Rebuttal Argument – MillyCain

Posted on December 1, 2023 by millycain

A Risk Worth Taking

According to Oona Hanson, who wrote “‘Healthy eating’ curriculum can do more harm than good” for CNN, adding nutrition classes to schools would be ultimately harmful to students because of how state education standards would likely cause them to develop eating disorders. Hanson makes a compelling argument; poorly structured nutrition classes causing eating disorders amongst the youth is a reality that nobody wants. However despite this potential risk of establishing nutrition classes in schools, I believe that focusing on this one specific issue undermines the overall need for these classes in the US.

Norway is one of the only countries in the world that has a mandatory nutrition curriculum in their schools. The Norwegian Ministry of Education outlines some of what this curriculum looks like, which includes the expectation that primary school students are able to, “describe the characteristics of healthy and a wide variety of food and why they are important to health.” This is an important aspect of any nutrition curriculum, but how does it impact the rate of eating disorders in Norway? Well, according to an article published by World Population Review titled, “Eating Disorders by Country 2023,” the United States, without a nutrition curriculum, already has a slightly higher anorexia index compared to Norway. Many factors can contribute to disordered eating in a population, and while Norway’s numbers are far from perfect, what’s important to take away is that Norway has a lower rate of anorexia despite the fact that they have this mandatory curriculum. This proves that if implemented correctly, a nutrition class in the United States would likely not increase disordered eating in the enough to warrant not implementing the class, especially when you consider the other benefits of these classes.

Is the harm of potentially instilling eating disorders into children by nutrition classes in schools worth the benefit of having a healthier population? What even is the benefit? Well, the truth is that there is an undeniable massive obesity problem in the United States. Its so bad that according to a study published by the CDC titled, “Prevalence of Overweight, Obesity, and Severe Obesity Among Adults Aged 20 and Over: United States, 1960–1962 Through 2017–2018,” the number of Americans who are simply, “overweight” has gone down since 1960. This seems like a good statistic that would suggest that Americans are getting healthier. Unfortunately, the reason why less people are simply, “overweight” now is because more people just skip this category entirely and go straight to obese. Not only is the number of unhealthy Americans going up, but the degree of their unhealthiness is also rising as well. It’s difficult to look at this data and not want to do anything about it. Clearly public health initiatives by the government departments targeted at adults are not working, so why not try to establish healthy habits in school children, who are much more likely to adapt the habits that they are learning in classes?

Well, Hanson would argue that if school children are more likely to adapt these healthy habits, then they would be more likely to adapt harmful ones like eating disorders as well, and there is some truth to that. I’m not here to argue that either obesity or an eating disorder is worse than the other. Both are awful conditions that we should try to prevent. However, it is a fact that there are significantly less people who suffer from eating disorders compared to obesity. The already high number and the sheer rate of just how rapidly obesity is rising is should absolutely take precedent above all at this point. American’s are only going to get more unhealthy if the current public health initiates stay in place, so what other choice do we have? Even Hanson’s own proposed solutions involve working with students to ensure that they do not develop eating disorders if nutrition classes were mandatory. It is likely that if these classes were established, they wouldn’t be perfect, but given the extreme circumstances we are in, the good absolutely outweighs the harm. And until a better solution is suggested, can it really be afforded to consider anything else at this point?

Establishing nutrition classes into classrooms seems like a big change, and with such big changes, it makes sense why people like Hanson may want to consider the risks. The sad truth however is that the United States is quite behind a lot of the developed world when it comes to nutrition education. According to a study published by Kim Smith et al. titled, “How Primary School Curriculums in 11 Countries around the World Deliver Food Education and Address Food Literacy: A Policy Analysis,” 11 countries either partially or comprehensively address food literacy in their primary schools. It shouldn’t come as a shock that these countries have less obesity compared to the United States. The fact that so many countries with healthier populations than the United States already have some form of nutritional education in place means that we can establish a system that we know works in other places. Its a lot easier to live with potential the risk of an increased number of eating disorders if you know that the system that you’re buying into is going to be effective.

Overall, Hanson’s concerns of students developing potential eating disorders as a result of nutritional education classes are completely warranted. In fact, these concerns are welcomed because they will help these classes be as safe for students as possible, should they ever be put into place. However as for the question of if these classes will be more harmful than beneficial, the answer couldn’t be any more clear. There is a reason why obesity in the United States is referred to as an epidemic, and addressing this epidemic through schools seems to be the only effective option moving forward. The unfortunate truth is that the United States is far behind a lot of the world in establishing some form of formal nutritional education, and if we know that countries with these systems have healthier populations than us, then why are we still questioning if these classes should be established or not?

References

Hanson, Oona. “‘Healthy Eating’ Curriculum Can Do More Harm than Good.” CNN, 9 Oct. 2023, https://www.cnn.com/2023/10/09/health/unhealthy-school-nutrition-lessons-wellness/index.html.

Eating Disorders by Country 2023. Ranking Eating Disorders by Country 2023 https://worldpopulationreview.com/country-rankings/eating-disorders-by-country. Accessed 1 Dec. 2023.

Fryar CD, Carroll MD, Afful J. Prevalence of overweight, obesity, and severe obesity among adults aged 20 and over: United States, 1960–1962 through 2017–2018. NCHS Health E-Stats. 2020.

Norway Ministry of Education and Research. Curriculum for Food and Health. Ministry of Education
and Research, June 29, 2020. https://data.udir.no/kl06/v201906/laereplaner-lk20/MHE01-02.pdf?lang=eng

Faberman, Rhea. “State of Obesity 2023: Better Policies for a Healthier America.” Trust For America’s Health, 2023, https://www.tfah.org/report-details/state-of-obesity-2023/.

Smith K, Wells R, Hawkes C. How Primary School Curriculums in 11 Countries around the World Deliver Food Education and Address Food Literacy: A Policy Analysis. Int J Environ Res Public Health. 2022 Feb 11;19(4):2019. doi: 10.3390/ijerph19042019. PMID: 35206208; PMCID: PMC8871606.

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Causal Argument – ConfusedPinky

Posted on December 1, 2023 by confusedpinky

Navigating Relationship Success: The Causal Interplay of Meta-Perception and Cluster B Personality Disorders

Introduction

In the complex world of human relationships, we dive into understanding how Cluster B personality disorders, especially the powerful influence of narcissism, impact the intricate concept of meta-perception. This argument seeks to unravel the tangled web woven by distorted meta-perception within the complex dynamics of Cluster B disorders. Its goal is to illuminate the subtle yet strong connections that guide the successes or challenges within the realm of relationships. As we embark on this intellectual journey, a fundamental question arises: How do the distorted lenses of meta-perception, shaped by the traits of Cluster B personality disorders, influence the story of human interactions? By honing in on narcissism as a vivid example within this cluster, we explore the many layers underlying the interplay between self-perception, external perception, and the ensuing ups and downs of relationships.

