Rebuttal Rewrite—laflame

The Joyful Odyssey: Embracing the Path to Fulfillment

While the essay emphasizes the intrinsic value of the journey in pursuit of happiness, it’s essential to acknowledge the opposing argument that suggests setting and achieving goals as the primary path to fulfillment. This perspective posits that the process of defining clear objectives and successfully reaching them is the key to a content and satisfied life.

Proponents of the goal-centric approach like Kennon Sheldon et al. argue that having well-defined goals provides individuals with a sense of direction and purpose. Setting specific targets allows for a structured and organized life, where each accomplishment contributes to a fulfilling sense of achievement. The satisfaction derived from reaching milestones is seen as a reliable source of happiness, creating a tangible and measurable foundation for well-being.

Moreover, the pursuit of goals is considered a motivational force that propels individuals forward in their personal and professional lives. The sense of progress and accomplishment serves as a continuous source of inspiration, encouraging individuals to strive for higher aspirations. This perspective contends that the act of setting and achieving goals not only provides happiness in the moment of success but also lays the groundwork for sustained well-being by fostering a mindset of continual improvement.

Sheldon et al.’s study titled “Persistent pursuit of need-satisfying goals leads to increased happiness: A 6-month experimental longitudinal study”, explores how the groups of people in their studies benefited greatly and experienced happiness through goal setting. Their study called the “Community happiness study” recruited 181 participants through a University of Missouri announcement, with an imbalanced gender ratio and diverse representation across student, faculty, staff, and administrator roles. Participants were informed about the study’s purpose, emphasizing voluntary participation and the absence of guaranteed positive effects. After completing an initial questionnaire, participants generated and rated four personal goals. The study spanned four waves over 6 months, with sample sizes of 173, 151, and 145 participants. Demographic variables like gender, income, and occupation had minimal influence on the reported patterns. Participants received compensation for the initial session and were entered into a lottery for completing the entire study. Follow-up questionnaires were administered online at 2, 4, and 6 months post the initial session. The study aimed to compare the effects of exercises on participants’ state of mind, exploring long-term impacts on happiness.  

Sheldon and his colleagues concluded that “The data supported all three of our hypotheses. Most important, our first hypothesis, and the general notion that “becoming happier takes both a will and a proper way.” The authors’ conclusions align with the notion that “becoming happier takes both a will and a proper way.” While the study emphasizes the benefits of persistent pursuit of goals, it overlooks potential downsides. Using goal setting as a tool for happiness might inadvertently contribute to a cycle of chasing achievements for fleeting moments of joy. Over time, this relentless pursuit may lead to burnout as individuals become singularly focused on tasks, potentially sacrificing their well-being in the process. The study’s positive findings should be balanced with a recognition of the potential pitfalls associated with the continuous pursuit of goals.

In examining the opposing argument, it’s crucial to acknowledge that the pursuit of goals can indeed be a meaningful and fulfilling path to happiness for many individuals. The satisfaction derived from setting and achieving objectives, the motivational drive it instills, and the external recognition received all contribute to a robust and measurable framework for well-being. While this perspective may differ from the essay’s emphasis on the journey, it represents a valid and widely accepted approach to finding happiness in one’s pursuits. Balancing these contrasting viewpoints allows for a comprehensive understanding of the complex dynamics involved in the pursuit of a content and meaningful life.

The intrinsic value of life and the journey we take lies within the journey itself. Each step taken, every challenge faced, and every lesson learned contributes significantly to the happiness experienced during the pursuit of a goal. It’s about acknowledging and finding joy in the progress made, not solely fixating on the final destination. The research conducted by Anthony D. Ong and his peers shed light on how these positive feelings felt during the journey contribute to a healthier life. In their study titled “The Health Significance of Positive Emotions in Adulthood and Later Life” Ong writes “positive emotion is believed to directly affect health via behavioral, physiological, and stressor exposure pathways.” Ong emphasizes the impact of positive emotions on health through various pathways. In the context of life’s journey, being mindful along the way allows individuals to find happiness in the small victories and positive experiences. This mindfulness contributes to resilience, as it involves acknowledging and appreciating the progress made, not just fixating on the final destination. By cultivating an awareness of the positive moments in the journey, individuals enhance their ability to bounce back from challenges and develop a deeper sense of well-being. Resilience, in this context, becomes a byproduct of mindful engagement with life’s experiences, fostering enduring happiness and a healthier overall outlook.

