Purposeful Summary Task
Pizza Hut, KFC, and the Great Pyramids of Giza
It seems counterintuitive that it would be anywhere even remotely close to appropriate that a Pizza Hut, and a KFC would be placed in close proximity to one of the most fascinating and wondrous structures in the world from the time of antiquity. Scholars have long researched and uncovered artifacts and pieces of history that give us a birds eye view of life in ancient Egypt, which was an extremely advanced civilization. So in a way, putting these cheap, greasy fast food chains directly across the way from these structures that show the absolute power and magnitude of intelligence from the Ancient Egyptians, is disrespectful. I would say that nobody wants to spend time and money to go and visit one of the seven wonders of the world and their view be obstructed by a modern chain food restaurant (if you’d even call them restaurants). This really shows the depth in which mega corporations will go to capitalize on quite literally anything, tourism especially. But in reality, these structures should not be tainted by the after effects that come with the congestion of tourism like unhealthy, distasteful fast food chains.
Vancouver and Heroin
It seems counterintuitive that people with drug problems should be handed heroin, syringes, and other paraphernalia inside the “drug goodie bags” that they are handing out in Vancouver. Heroin destroys lives, and somehow it is being looked at through a lens of “helping” a drug addicted person. Why is it that heroin can be handed out free of cost, but insulin (a life sustaining drug to diabetics) can cost hundreds for a single vial without insurance. Maybe instead of spending time and money giving out free heroin to those who chose to live that life (even though addiction is an illness as well), they should be giving out free insulin, chemotherapy, and other life saving drugs to those who have no choice but to live life with an illness that could very well kill them without the proper care and/or treatment. These drug addicted people are real human beings who deserve real help and intervention. They are individuals who have families or once had families who loved them and frankly, it is inhumane and immoral to be exploiting them with the very thing that is dragging them down and preventing them from living healthy lives.
Men Defining Rape
It seems counterintuitive that men are given a platform to speak on the rape of women. Now, historically men and their word have been valued more than women but some men still to this day have a medieval mindset when it comes to what they deem as rape or sexual assault. For example in the Code of Hammurabi, if a virgin were raped, it is property damage against her father. Yes that’s right, it wasn’t deemed as damaging to her, but to her father. This demonstrates a mindset that a lot of men think of women as property to do whatever they please with. Something comparable to this would be the GOP’s meditation on what’s really rape. In this, different types of rape are nitpicked and pulled at, all to try and deem what is really rape by you guessed it, men. If there is not spoken, clear, and concise consent (which can be withdrawn at any time for any reason) from an individual who is over the age of eighteen then it is rape. It is absolutely abysmal that certain types of rape would not be deemed criminal. Although rape isn’t just exclusive to women and many men are victims of rape and sexual assault as well, according to statistics, 91% of victims of rape and sexual assault, are women. Of these statistics, only 2% of rapists are convicted and imprisoned. Going off of these statistics alone, men (especially the men in power today) should not have the platform that they do to speak on the issue of rape and sexual assault.
Beautifully done, HDT. I rarely see summaries that so clearly and cogently describe such consistent attitudes. Your writing is wordy, and I can help you with that if you need the wordiness identified, but otherwise, there’s little you could do to improve these samples significantly.
Graded. Revision and regrading always encouraged.
HDT, I see that your post is in the Feedback Please category, but you haven’t made any revisions or asked me for any particular sort of feedback. I won’t proceed blindly because I don’t know if this request was made before or after I offer to help you eliminate wordiness. I do want to help, but not waste either of our time providing advice that helps only me.
How can I help?
Sorry about that Professor Hodges, I explained in a reply to my Stone Money assignment why I’ve been away from my computer as of late. As for the feedback, yes I would greatly appreciate knowing how to avoid making things too wordy. Thank you!