This exploration isn’t just about understanding; it’s a deliberate effort to untangle the threads that contribute to the intricate fabric of human connections, where the presence of Cluster B disorders introduces both complexity and challenge. With each revelation, we aim to shed light on the nuanced connections, providing insights into the uncharted territories of interpersonal dynamics affected by distorted meta-perception and the widespread presence of Cluster B personality disorders.

Identifying Key Variables

Meta-perception, the intricate process through which individuals assess how others perceive them, takes on a fascinating aspect when examined in the context of Cluster B personality disorders. This argument focuses specifically on narcissism, a captivating personality disorder known for its traits of self-centered tendencies and inflated self-importance. As we navigate the complex landscape of human interactions, understanding how individuals with narcissistic tendencies see themselves in relation to others becomes crucial in deciphering the complexities underlying their social dynamics.

Within the expansive realm of meta-perception, the lens through which individuals with narcissistic traits view themselves and expect to be perceived by others is uniquely distorted. The self-aggrandizing nature of narcissism adds a fascinating twist to the evaluation process, where individuals may display an exaggerated sense of their own importance and an unwavering desire for admiration. This heightened self-perception, often at odds with external assessments, lays the groundwork for intricate interpersonal challenges, shaping the story of relationships in distinctive ways. In the upcoming sections, we will delve into the nuances of narcissistic meta-perception, exploring its manifestations and implications on relationship dynamics within the broader context of Cluster B personality disorders.

Establishing Causal Links

Embarking on the exploration of causal relationships, we delve into the insightful research conducted by Miano et al. (2017) to unveil the tangible connections between distorted meta-perception and Cluster B personality disorders, with a keen focus on narcissism. This study serves as a compass, guiding us through the intricate landscape where trustworthiness perception takes center stage, especially in romantic relationships entangled with individuals diagnosed with borderline personality disorder (BPD), a distinctive disorder within the Cluster B spectrum.

Miano et al.’s (2017) study provides a critical lens into how trustworthiness perception, a linchpin in the dynamics of close relationships, undergoes destabilization when individuals grapple with borderline personality disorder. Within the broader framework of Cluster B disorders, the study specifically hones in on narcissistic traits, shedding light on how these tendencies disrupt the delicate balance of trust in romantic entanglements. As we navigate the implications of this research, we begin to fathom the intricate interplay between meta-perception and the specific traits associated with Cluster B disorders, particularly those manifested in the realm of romantic partnerships. This exploration is not merely an academic pursuit; it’s a journey into the heart of human connections, where the causal links between distorted meta-perception and Cluster B personality disorders unfold in the nuanced context of romantic relationships.

Unraveling the Dynamics

The research illuminates the reverberations of distorted meta-perception, creating a ripple effect within the realm of romantic intimacy, particularly in the context of borderline personality disorder. The instability in trustworthiness perception, as identified by Miano et al., becomes a focal point in understanding the challenges faced by individuals with Cluster B disorders, offering a glimpse into the disruptive forces that can strain the fabric of romantic bonds. The study’s emphasis on narcissistic traits within this cluster adds a layer of complexity, showcasing how self-centered tendencies and inflated self-importance contribute to the fragility of trust in close relationships.

In essence, the causal links become more apparent as we connect the dots between narcissistic traits, distorted meta-perception, and the consequential impact on trustworthiness perception. This exploration goes beyond academic curiosity; it opens a window into the real-world struggles of individuals navigating the intricate dance of romantic relationships within the complex framework of Cluster B personality disorders. As we further dissect the intricacies of these causal links, we gain a deeper understanding of the challenges posed by distorted meta-perception and its profound implications for relationship dynamics within the broader spectrum of Cluster B disorders.

Unveiling the Mechanism

In the complex terrain of interpersonal relationships, the mechanism underpinning distorted meta-perception within Cluster B personality disorders, particularly narcissism, emerges as a subtle yet potent force. Operating as a delicate dance between internal turbulence and external threats, this mechanism intricately shapes the perception of trustworthiness in romantic relationships. Notably, the creation of perceptual gaps becomes a distinctive hallmark, where individuals find themselves entangled in the challenge of maintaining a consistent image of a trustworthy partner, especially during moments that threaten the very essence of the relationship.

Within the context of Cluster B disorders, and with a keen focus on narcissistic traits, this mechanism signifies more than an academic exploration—it unravels as a lived experience. The instability in trustworthiness perception, identified as a pivotal juncture, casts a profound shadow over the landscape of interpersonal relationships. As we dissect this mechanism, its subtle yet powerful influence on the narrative of relationships unfolds, offering a nuanced understanding of Cluster B dynamics and their intricate impact on the fragile fabric of human connections.

Conclusion:

Beyond the individual level, understanding the impact of distorted meta-perception has broader implications for relationship satisfaction within the context of Cluster B personality disorders. The findings emphasize the significance of addressing these perceptual discrepancies as a means of fostering healthier relationships. By targeting these specific dynamics, interventions can be tailored to bridge perceptual gaps, ultimately contributing to enhanced relationship satisfaction.

In closing, this brief causal argument navigates the intricate interplay of meta-perception, Cluster B personality disorders, and relationship dynamics, with a specific focus on narcissism. By shedding light on these causal relationships, a deeper understanding emerges, paving the way for targeted interventions that can bridge perceptual gaps and enhance relationship satisfaction within the challenging landscape of Cluster B personality dynamics.

Resources:

Miano, A., Fertuck, E. A., Roepke, S., & Dziobek, I. (2017). Romantic relationship dysfunction in borderline personality disorder—a naturalistic approach to trustworthiness perception. 

Personality Disorders: Theory, Research, and Treatment, 8(3), 281–286. 

https://doi.org/10.1037/per0000196

Tyrer, P., & Alexander, J. (1979). Classification of Personality Disorder. British Journal of 

Psychiatry, 135(2), 163–167.

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Rebuttal Draft—LaFlame

Posted on December 1, 2023 by laflame

The Joyful Odyssey: Embracing the Path to Fulfillment

In life’s complex journey, finding happiness is closely connected to trying to achieve our goals. Many people believe that reaching these goals is the key to long-lasting joy. But when we take a closer look, it makes us wonder if the path we’re on, the journey itself, is more important for real contentment than reaching the final destination. Life’s intricate design makes us think about whether continually working towards happiness, along with chasing our goals, matters more for genuine satisfaction than actually reaching those goals.