Contrary to the widely held belief that reaching a goal ensures a lasting state of happiness, research indicates that the joy derived from achievement is often short lived. The feelings experienced upon reaching a goal tend to fade over time, and the pursuit of new goals becomes necessary to sustain a sense of purpose and fulfillment.

Alastair Dryburgh, the CEO of Akenhurst Consultants and a regular contributor to Management Today, writes about how reflection can help people in the corporate world have a more mindful mindset in his Forbes article “The Curse Of Success?” Dryburgh writes “The real task is harder; we need to recognise that much of what made us successful in the past will cause us to fail in the future.” This illustrates how the challenge lies not only in embracing new approaches but also in letting go of old habits that have become ingrained in one’s identity. The idea is to detach what we do from who we are, allowing for flexibility and adaptation. The key lies in finding a harmonious balance. Appreciating both the journey and the destination creates a holistic approach to goal attainment. It involves deriving joy from the process while maintaining a focus on the end goal for a more enriching and fulfilling experience. Striking this balance requires a mindful approach to goal setting and pursuit, setting realistic expectations, and recognizing that the journey is not merely a means to an end but a significant part of the overall experience. By acknowledging the interconnectedness of process and outcome, individuals can navigate their pursuits with a sense of purpose and resilience.

In life, happiness plays a recurring role, and our exploration challenges the common idea that reaching a destination guarantees fulfillment. The act of working towards a goal stands out as a significant factor for long-term happiness. As we passionately pursue our goals, let’s find joy not just at the top but in every step of the way. This comprehensive view of chasing goals and its complex connection with happiness encourages people to rethink success. It promotes a shift from seeing goals as mere endpoints to understanding them as essential parts of an ongoing and changing journey. By doing this, we embrace a more lasting and nuanced approach to happiness, one that thrives not only in achieving goals but in the very essence of the pursuit itself.

Resources

Dryburgh, A. (2015, June 29). The curse of success?. Forbes. https://www.forbes.com/sites/alastairdryburgh/2015/06/29/the-curse-of-success/?sh=5bf044695a4c

Ong, A. D., Mroczek, D. K., & Riffin, C. (2011, August 1). The health significance of positive emotions in adulthood and later life. Social and personality psychology compass. https://www.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/pmc/articles/PMC3173764/

Sheldon, K. M., Abad, N., Ferguson, Y., Gunz, A., Houser-Marko, L., Nichols, C. P., & Lyubomirsky, S. (2009, December 8). Persistent pursuit of need-satisfying goals leads to increased happiness: A 6-month Experimental Longitudinal Study – motivation and emotion. SpringerLink. https://link.springer.com/article/10.1007/s11031-009-9153-1

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7 Responses to Rebuttal Rewrite—laflame

  1. davidbdale's avatar davidbdale says:

    I don’t see any reference to Forbes in your argument here, LaFlame. If you don’t cite it, leave it out of your References list.

    On the other hand, this 1000 words is VERY general and abstract and would benefit tremendously from ANYTHING you do can to make it more specific, numerical, illustrative, tangible . . . .

    If citations help you accomplish those goals, by all means quote, cite, paraphrase, giving credit when you do. It’s a research paper, so proudly show your research.

    • davidbdale's avatar davidbdale says:

      Before I forget, FIND A REBUTTAL SOURCE!

      You’re arguing with straw men here. Nothing would do more to enliven this collection of abstractions than a good opponent to wrestle with, something to focus your attention, something that requires counterclaims to take down a strong thesis statement.

      Is there no one committed to the idea that ACHIEVING SUCCESS (whatever that means for an individual) MAKES US HAPPY?

