0:00-0:07: The video opens with the goal of illustrating the difference between two individuals one who stays updated through the app, being aware of everything around her, and another person who isn’t updated and is always rushing without knowing what’s happening. Firstly, it highlights the flexibility in choosing languages, making it easy for everyone to understand. Then, it depicts someone waking up to an alarm and heading out. The message conveyed here is that the person using the app is more adaptable to receiving alerts.
0:07-0:15: The app displays various situations and actions that can occur, along with its functionalities such as emergency alerts, local mass transit disruptions, police advisories, and weather notifications. The video shows a person in the middle of New York City receiving notifications about mass transit disruptions. The significance of such alerts is emphasized, as they can prevent unnecessary rushing when, for instance, a ride is running late.
0:15-0:26: The video provides proof of the scenario discussed in the previous scene. The person not using the app is rushing to the train station, unaware that the train will be late. This emphasizes the contrast between two individuals one with access to the app who stays informed, and the other who rushes without updates. Eventually, they meet, and the app user helps the other person by demonstrating the app’s screen options, showcasing the ability to turn on/off notifications for various alerts. The scene’s message is the importance of following and utilizing the app.
0:25-0:30: The video concludes with contact information and urges viewers to prepare for unforeseen events. It also provides information on signing up and includes a tip advising viewers to download the app.
Counterintuitive Fall 2024 
What perplexes me about this post, Urbie, is that two sections (the first and the last) resemble the “English-learner’s language use” I’m familiar with from your other assignments, while the inner sections are grammar perfect.
I’m willing to grant you considerable leniency, as I have already on other assignments, but I need to you acknowledge whatever help you received writing the sections from 0:07 to 0:24.
Thanks.
Of course, the other really big problem is that your descriptions DON’T IN ANY WAY describe the scenes depicted in the video. There are no catastrophes in the video you’ve linked to, no floods, no fallen trees, no firefighters, no people helping each other out in emergencies.
Could you please EITHER describe the video you’ve linked OR link me to the right video?
Thanks.
That’s better, Urbie.
This time, if you want to make more revisions, let’s name the two people in the video. The girl will be Adita, and the boy will be Raul.
Talk to your reader about how Adita always seems to know what’s going to happen on her way to classes, while Raul is constantly surprised by things going wrong that could have been avoided if he used the app.
Adita seems to know that the subway will be delayed, but Raul goes down the subway steps without expecting delays. That’s why he’s late to class, right?
That’s just an example, but it should help you share more details about the video and it will help readers understand what they’re looking at.
REMEMBER: your readers DO NOT GET TO SEE THE VIDEO.
They have to learn everything about it from what you tell them.
Thank you for the comments I did work based on the comments you tell and i just posted back in feedback please, hopefully is the right way.
That’s quite impressive, Urbie. I credit you for sticking with this project, and I credit your co-author for all the beautiful grammar. Congratulations on rescuing this post.