Embarking on the journey of chasing our goals is akin to a profound voyage of self-discovery. It extends beyond merely reaching predefined targets; it encompasses the personal growth and sense of purpose gained throughout the entire process. The pursuit of a goal becomes a transformative experience, shaping not only our external achievements but also molding the core of our being.As we navigate the intricate paths toward our aspirations, the challenges faced, and the lessons learned become integral components of the happiness equation. It is not merely about crossing the finish line but about relishing every step taken and acknowledging the richness that the journey contributes to our lives.

Emotions play a pivotal role in our pursuit of goals. Insights from Steven C. Hayes and his team underscore the importance of accepting and experiencing a spectrum of emotions. This goes beyond the notion of being happy at all times, emphasizing the embracing of both highs and lows for a more profound sense of fulfillment.

Understanding that the pursuit of any goal is accompanied by a range of emotions allows individuals to navigate the journey more authentically. It encourages a holistic experience where moments of joy, frustration, and even setbacks are acknowledged as integral parts of the process. In doing so, individuals cultivate emotional resilience, enabling them to face the complexities of their goals with a balanced and open mindset.

Positive emotions act as guiding lights in our journey towards happiness. The research conducted by Anthony D. Ong and his peers sheds light on how these positive feelings contribute not only to fleeting moments of joy but also to our overall mental well-being. While the pursuit of goals may bring about various challenges, the positive emotions experienced along the way play a vital role in maintaining psychological health.

These positive emotions act as motivators, propelling individuals forward in their pursuit. They create a psychological buffer against the stressors and difficulties that may arise during goal attainment. By recognizing the significance of positive emotions, individuals can harness their power to enhance overall well-being and fortify their resilience in the face of adversity.

The intrinsic value lies within the journey itself. Each step taken, every challenge faced, and every lesson learned contributes significantly to the happiness experienced during the pursuit of a goal. It’s about acknowledging and finding joy in the progress made, not solely fixating on the final destination.

The process-oriented approach to goal pursuit emphasizes the continuous nature of personal development. It suggests that happiness is not confined to the attainment of a specific goal but is an ongoing experience derived from the efforts invested in the journey. By immersing oneself in the process, individuals cultivate a deeper appreciation for the transformative power of continuous growth and improvement.

Contrary to the widely held belief that reaching a goal ensures a lasting state of happiness, research indicates that the joy derived from achievement is often ephemeral. The elation experienced upon reaching a goal, though undoubtedly significant, tends to fade over time. The initial thrill of accomplishment gives way to a period of adjustment, and the pursuit of new goals becomes necessary to sustain a sense of purpose and fulfillment.

This transient nature of goal-related happiness highlights the importance of distinguishing between the joy of accomplishment and the enduring contentment derived from the ongoing pursuit of meaningful objectives. It suggests that the psychological impact of goal achievement, while undeniable, is a component in the larger tapestry of happiness.

Active engagement in the pursuit of meaningful goals correlates positively with increased happiness. It extends beyond mere success; it involves finding purpose and fulfillment within the journey itself. The happiness derived from goal pursuit is not solely contingent on the outcome but is intricately woven into the fabric of the journey.

Research in positive psychology emphasizes the concept of “flow,” a state of deep engagement and enjoyment experienced during the process of goal attainment. This state transcends the dichotomy of success and failure, focusing instead on the immersive experience of being fully present and absorbed in the pursuit. By cultivating a sense of flow, individuals enhance their overall well-being and find intrinsic joy in the pursuit of their aspirations.

While standing at the pinnacle of success can be exhilarating, it comes with unforeseen challenges. Achieving goals may not guarantee lasting happiness, and the pressure to sustain success can bring about emotional struggles. The external markers of success, such as recognition, accolades, or material rewards, often fall short in providing enduring contentment.

Individuals who have reached the zenith of their goals may encounter the paradoxical nature of success – the realization that the pursuit of new goals becomes essential to maintaining a sense of purpose and fulfillment. The challenges associated with goal attainment extend beyond the achievement itself, highlighting the need for a nuanced understanding of the relationship between success and lasting happiness.

The key lies in finding a harmonious balance. Appreciating both the journey and the destination creates a holistic approach to goal attainment. It involves deriving joy from the process while maintaining a focus on the end goal for a more enriching and fulfilling experience. Striking this balance requires a mindful approach to goal setting and pursuit. It involves setting realistic expectations and recognizing that the journey is not merely a means to an end but a significant part of the overall experience. By acknowledging the interconnectedness of process and outcome, individuals can navigate their pursuits with a sense of purpose and resilience.

In life happiness plays a repeating role, our exploration questions the common idea that reaching a destination guarantees fulfillment. The act of working towards a goal stands out as a significant factor for long-term happiness. As we passionately pursue our goals, let’s find joy not just at the top but in every step of the way. This comprehensive view of chasing goals and its complex connection with happiness encourages people to rethink success. It promotes a shift from seeing goals as mere endpoints to understanding them as essential parts of an ongoing and changing journey. By doing this, we embrace a more lasting and nuanced approach to happiness, one that thrives not only in achieving goals but in the very essence of the pursuit itself.

Resources

Dryburgh, A. (2015, June 29). The curse of success?. Forbes. https://www.forbes.com/sites/alastairdryburgh/2015/06/29/the-curse-of-success/?sh=5bf044695a4c

Ong, A. D., Mroczek, D. K., & Riffin, C. (2011, August 1). The health significance of positive emotions in adulthood and later life. Social and personality psychology compass. https://www.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/pmc/articles/PMC3173764/

Zhang, C.-Q., Leeming, E., Smith, P., Chung, P.-K., Hagger, M. S., & Hayes, S. C. (2018, January 11). Acceptance and Commitment Therapy for Health Behavior Change: A contextually-driven approach. Frontiers in psychology. https://www.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/pmc/articles/PMC5769281/

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Rebuttal Draft – Puffer

Posted on December 1, 2023 by puffer

Why Improved Driver Education and Manual cars will not help in lowering accidents, casualties, tickets, and road hazards.

Driver Education isn’t the problem that we face when it comes to most road issues; not paying attention, driving while intoxicated, speeding, and dangerous road hazards are. The claim I am Rebutting is “Could improved driver education aid in lowering accidents, causalities, tickets, and road hazards? And could Manual cars assist in saving the day?” However, this claim is untrue. While some argue that improved driver education and manual transmission vehicles could be a major panacea for road safety, others will shove facts at us the outcomes will not be as straightforward as we would think.

