Never Enough Time in a Day
Being a full-time college student while working many hours throughout the week is like forgetting that the body is the temple. Trying to fit in extracurricular activities, trying to keep up with their social life, and other factors that play along in working-college students’ lives that keeps them busy is tough for them because their mind never rests. While not getting enough sleep, the brain is always on go-mode, and when it is time to sleep, working college students cannot even reset their mind for the next day because they’re essentially just taking a nap, only getting little hours of sleep each night. Fitting in all these hours into one day is almost impossible, and this struggle these students are experiencing is causing their overall performance to get worse. Mental health is very important, but for working-college students, that is the last priority they seem to worry about.
In the article, “College vs. Paycheck,” author Rainesford Stauffer explains her experience as a working college student who never had enough time for anything but school and work while struggling with peoples’ opinions and telling her to choose between her education or her job. For example, “It wasn’t just my jobless peers who thought I was doing college the wrong way. Well-meaning professors and administrators showed the same lack of understanding for the plight of the working learner.” Many people do not understand that most working college students get a job because they need the money, not because they want the money. Over thinking the idea that one cannot pay for college because they are a first-generation or low-income student automatically triggers stress, leading the student to be under pressure for finding a job to pay for their education. Imagine that added pressure of mentors and administrators trying to advise one to focus on their education more than the job that is paying for it. Stauffer emphasizes in her article that she felt guilty for picking her job over her education most of the time she was in college but also understanding that she needed the job to get an education. She also mentions that essentially the root of this mental health issue, stress, comes from the amount of tuition that students have to pay overall. For instance, “Much of the debate around higher-education inequity focuses on lessening the cost of tuition, Great, but the burden on working students is often left out of that conversation. We need affordable tuition, but also need to acknowledge other life expenses that are just as essential to learning.” Many people who are not in these working-college students’ positions do not understand what they go through on a daily basis and why they do it, leading those students to not recognize that their mental health needs to be stable before anything else, and Stauffer’s idea supports the main cause of those working learners’ mental health issues.
Moreover, there are many examples of poor mental health such as depression, anxiety, phobias, and way more, but the most common of working college students is stress and sleep deprivation because they hardly get enough sleep throughout the week at the same time as their stress levels are rising. Carrying a busy schedule on their shoulders, completing assignments, fitting in their social life, and participating in extracurricular activities is like never turning the switch off. All of these priorities that one handles throughout the day leaves them barely any time for sleep. While going back and forth between all of these priorities, working learners forget that their body is the temple, and they will not perform well in their everyday activities if they do not take care of it.
In the article, “Not Enough Hours in the Day: Work Study Students and Sleep,” author Zachariah Ezer informs his audience on many facts and examples of work study students struggling with sleep deprivation. For instance, “In 2014, an article in the Argus was published stating that ‘Farias, [an administrator], determined last year that nearly 80 students work above the recommended 20-hour limit, with some working up to 40 hours in a single week.’” Not only are working college students not getting enough sleep, but they also are handling the added stress of staying on campus if they are a low-income student and have a hard time paying for their education. Ezer explains that working students that are low-income or first generation feel like they do not fit in when it comes to their social life, especially at elite universities, because they are always busy or because they are “weeded out of friendships based on what [they] could afford.” This causes those students to feel intimidated or having sleepless nights because all they could afford is paying their tuition, not having enough money for much else. Ezer does mention some good examples of working college students experiences, and some people may believe that the author is exaggerating his words, but unfortunately, this is typical for working college students.
Concluding this situation in many Universities, working college students forget that their body is a machine that needs to remain fueled and pure at all times, it is not a robot. When those college students tend to forget that , they do not sleep much, they do not eat healthy or not enough, and this greatly affects their performance in class, at work, and all other priorities that need to get done. One’s brain never shuts off and restarts for the next day because they are already thinking about their busy schedule, and their mind always remains with the power button on instead of getting a good amount of sleep and refreshing it. Yes, all college students may struggle from some type of mental health illness and experiencing their own struggle, but focusing on only working college students, mental health issues are very common. This is where time management takes place, where the population of working learners realize how to manage their time and are essentially just trying to survive at this point. This is unfortunate because college students should feel like they are living and not just surviving. However, there are just simply not enough hours in a day for these hard-working college students, and as time goes by, the mental health issues of this population is impairing.
Stauffer, R. (2018, August 28). College vs. Paycheck. Retrieved March 10, 2020.
Ezer, Z. (2017, March 30). Not Enough Hours in the Day: Work Study Students and Sleep. Retrieved March 10, 2020.
Professor, I’m looking for feedback on this essay because I’ve chosen it for my Rewrite candidate. My primary concern on this is . . .
Professor, I’m looking for feedback on this essay because I’ve chosen it for my Rewrite candidate. My primary concern on this is my introduction paragraph and my conclusion paragraph.
I see the purpose of your Introduction, OMG, but your language makes it hard to follow. The primary obstacle to our understanding is the nature of your sentences. Almost without exception, they follow the same pattern, which gives readers the impression you’re not going anywhere. Allow me to demonstrate:
1. Being a full-time college student while working many hours throughout the week is like forgetting that the body is the temple.
2. Trying to fit in extracurricular activities, trying to keep up with their social life, and other factors that play along in working-college students’ lives that keeps them busy is tough for them because their mind never rests.
3. While not getting enough sleep, the brain is always on go-mode, and when it is time to sleep, working college students cannot even reset their mind for the next day because they’re essentially just taking a nap, only getting little hours of sleep each night.
4. Fitting in all these hours into one day is almost impossible, and this struggle these students are experiencing is causing their overall performance to get worse.
5. Mental health is very important, but for working-college students, that is the last priority they seem to worry about.
Do you see it?
1. Being is like forgetting.
2. Trying, trying, keeps them busy.
3. (not) Getting sleep, taking a nap, does not reset the mind.
4. Fitting, experiencing struggle, is causing low performance.
Here are the details you want to convey:
1. College students work too many hours.
2. They have active social lives and extracurricular activities.
3. Their minds never rest.
4. Their brains are on “go-mode.”
5. They merely nap.
6. Sleep deprivation makes them less efficient students.
You could almost do that in one sentence.
A more effective Introduction would be a simple definition paragraph devoted to “go mode,” a very nice phrase that evokes the state of mind you’re describing. What’s the connection between being constantly on the go and mental health? Worthy of a good introduction.
I understand your concern about the Conclusion, OMG. By the time we read your body paragraph material, you’ve already made all the claims that now appear in your conclusion. It has little purpose.
The best conclusions do the briefest of summaries and add a bit of new material that wraps up the argument and provides a new insight.
The body needs proper maintenance.
College students treat their bodies poorly.
They don’t recharge their brains with sufficient sleep.
Unhealthy bodies can’t sustain healthy minds.
(Then you detour to time management)
(Then you detour to what a shame they’re not really living)
(Then you detour to they develop mental health issues)
It sounds like the conclusion you want to draw is that students don’t recognize the toll their 24-hour-a-day lifestyle is taking on their bodies and brains. They suffer depression, anxiety, phobias without understanding the simple explanation: they are denying their brains what it needs to stay healthy (for the most part, sleep). Their solution to the problem of having too much to do is to work harder, trying to get ahead of the deadlines, and when they fail, they become anxious and depressed. Is that where you’re going? That’s worthy of a conclusion.
Thank you, this helped me out a lot!