0:00-0:02
The first clip is a African American girl with jean pants and a shirt sitting alone in what looks to be her room on the phone. She is sitting down on a bed with blankets, papers, and pillows looking to be texting someone but throws it on the bed right after. Looking at the room’s interior, there is a window with blue curtains that block the lighting from outside which makes the room look more blue and dark, pictures on the wall, a wooding table with what looks to be a make-up area due to the brush palates in a cup, a tiny mirror that used to see up close, a huge mirror with lightbulbs, a bag or purse, and a white couch footrest. It flashes real quick from the girl to her phone with text messages from the person she was talking to with their reply back. They portray what looks like her being alone talking to someone about something important.
0:02-0:05
The next scene shows the African American girl in her room alone to her phone on the bed with text messages from the person she was talking to with their reply back telling them, “It’s all in your head”; “Just think happier thoughts”, which made me think that they might be depressed. Then it starts to flash light from the curtains in the room on the phone like a glare. We that the African American girl is looking down at something on the right and then looks up the next second. She has 2 noses piercing blue and brown hair that is braided with some in Bantu knots with some of the braids hanging out. It like thier portaying it as her just sitting thier alone with her thoughts.
0:05-0:07
It transitions to a different setting of the African American girl with 2 noses piercings with blue and brown hair that is braided with some in Bantu knots with some of the braids hanging out an looking something in the room to 2 women in another room. We se that one of the girls has a gold earring that looks like a chan with a hoop, short curly black/brown hair and a yellow sweater whose looks like they don’t care witn the way they have their lips pucker and eyes ready to roll but instead closes her eyes starts to look down at something. Then the other girl with the long black hair whose first is blurred out so we can’t really see her all that much. But she does turn her head to look at the other girl and then she’s un-blurred while the short hair girl is blurred out. She looking at the girl with the short hair like she knew what she had did and is wear a yellow or white shirt but we can’t tell due to gthe light in the room which makes it difficult. Theirs a black frame on the wall that might be a picture but can’t tell due to it being blurred and a window with white blinds that look to be opened. This secne makes me belive that thier having dinner or a conversation due to hearing a man in the background tell what seems tha short hair girl something with the long hair girl giving her the look of knowing what happen.
0:07-0:09
Were still at the secne with the 2 girls and a man whose talking. But it flashes to this boy with dreads and 2 people who might be his freinds at a dinner. The boy looks to not even what to be there at all in the first place with the way he’s look at the drink and swishing it around with the straw. The scene foucses more on the boy who has a grey short sleave shirt and 3 different kinds of breads on his left arm. The other two in the background seem to be wearing a white short sleve shirt and something that we can’t seem to see that’s been blurred out. The setting is portay in a dinner with 3 people who might be friends hangout while it rains outside with the boy in the middle looking lost in a world of his own thoughts.
0:09-0:011
The boy looks to not even what to be there at all in the first place with the way he’s look at the drink and swishing it around with the straw. But he slowy looks up at the two in front of him when they say something about depressing. Then were in a different secne with is the girl from the start of the video laying down and texting someone on her phone.
0:11-0:13
Her phone starts to get let out this light that looks like god shine on them but has a man’s voice in the backgrounda ask if ,” You’r alright”. It starts flashing then around that either blurred our or clear as day till we see what looks like a camera, a person, the @ syombal and a heart the read with the words post in blue coming in.
0:13-0:15
The blue post sign comes in then disappers to a dude with facial hair that seems to be talking. Then flashes to the words POSITIVE and VIBES ONLY in bold letters with the colors in the order of white, yelloew, blue, pink, turquoise and yellow. With someone that has a gold ring on their finger on the phone texting with the same blurred out light that’s moving up but the secne starts to move out.
0:15-0:17
A brown couch with a flower pillow and a blue blanket with a girl that has a white shirts an brown overalls on laying down.
0:17- 0:19
Srounded by light that’s coming through orange tan curtions and has a boy whose looking up on the floor with a dark green hoodie and blue jeans leading on a brown arm chair with pink, blue, and white throw pillows with a knited blanket ask if they what to talk about it.
0:19-0:21
The girl layingg down is look at the boy while leying down then looks away while nodding her head yes. Then the 2 girls fromthe dining room secne are holding hands while laying down in what seems to be a bedroom talking to eachother.
0:21-0:23
The African American girl from the first scene is outside at night leaning on a car with another girl who had long cruly hair and a red shirt. The background is them outside with looks like one thier house with a car that they are leaning against talking.
0:23-0:25
The 2 two girls are talking outside a building that looks to be restranut or a shop. It’s dark outside but the lights in the building are on and so are the ones in what seems to be a house in the backof it with another car in the parking lot which could be one of the girls or someone in the building with words starting to appear saying, ” When the world doesn’t listen, be the freind who does.” It gives it more of a freinds haveing your back when were you need them.
0:25-0:30
Words pop up about Seize The Awkward in a yellow chat bubble and words that say, “Learn how to help a freind with thier mental health at SeizeTheAwkward.org.” This whole video was about people going through things mentaliy and that they always have people thier to help them.
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I was wondering if you could give me feedback for the visual rhetoric rewrite and tell me if it sounds good or if I need to make some changes.
Your first 2 Seconds:
0:00-0:02
The first clip is a African American girl with jean pants and a shirt sitting alone in what looks to be her room on the phone. She is sitting down on a bed with blankets, papers, and pillows looking to be texting someone but throws it on the bed right after. Looking at the room’s interior, there is a window with blue curtains that block the lighting from outside which makes the room look more blue and dark, pictures on the wall, a wooding table with what looks to be a make-up area due to the brush palates in a cup, a tiny mirror that used to see up close, a huge mirror with lightbulbs, a bag or purse, and a white couch footrest. It flashes real quick from the girl to her phone with text messages from the person she was talking to with their reply back. They portray what looks like her being alone talking to someone about something important.
Very nice work, Ladybug. I’ve watched only the first few seconds of the video now after reading your observations. I noticed a few things, too.
The girl is centered in the frame.
The camera moves toward her for two seconds (an eternity in commercial time) to connect us to her more intimately. Builds rapport.
We see her clear silhouette against the bright light coming through the window between the partly opened drapes.
We get a clear sense of her identity from her silhouette.
The darkness and closed room indicate isolation.
Also perhaps self-absorption.
Notice also the self-reflection (maybe narcissism) suggested by her reflection in the mirror (and the presence of a second mirror), (and the self-reflection referenced in the text “It’s all in your head.”), (and the very faint suggestion that gazing into her phone is like another mirror) (maybe that’s just me).
The girl has BIG STYLE.
The bantu knots. The extensions? The torn-leg jeans. The nose ring. The starlet lights around the mirror. Is she highly theatrical? Or just a little personally dramatic?
What mood are the creators going for here? How well do they manage it? What does it lead us to expect? What judgments does it encourage us to make?
Consider those questions (and make similar observations) for every timed segment, OV. We don’t have to KNOW what’s going on all the time (especially without sound). But we do MAKE JUDGMENTS every second or so, and those are all triggered by what we’re seeing. Since the creators are responsible for everything we see . . . we have to judge that they WANTED US to draw conclusions from what we’re shown. They are PERSUADING US of something.
How well do they accomplish the job?
If you REALLY want to shine, after you’ve completed your NO SOUND analysis, listen to the soundtrack and add a “Post-Audio” section to share your analysis of how well, or how poorly, the audio track enhanced the persuasiveness of the message. Remember, these little videos are sophisticated Persuasive Arguments. What did this one persuade you to do or think?
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