The main cause of accidents is actually Distracted Driving (ACCIDENT LIST CITE), not poor driver education. Distracted driving occurs very frequently and I’m sure almost all of us have done it or witnessed someone else doing it. Drivers will end up driving them selves off cliffs, into trees, and even head on into other cars all because they are not paying attention in some way or another. That text can wait. Even with all of the education drivers receive and the terrible accidents they hear about today, distracted driving is still the leading cause and is only getting worse. Human error is still significant factor in accidents, and with the amount of ignorance people have, making drivers education more complex may not help. The National Center for Biotechnology Information actually did a systematic review of other systematic reviews which resulted in proving that with more education, the test subjects overall driving performance increased… but reduction of accidents stayed the same.

If driver education could only increase the drivers knowledge of operating a car, why didn’t it reduce accidents? Is it because of how ignorant people still are that they proceed to ignore that facts and evidence and continue to drive while distracted, intoxicated, way too fast, or even just flat out recklessly? Because it seems that no matter where these drivers came from or what state they may be in, the same issues have occurred. This is a major issue and it seems driver education didn’t even seem to have an effect. It’s never good when people get too comfortable.

There is also the thought of these new Simulators that have become an eSport recently. But how effective are they in education? Well, considering how expensive they can be, they can be quite tricky to get an accurate representation of driving in real life. You will also need to train and hire staff to maintain, tune, repair and possibly build these machines. But once again, this won’t be very successful in reducing the true issues at hand like Driving while distracted, intoxicated, and more. It’s is also very difficult to simulate depth perception and speed through a simulator. So not only are you immune to the feeling, but your eyes are tricked as well. So, as much as it may assist in giving drivers an idea of how the car works, it can alter your driving style and throw you off; and the absolute last thing we want is people thinking they can drive like they are in a video game.

Another claim that isn’t entirely true is that manual cars could aid reducing accidents and more. Manual cars are tricky and confusing for most, and they can cause more issues if not handled properly. Drivers will stall a lot, create more accidents due to misuse of the transmission and could lock up or shift into the wrong gear at higher speeds or around corners, causing major mechanical malfunctions and nasty accidents. These transmissions could back up drivers education because of how much longer they take to learn. It is not easy nor quick to learn how to drive a Stick-Shift car, and trying to switch back and forth can also be confusing. Let’s not also forget how much money we would be wasting fixing these cars because new drivers keep overheating and wearing out the clutch to fast, grinding gears, and also possible blowing up engines by downshifting instead of upshifting. Also, they may be a distraction in itself. Imagine trying to learn the rules of road, operate a new style car where you must use every limb for many operations at once while paying attention to the car and it’s RPM’s, speed, and everything else. It’s complicated to say the least.

Some may argue that improved driver education will reduce accidents, but there has been extensive testing to prove otherwise. They performed an experiment with many age groups ranging in different amounts of driving experience and gave them more education to advance their knowledge and experience. The result of this testing demonstrated that more education helps drivers with driving, but not reducing accidents. As stated many times before, most of these accidents are human error, not mechanical or education related. The leading reason of these accidents? Distracted Driving. That is why so many accidents still happen. You can try to make drivers not prone to distracting, but the fact is that there are so many distractions out there it is almost impossible not to shift your attention… its human nature after all.

So in conclusion, increasing the difficulty of drivers education, and adding the increased effort of these manual transmissions is a waste of time, effort, parts, money, and possibly whole cars. The only talk of a system that could work is through a virtual simulator, but those can be pricey and also require a technician to be able to ensure the simulators are in working order. Also, for a simulator to give you a real driving experience you need to dump thousands of dollars to even come remotely close. So, do you think that it’s worth it? Reducing distracted is only getting more difficult in this day and age. With all of the features of these present day cars and everything that occurs around and even inside the vehicle, we are losing hope on less distracted driving. And adding manual to the mix will only complicate things more. What hope do we have left at reducing these accidents? This is why Improved Driver Education and Manual cars will not help in lowering accidents, casualties, tickets, and road hazards. So what do we do?

REVISION NOTES: REFERENCES FROM BIB, GRAMMAR CHECK, INSERT MISSING CITATIONS (multiple), AND COMPLETE REVISION

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Annotated Bibliography – Puffer

Posted on December 1, 2023 by puffer

Sources

“Is Driver’s Ed Good Enough? Most Americans Don’t Think So” Forbes. 11 July 2019. Web. 22 November 2023

Background: This article discusses how many Americans agree that the drivers education system is not good enough. They state that the test was “designed to be passed.” Many people claim that they don’t think they even have the experience they think they should have.

How I intend to use it: I Intend to incorporate this article in my essay as a useful tool that was used to interview other people, and to help give a few guidelines on what I think could be useful to create new strategies to improve future driving education.

“Development of Advanced Driving Simulator for Driving Schools” Acta Polytechnica CTU Proceedings. 2023. Database. 25 November 2023.

Background: This article discusses a lot of things related to all of my points but focuses more on implicating Driving Simulators into driving schools and more tech into drivers education as well. This could also help prepare drivers for many situations that could happen but in a safer environment.

How I intend to use it: I intend to implement this articles points on technology and simulations to strengthen my point on how these simulators may help drivers preparedness and reactions when encountering all of the things that can occur on the road. This way we can reduce the amount of accidents and increase the bar on driving tests to make it a bit more complicated to pass.

“How Other Countries Learn to Drive” webuyanycar.com 23 July 2014. Web. 25 November 2023.

Background: This article explains how other countries are taught to drive and how it compares to our Drivers Education program. It shows how many countries are very strict and heavy when it comes to driving, and how some are not.

How I intend to use it: I would like to use this resource to show the difference of how other countries sometimes have really in depth training with difficult tests and requirements, and how some just require you to pay a small fee to get on the road no matter what experience you have. I think I could strengthen my essay with this resource and how it shows that other countries are getting by with these more difficult ways.

“Practical Business Skills for Driving Instructors: How to Set up and Run Your Own Driving School” London : Kogan Page, Limited. 2010. 26 November 2023

Background: This is an instructional manual on how to set up a driving school by todays standards. This is a good example of how most schools are set up.

How I intend to use it: I intend to use this resource as an example to compare all of my points to a current day model. This way I have some evidence to back my claims and possibly find flaws in their system or information that school appear to be ignoring completely.

“Is driver education contributing towards road safety? a systematic review of systematic reviews” National Library of Medicine. NCBI.NLM. 13 January 2023. 26 November 2023

Background: This a government page that questions if driver education is contributing towards road safety. It observes other reviews and complies them into a bigger more informative review.

