health crisis” affecting underserved and underrepresented communities.The pandemic has amplified the pre existing gaps in healthcare access,social support and financial well being. Addressing the crisis within these populations requires not only improves access to mental health care but also an approach that examines the underlying factors of the gaps for standard of care.This includes expanding telehealth options, improving financial and social support systems, and addressing systemic discrimination. 

References

American Journal of Public Health. (2021). Racial and Ethnic Disparities in Mental Health and Mental Health Care During The COVID‑19 Pandemic. Retrieved from https://link.springer.com/article/10.1007/s40615-022-01284-9

Đoàn, L. N., Chong, S. K., Misra, S., Kwon, S. C., & Yi, S. S. (2021). Immigrant Communities and COVID-19: Strengthening the Public Health Response. American journal of public health111(S3), S224–S231. https://doi.org/10.2105/AJPH.2021.306433

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