Anne Frank, Novelist
It seems counterintuitive that Anne Frank could not have accomplished a well written novel at the age of fifteen because she was too young. The author claims that Frank was a young genius because of the way she went back to revise her old journal entries to make them more mature and balanced for a novel. If she could write this well, regardless of her age, then there was no reason her journal could not be continued into a novel. You can see how highly people praise her work by being a novelist at such a young age and having a substantial impact on her readers.
Clean Girls get Sicker?
It seems counterintuitive that girls have to behave more like stereotypical boys to achieve better health. Studies are beginning to show that the cleanliness of girlhood increases the development of diseases, like asthma, because of their lack of exposure to dirt and germs when they are young. The author claims that when children are in their adolescent years, getting them dirty is better for their health to reduce sickness. Perfection should not be considered if getting dirty prevents autoimmune diseases later on; toss them outside to play in the mud.
Extreme Parenting:
It seems counterintuitive that overly influential parents are worse for children by creating excessive dependency. The author claims that persistent drilling of skills can actually cause the child to lose individuality, creativity, and leadership skills. If parents allow their children to make decisions with less guidance and pressure, it can lead to students applying their best efforts, making mistakes, developing into problem-solvers, and learning something in the end.
Counterintuitive Fall 2024 
Anne Frank, Novelist
It seems counterintuitive that Anne Frank could not have accomplished a well written novel at the age of fifteen because she was simply too young.
—I think you’ve misunderstood the premise of the article, BlogUser, but maybe you’ve simply adopted an offbeat premise. I did tell you to be Purposeful. I didn’t say I had to agree with your purpose. This is a perfectly good Summary of an article; I just don’t agree that it accurately reflects the attitudes of the people you portray.
Clean Girls get Sicker?
It seems counterintuitive that girls should behave more like stereotypical boys in order to achieve better health.
—That’s a good start.
—A slight improvement might be that girls have to behave more like boys to get healthier.
—It’s irrelevant that dresses and ladylike behavior are a stereotype. You would score more points if you said those aspects of “girlhood” are not found among girls who are more likely to develop resistance to viruses and bacteria.
—Your “if/then” construction is apt but sloppy. You say: “but if they have less of a chance to get autoimmune diseases later on, allowing them to get a little dirty outside might be the best bet.” It says we should let them get dirty if they reduce their chances of getting sick INSTEAD OF: “If getting dirty prevents autoimmune disease, we should toss them in the mud.”
Extreme Parenting:
It seems counterintuitive that extreme parenting might be worse for children.
—Not bad, but it’s not particularly surprising that anything extreme might have negative consequences. It would be more counterintuitive to claim that overly supportive and influential parents could create children who are too dependent.
—Picky grammar note: The series in your last sentence is 3/4 parallel. You use applying/making/learning without error, but “utilize” doesn’t match. It’s not parallel.
—Parallel alternatives
1. it can lead to students applying their best efforts, making mistakes, solving their own problems, and learning something in the end.
2. it can lead to students applying their best efforts, making mistakes, utilizing logic, and learning something in the end.
3. it can lead to students applying their best efforts, making mistakes, maturing into problem-solvers, and learning something in the end.
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I appreciate your feedback Mr. Hodges! I see what adjustments I need to make to be successful in this task. I will edit and repost. Thank you. 🙂
Wonderful. Just a reminder to Edit and Update, not Re-Post. There’s no need to start from a blank page. Just open your work in Edit, make your changes, and click Update. (WordPress will save your early drafts in an archive you can always retrieve. I’ll demonstrate on Monday.)
Yes, I edited the original and didn’t repost, just worded my response badly. Thank you!
Nice work.
Graded.