How Intend to use it: I intend to use it in my rebuttal as a counter-argument against my argument

“The Top 25 Causes of Car Crashes” “Top 25 Causes of Car Accidents: Exploring the Major Factors.” GJEL Accident Attorneys, November 24, 2023. 27 November 2023

Background: Explains the leading 25 causes of accidents.

How I intend to use it: To have a list of what the top 25 causes of accidents are and to refer to what is where.

“Teen Safe Driving” “Teen Driving.” NHTSA. Accessed December 3, 2023.

Background: Lot of information about teen driving by an official government website

How I intend to use it: For statistics, information, and general consultation

“How Many People Die From Car Accidents Each Year?” Forbes. Forbes Magazine, July 17, 2023. 5 December 2023

Background: Statistical information on Injuries and Fatalities that are results of car-related accidents.

How I intend to use it: For Statistical information on Injuries and Fatalities that are results of car-related accidents that will provide background and statistical evidence for my claims.

“Dirt Fish Rally School” DirtFish, October 1, 2023. 5 December 2023

Background: A rally schools website, used for a special type of multi-medium racing.

How I intend to use it: I will use it for their advanced driver education training and high-tech simulators as examples of how they can be implemented into basic training.

“Drivers Education Program Instructor: Fact Sheet” Accessed December 14, 2023. 10 December 2023

Background: NHTSA fact flyer to advertise safe driving through driver ed.

How I intend to use it: For information to use as context and to consult.

“How to Get Your New Jersey Driver’s License: Requirements for 2023” Driving. Accessed December 14, 2023. 10 December 2023

Background: How to obtain a driver’s license in NJ

How I intend to use it: Fact-checking and for new information.

“FORMULA 1 TRAINING GUIDE: ALL YOU NEED TO KNOW” Francks, Troy. GRAND PRIX 247, June 15, 2023. 10 December 2023

Background: Information on how F1 drivers train for their races

How I intend to use it: Fact check and information to compare and use sim rigs as another example.

“Distracted Driving” Centers for Disease Control and Prevention. Centers for Disease Control and Prevention, April 26, 2022. 10 December 2023

Background: Distracted driving information and facts posted by a government website. Explains many facts in order to define and inform distracted driving and it’s causes.

How I intend to use it: I intend to use this for facts and information on distracted driving. I also plan to use it to fact check my essay.

“How to Drive a Stick-Shift” Driving. March 28, 2012. 10 December 2023

Background: Directions and information on how to operate a Stick-Shift / Manual / Traditional style transmission within a this style vehicle.

How I intend to use it: Fact checking and instructions.

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Rebuttal Rewrite—Urbie

Posted on November 30, 2023 by Urbie

“Defending the Classroom: Rebutting the Strongest
Arguments Against Traditional Schooling”

Starting with my thesis, I believe that regular school attendance is generally better than homeschooling, except when considering kids with disabilities. It’s acknowledged that people have different points of views on this matter, homeschooling is good because it’s personalized. Each student can learn in their own way and understand subjects better. It’s flexible too. Students can go at their own pace, explore what they like, and create a learning space that works for them. This freedom helps them become responsible and good at deciding things for themselves. But, going to a regular school has its own good points, especially when it comes to making friends and learning how to be around different people. Regular schools also teach important life skills like managing time, meeting deadlines, and sticking to a schedule. These skills are useful for jobs and college. So, both ways of learning have good things. It depends on what works best for each student and what helps them learn and grow.

Homeschooling supporters argue that parents can tailor the learning experience to their children’s needs and interests. They believe that this customization helps kids understand subjects better. While this point is valid, it’s essential to recognize that not all parents are experts in every subject and if everyone can be a teacher what will be the point of to become a teacher in anything you have to go learn More and get trained also no one can be an expert in everything and know everything. Additionally, teaching way of the parents, for education it can affect the students’ adaptability to different teaching styles in the future because been in college or school or anywhere else and someone is teaching you something in not going to be like your mam or dad teaching between four walls in the house. Also, the school it’s a practice for your work like in the future has example in school you have to be on time, listen to other people, respect other people, respect the deadlines, do your homework and you’re job in the future is going to be the same thing you have to be on time, listen to other people, follow rules and have tasks to do.

Another significant aspect of homeschooling is the flexibility it offers in terms of schedules. Students can learn at their own pace and explore non-academic interests means they are their own boss. While flexibility is a valuable trait, a structured learning environment in traditional schools instills vital skills such as time management and meeting deadlines essential for future jobs and college. Moreover, sticking to a routine at school contributes to the development of social skills. On the other hand, too homeschooling can be beneficial for a part of the people in the world because sometimes people can have some issues where is too much work for them and it’s also hard to wake up every day and been in the society of the traditional school , so study from the house will be the best option for them , also it can keep them away from other issue as from bullying and avoiding the stigma of a labeled disability.

Advocates for homeschooling often highlight the advantage of individual attention, claiming that it addresses each child’s unique learning style more effectively than crowded classrooms. But regular schools also help kids in different ways, like special classes and tutoring. A study from Walden University says regular classrooms are important. Being with kids from different backgrounds helps with social skills and working together. This is important for real life, not just school. Talking and being friends with different kids helps us understand each other. Being in a regular school is good for learning how to be with others. This is important for jobs and life. Homeschooling can be good for some things, but being in a real school helps with many parts of growing up. It’s not just about classes – it’s about making friends and being ready for different things in life. So, some people like homeschooling because it’s good for one kid’s way of learning. But regular schools help with many things – not just learning from books. Both ways have good points, and people should think about what’s best for kids’ learning and growing up.

In conclusion, the benefits of homeschooling, such as personalized learning, flexible schedules, and individual attention, should be weighed against the advantages of regular schooling. A well- rounded education goes beyond academic knowledge; it includes the development of social skills, adaptability, and exposure to diverse perspectives. While homeschooling may have its merits, my thesis maintains that, in most cases, traditional schooling provides a more comprehensive and beneficial educational experience.

To recap everything, the debate between homeschooling and regular schooling revolves around the balance between personalized education and the broader advantages of a traditional school setting. While homeschooling offers unique benefits, as we describe before about the benefits to part of the people in the world with special cases. It’s crucial to consider the holistic development that traditional schools provide. The skills learned in a structured school environment, including time management, social interactions, and exposure to diverse perspectives, contribute significantly to a well-rounded education. Thus, my thesis stands firm, asserting that, in most cases, traditional schooling offers a more comprehensive and beneficial educational experience.