  2. davidbdale's avatar davidbdale says:

    This is frustrating, LaFlame. The writing is solid, but it seems to say nothing.

    I’m going to paraphrase each paragraph and see if there’s any way to make sense of the thing.

    1. The journey to achieve our goals is more important for real contentment than reaching the final destination.

    2. The journey of chasing our goals is a rich and rewarding process of growth.

    3. While pursuing goals, we must savor both successes and setbacks.

    4. While pursuing goals, setbacks help us develop resilience.

    5. Positive emotions in the face of challenges support our psychological health.

    6. Positive emotions fortify our resilience against adversity.

    7. The pursuit of our goals contributes more to our happiness than reaching the destination.

    8. The effort expended to achieve the goal provides the satisfaction of making progress.

    9. The achieved goal does not satisfy for long. New goals are needed to maintain a sense of purpose.

    10. The achieved goal does not satisfy for long. New goals are needed to maintain a sense of purpose. Yes, it’s the same as 9.

    11. The journey to achieve our goals is a richer and more rewarding process than reaching the final destination. Yes, it’s the same as 1+2.

    12. The pursuit of meaningful goals makes us happy. Yes, it’s the same as several of its predecessors.

    13. Deep engagement in the pursuit of meaningful goals is called “flow,” which provides the joy of positive engagement. Yes, it’s the same as 2 and 7 and 8.

    14. The achieved goal does not satisfy for long. The goal is replaced with the new urgency to maintain the new status. New, but it appears to contradict 9 and 10.

    15. The achieved goal does not satisfy for long. New goals are needed to maintain a sense of purpose. Sure sounds like the same claim as 9 and 10.

    16. Hold on! BOTH the journey AND the destination are the key(s) to happiness! Holistic, blah blah, mindful approach, blah blah, interconnectedness of process and outcome, blah blah, purpose and resilience. So much language to support a compromise position.

    17. Long-term happiness can be achieved by embracing the fulfillment found in pursuing goals, reaching but not being satisfied by them, and loving the pursuit.

  3. davidbdale's avatar davidbdale says:

    I don’t blame you for getting sucked into this BS, LaFlame, but if you recognize how nearly content-free it is, can you please revise it to add some blood to the veins? You seem willing to assist your Causal argument by populating it with actual people. Is there any chance they can make another appearance here?

    The nature of the thesis is so extremely abstract that I always try to guide students away from it toward something—anything!—more specific. I thought we had that understanding.

    Regardless, you’ll have to find a way to revise this to give it real value in your Portfolio. As it stands, it’s just nicely-phrased very weak tea.

    One more thing. Not only do I see no evidence of Forbes here, I can’t see any reflection of Ong or Hayes beyond the mentioning of their names. Nothing in their work that I have found appears to illuminate your own text.

    I also haven’t found any mention of “flow” in any of your sources. It sounds like the one concept that might have some sort of specificity, but I can’t see where it came from.

    Provisionally graded. Revisions are strenuously encouraged (required, in fact, for arguments in your Portfolio), and Regrades are always available following substantial improvements.

    • laflame's avatar laflame says:

      Hey, I have made my revisions, I’d appreciate if you could give me quick feedback on how you think this version of the essay is.

  4. davidbdale's avatar davidbdale says:

    You have to admit (I think), it’s amusing that your explanations of your source quotes are, effectively, just paraphrases or even repetitions of the quotes.

    Quote 1

    Sheldon and his colleagues concluded that “Most important, our first hypothesis, and the general notion that “becoming happier takes both a will and a proper way.”

    Paraphrase 1

    The authors’ conclusions align with the notion that “becoming happier takes both a will and a proper way.”

    Quote 1

    Ong writes, “Positive emotion is believed to directly affect health via behavioral, physiological, and stressor exposure pathways.”

    Paraphrase 1

    Ong emphasizes the impact of positive emotions on health through various pathways.

    I mean, did you think I wouldn’t notice? 🙂

  5. davidbdale's avatar davidbdale says:

    Massive improvements throughout, though.
    Regraded.

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