References

Walden University. (n.d.). Why Do People Act Differently in Groups Than They Do Alone? Walden University. https://www.waldenu.edu/online-masters-programs/ms-in-psychology/resource/why-do-people-act-differently-in-groups-than-they-do-alone

ICHER By Robert Lyon (September 21) 2015, MESCHOOLING STUDENTS WITH SPECIAL NEEDS: Research Review. ICHER Blog. https://icher.org/blog/?p=2122

Special needs students – the advantages of homeschooling. Calvert Education. (2019, January 3). Retrieved May 31, 2022, from https://www.calverteducation.com/homeschooling-children-with-special-needs/special-needs-students-the-advantages-of-homeschooling

 Special needs parenting: The pros and cons of homeschooling a child with disabilities. Angel Sense. (2019, February 11). Retrieved May 31, 2022, from https://www.angelsense.com/blog/special-needs-parenting-the-pros-and-cons-of-homeschooling-a-child-with-disabilities/ 

 READY KIDS Occupational Therapy-Homeschooling For Special Needs Children: Weight Pros & cons.The ready kids team. Homeschooling for Special Needs Children: Weighing Pros & Cons (readykids.com.au)

Ray, B. D. (2017). Research facts on homeschooling. National Home Education Research Institute. Research Facts on Homeschooling – National Home Education Research Institute (nheri.org)

5. Medlin, R. G. (2000). Home schooling and the question of socialization. Peabody Journal of Education, 75(1-2), 107-123. Home Schooling and the Question of Socialization: Peabody Journal of Education: Vol 75, No 1-2 (tandfonline.com)

6. Rudner, L. M. (1999). Scholastic achievement and demographic characteristics of home school students in 1998. Education Policy Analysis Archives, 7(8). ERIC – ED424309 – Scholastic Achievement and Demographic Characteristics of Home School Students in 1998., Education Policy Analysis Archives, 1999-Mar-23

7. Isenberg, E. J. (2007). What have we learned about homeschooling? Peabody Journal of Education, 82(2-3), 387-409. What Have We Learned about Homeschooling? on JSTOR

8. Gaither, M. (2009). Homeschooling in the USA: Past, present, and future. Theory and Research in Education, 6(3), 331-346. Homeschooling in the USA: Past, present and future – Milton Gaither, 2009 (sagepub.com)

9.American University School of Education Online. (n.d.). The importance of school attendance. American University School of Education Online. https://soeonline.american.edu/blog/importance-of-school-attendance/

Dunckley, V. (2021, September). The research on homeschooling. Psychology Today. https://www.psychologytoday.com/us/blog/parenting-translator/202109/the-research-homeschooling

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Rebuttal—HockeyPlayer

Posted on November 30, 2023 by hockeyplayer

Better Stats Mean the Best?

When we think of the best players of all time do we think of their stats? Or do we think of these achievements these players made throughout the years they played, or is it how these players changed the landscape of the game. Stats have caused many to have different opinions on who they believe are the best players, but how do you take one statistic from the hundreds that there are to declare that one stands above the rest? Stats can also be used out of context for example a player that played the game in the past may have scored less three point shots then today’s player because of a rule change that brought the three point line closer to the basket to make the NBA games more high scoring. If a player has missed more shots then another does that mean they are worse then that player, or if a player has scored more goals in more games does that make them better.

In the article “Are We Becoming Too Obsessed With Stats In Sports?” its explained how people today, are taking these advanced stats and comparing every player with them, the problem with that is these advanced stats don’t include everything that goes into a player for example the stats could be comparing the points per game and the assists per game between two players and only using these to compare the players when a players may be better in other major areas then these two fields. It explained how stats are being overvalued and can’t truly show how dominant a player is. The article also goes into how people may never watch these players play and just go to the stats section of the players career and use that to define them, this leads to many people believing another player is better than another.

In my next article, “LeBron James vs. Michael Jordan: How their careers compare” this was a summary of the two players’ overall careers and who holds the better statistics and how there’s so many different ways to compare the players. The first statistic was Lebron has had the longer career, going into his 21st season while Jordan played 15 seasons. Many people could use this stat to say Lebron was more dominant over a longer period of time, or someone could say Jordan was more dominant in his years played the Lebron. The next stat was all time points scored LeBron’s has 38,799 while Jordan had 32,292. Lebron currently holds the record for most points scored of all time, this stat can be a major one used to say Lebron was better than Jordan, or you could use another stat which shows Jordan who averaged the most points per game of all time was better. The final stat the article would use was championships won which has Jordan currently ahead with his six championships won while Lebron James has 4 championship wins, However Lebron has been to the championship ten times total compared to Jordan’s six unfortunately for Lebron he lost six of those finals while Jordan never lost a single NBA final. The article’s overall conclusion was how do choose which statistic makes a player better when there are so many different ones to choose from.

In my final article I chose “What is the average points per game (PPG) in the NBA by year? Looking at the last decade and evolution of scoring” In this article is goes over how the 2022-23 season was one of the highest scoring seasons ever in the NBA. Due to the new rules that they did not have in the past which has led to the explosion of the three point shot, the game is played much different in todays game of basketball then in the past. This is yet another example of how the best statistics cause people to think players are better than others, due to more scoring this means there will be a higher assist average and higher points per game averages for everyone. A player back in the day before these new rules would average around fifteen point a game and be treated as a superstar however in todays game this kind of player would be what you hope for from a sixth man. In 1996 around 16 three point shots were being attempted per game while in 2022-23 the average is 34. My purpose for choosing this article is to show the effect that stats don’t mean everything when comparing players.

In today’s world with all of this technology players stats are being more used now than ever before, and the effect of this is causing fans to have all different kinds of opinions on who is the best, but they are consistently downplaying the past players and their greatness and what they brought to the game of basketball.

References

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Causal Rewrite—Urbie

Posted on November 30, 2023 by Urbie

A Causal Thing about Homeschooling and School

” There is no elevator to success you have to take the stairs” is one of the most important things you learn in school because you have to work and make effort for passing class by class till the end.

1.Traditional schools have big on improving the socializing of children’s.

2.schools serve as places where children form connections, make friends, and become part of a broader community.

3.School events like homecoming, school trips, prom, and graduation are seen as memorable and significant experiences.

4.The period that attending public school is a rite of passage and an integral part of life’s journey.

     5.The transition from one school year to the next or from school to other life stages can be a              significant and proud moment in a person’s life.

6. school life have a really good impact on your future.

7.On the other hand, we highlight the freedom and flexibility associated with homeschooling.

8. Homeschooling is to learn and live within the comfort of one’s own home, free from the constraints of traditional school schedules and environments.

9.Homeschooling can lead to fewer instances of stress and depression related to tests and exams.

10.homeschooling can be advantageous for specific cases, such as special needs children or individuals with disabilities.

11.Homeschooling is presented as a more accessible and adaptable approach for these groups.

12.We also reference various sources and articles that discuss homeschooling, its advantages for special needs children, and the pros and cons of this approach.

13.The sources listed provide a basis for the claims made in the text.

14.In conclusion, the text presents an exploration of the pros and cons of homeschooling compared to traditional schooling, with a focus on the importance of socialization and the potential benefits for special needs children.

15. Is essential to consider individual circumstances and needs when deciding between homeschooling and traditional schooling, as both have their advantages and drawbacks.

Sources :

1. Special needs students – the advantages of homeschooling. Calvert Education. (2019, January 3). Retrieved May 31, 2022, from https://www.calverteducation.com/homeschooling-children-with-special-needs/special-needs-students-the-advantages-of-homeschooling

This article is about the advantages of homeschooling to special needs. The relation between this article and my research is that is showing the good part of homeschooling and when it can be advantageous.

2. Special needs parenting: The pros and cons of homeschooling a child with disabilities. Angel Sense. (2019, February 11). Retrieved May 31, 2022, from https://www.angelsense.com/blog/special-needs-parenting-the-pros-and-cons-of-homeschooling-a-child-with-disabilities/ 

This article mainly focusses about that’s there is some kind of activities and events where you cannot be able has a parents to provide to your children at the house but the school can provide them.

3. READY KIDS Occupational Therapy-Homeschooling For Special Needs Children: Weight Pros & cons.The ready kids team. Homeschooling for Special Needs Children: Weighing Pros & Cons (readykids.com.au)

This article is focusing on the Pros & cons of home schooling to special needs children ,it’s kind of an argument because okay homeschooling is better for special needs children but in the same time it’s has some bad effects.

4. Ray, B. D. (2017). Research facts on homeschooling. National Home Education Research Institute. Research Facts on Homeschooling – National Home Education Research Institute (nheri.org)

Researchers with numbers and strategies about homeschooling.

5. Medlin, R. G. (2000). Home schooling and the question of socialization. Peabody Journal of Education, 75(1-2), 107-123. Home Schooling and the Question of Socialization: Peabody Journal of Education: Vol 75, No 1-2 (tandfonline.com)

Written a journal about homeschooling and the question of socializing.

6. Rudner, L. M. (1999). Scholastic achievement and demographic characteristics of home school students in 1998. Education Policy Analysis Archives, 7(8). ERIC – ED424309 – Scholastic Achievement and Demographic Characteristics of Home School Students in 1998., Education Policy Analysis Archives, 1999-Mar-23

Demographic about homeschool when it’s first begin.

7. Isenberg, E. J. (2007). What have we learned about homeschooling? Peabody Journal of Education, 82(2-3), 387-409. What Have We Learned about Homeschooling? on JSTOR

Homeschooling impacts in general.

8. Gaither, M. (2009). Homeschooling in the USA: Past, present, and future. Theory and Research in Education, 6(3), 331-346. Homeschooling in the USA: Past, present and future – Milton Gaither, 2009 (sagepub.com)

This article is most national studies about homeschooling and how people feel about it.

9.American University School of Education Online. (n.d.). The importance of school attendance. American University School of Education Online. https://soeonline.american.edu/blog/importance-of-school-attendance/

Describing the importance of attending school.

Dunckley, V. (2021, September). The research on homeschooling. Psychology Today. https://www.psychologytoday.com/us/blog/parenting-translator/202109/the-research-homeschooling

The academic, social, and long-term outcomes for children in home schools.

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Definition Rewrite—Urbie

Posted on November 30, 2023 by Urbie

School is more than study in the book

If there were no other reason to homeschool your kids, the socialization they get in school would be enough. —John Holt

The role of education in ancient civilization thousands of years ago going to school was super important. It wasn’t just about learning facts; it was the main way people learned everything about life. Imagine if everyone had to go to school to make friends, have fun, and understand how life works. It wasn’t a choice – it was a basic part of living. Schools back then were not just for reading and math. They were like the heart of society, where you not only learned stuff but also figured out how to handle life. It was where you met friends and learned how to be a good person. The lessons weren’t just about subjects; they also taught you how to behave and what was right or wrong. So, in those ancient times, education was the key to becoming a smart and good person who could contribute to the community. 

“Educating the mind without educating the heart is no education at all”-Aristotle.

Public School is the place where all our life connections start, such as joining clubs, making friends, enjoying the time with new people besides our parents and family. We feel that we’re a part of a community outside our household and making good memories. Also, we don’t need to forget that school is an experience for a very long term with thousands of years and histories; so, nothing can replace all this work. Several of the events that stick in our mind our whole lives are homecoming, school trips, prom, first day and last day of school, and graduation. Life, its chapters, and every time you do a chapter and move forward to the next one, you feel happy and proud of yourself. But, at the same time, you will have missed the past, but life must continue. For each person who went to public school and completed this chapter of his life, the best feeling for him is the day he graduated, and he’s going to enter a new chapter in his life after school. Based on Monikah Schuschu (writer at CollegeVine high school) it’s where there’s a last time for everything and is the limitations of foresight.

For all people how go to public schools they ask always their self “Why school choice is good for homeschoolers” based on Kerry McDonald

Homeschooling in the U.S. has changed a lot in the last 50 years. At first, people thought it was a bit unusual, but now it’s seen as a normal way to learn outside of traditional schools. More and more families are choosing homeschooling because they want a different kind of education. One big reason for the rise in homeschooling is that parents and teachers feel traditional classrooms might not be the best fit for every student. Homeschooling lets families go at their own pace and focus on what each child likes and needs to learn.

Another reason is that families want to bring their own values and culture into education. Homeschooling allows parents to teach their kids based on their beliefs, making learning more personal and meaningful. Technology has also made homeschooling easier. There are lots of online tools and resources that families can use to make learning fun and interactive. Plus, homeschooling communities have grown, allowing families to connect, share ideas, and support each other. Nowadays, homeschooling is recognized as a valid choice, and there are rules in place to make sure homeschooled kids get a good education. It’s become a mainstream option for families who want a more flexible and customized approach to learning.

Statistics reveal a substantial increase in the U.S. homeschooling population, from 850,000 in 1999 to 1.8 million children by 2012, constituting 3.4% of K–12 students. Although there was a slight dip in homeschooling numbers between 2012 and 2016, some states with robust education choice programs experienced growth in homeschoolers. Demographically, homeschooling families have become more diverse, challenging the previous stereotype of being predominantly white, middle-class, and Christian. Motivations for homeschooling have diversified, with concerns about the traditional school environment and a desire for a more personalized, child-centered education emerging as primary reasons. The article suggests that the availability of education choice programs, such as education savings accounts (ESAs) and vouchers, may influence the growth of homeschooling in certain states.

Homeschooling is also identified as a driver of education innovation, with examples including hybrid homeschooling models and learning centers offering flexible and personalized approaches to education. While there appears to be a slowdown in national homeschooling growth, state-level data in some areas show significant increases. The paper concludes by emphasizing the importance of educational freedom and choice, encouraging homeschoolers to support such programs as they contribute to greater educational liberty for all. families.

Elective home education is the place plane of freedom between your own walls no one is here to give you orders or having a person call a  teacher where to sit down and listen to her properly, there is no annoying. people around bothering you the environment, you don’t have to wait for the weekend to have break from waking up early to go to school, you are always in the weekend, less depressed from test and exams because you own everything at your own. But in the same time homeschooling is great for some people who might find it hard to go to regular school every day. Like, for kids with special needs or those who can’t easily leave the house due to a disability. 

References

Best Edu Learning. (n.d.). Role of Education in Ancient Civilizations. The Role of Education in Ancient Civilizations – Best Edu Learning

Tandfonline. (2023). Journal of the History of education Society volume 52. From personal memories to public histories of education: a challenge for the historian. From personal memories to public histories of education: a challenge for the historian: History of Education: Vol 52, No 6 (tandfonline.com)

College Vine. (n.d.). Making High School Memories. College Vine Blog. Making Memories: Why the Things You Remember About High School Will Surprise You | CollegeVine Blog

SplashLearn. (n.d.). 9 Best Homeschool Curriculums for Children with Special Needs. SplashLearn Blog. https://www.splashlearn.com/blog/9-best-homeschool-curriculums-for-children-with-special-needs/

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Visual Rewrite-Propel78

Posted on November 29, 2023 by propel78

We Can Talk About It :30 | Seize the Awkward | Ad Council-https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=0Ig6jqru1a

0:0-0:1- for this first one second what I see is a teenage girl in her room with the lights off and is sitting on her bed she has curtains covering her windows, and it looks like it is mid day out. The curtains are cracked open a little bit in the corner of the room. She has a desk with a mirror and around the mirror is a light string with lightbulbs there is a book bag on her bed and it looks like she’s doing homework, and is also on her phone.

0:1-0:2-she’s on her phone sitting on her bed. She looks like she is not in a good mood, or is unhappy. It might be because of suffering going on or because stressed out from doing schoolwork but she is texting someone and said something to that person.

0:2-0:3-the person this teenager texted responded with it all in your head and just think happy thoughts so this makes me think the teenager is depressed or is not in a good mental state and is down right now and the person she’s contacting is probably one of her friends due to the response or a family member and they seem concerned.

0:3-0:4-she is having a conversation with the person on her phone. She’s still in her room on the bed and the conversation is someone trying to cheer her up or help her through a dark time.

0:4-0:5-throughout this, it cuts from her phone and the response text from the person saying just think happy thoughts to her face, while her facial expression is unhappy or sad. She does not look happy or well in the background and seems she has pictures on her wall.

0:5-0:6-It goes from a image on her face of her being on pleased to it looks like a family dinner, where the mother and daughter, and presumably other members of the family like a father all eating looks like a family of a ethical race.

0:6-0:7-the family was eating dinner and the daughter looks over at the mother and gives the mother a side I look or a look of discuss as if something was wrong or off.

0:7-0:8-the daughter continues to stare at her. Otherwise she continues to eat. The daughter holds a fierce of anger or discuss towards her mother, or this older woman at the table.

0:8-0:9-Then it cuts over to a different family having dinner that looks like it’s at a diner due to the salt and pepper shakers on the table and the plastic cups and the red booth style reminds me of a diner, and it looks like as a mother and another figure, and then a son, with a sad or depressed feeling

0:9-0:10-the sun looks up at his mother and looks pleased and is staring his drink with his straw maybe to distract his mind.

0:10-0:11-then it cuts to a kid laying in his bed do not know, male or female, but is on their phone on some app.

0:11-0:12-the phone screen is lighting up and shining on the teenage girls face and looks like she is being absorbed into the phone or sucked into the technology

0:12-0:13-then it cuts to a digital board like she is transported into a digital world of technology, like Twitter Instagram, or like Facebook style because you see a lot of heart comments and other symbols that you see on these websites.

0:13-0:14-then it cuts more technology stuff like ads and pop-ups follow buttons and different headlines are approaching.

0:14-0:15-Different words and different advertisements, pop up and flashy things to make people appeal to it like you would see on all different platforms of social media in today’s world.

0:15-0:16-then it cut back to a different girl laying on her couch looking like it is mid day out or early morning and she throws her phone down and leans back.

0:16-0:17-she’s leaning back on the couch with her eyes closed, and she is taking deep breaths into her nose and out through her mouth, and she is off her phone, which makes me seem what she read, or saw on her phone made her unhappy.

0:17-0:18-there is another person in the room looks like a guy, and he is leaning against a chair and sitting on the floor in the living room. There is another chair off to the left of him and a table behind them with a vase and flowers in it.

0:18-0:19-he asked the girl laying on the couch if she wanted to talk about it because he is under the assumption that she is not in a good mood, or is upset because of the way she is acting.

0:19-0:21-the girl on the couch, shakes her head, and he says yeah and she says yeah in a soft tone

0:21-0:22-then it cuts to someone laying in their bed, holding hands looks like a girl and another person holding hands has a lot of rings on and jewelry. There are covers on the bed.

0:22-0:23-and they are talking about being in the bed and it’s OK to be sad from what it looks like because they are having a conversation and the facial expressions presumed to make them seem unhappy.

0:23-0:24-then it cuts to the first teenage girl was sitting on her bed outside sitting in the car with the person she was presumably texting and they were talking outside of the car both with facial expressions of concern or unhappy.

0:24-0:27-the friend reinsures the girl that he is there for her, emphasizing the importance of being supportive friend the text on the screen reinforces the idea that in the time of distress having someone to lean on, can make a significant difference in the way the person may feel.

0:27-0:30-the final importance of being a supportive friend, recognizing the signs of distress and offering a listening year to those who may feel isolated unheard.

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