Visual rewrite- Patrickthestar1

1.0:00-0:03 :The opening scene of this baby in its chair and his father or caretaker picks up his pacifier that fell on the floor while this scene is only a few second it serves to empathize with viewers as it shows the realities of parenting and sometimes using shortcuts or  not doing things the supposed right way.

2.0:03-0:06 The scene of this child’s mother rubbing their kid’s face shows the not so glamorous side of parenting which again is meant to connect to parents who are overwhelmed or do things their own way.

3.0:06-0:09 This scene paints a very clear picture of an everyday mom who seems ready to get the days tasks done.The mother in this scene seems to be attentive and put together from her curled hair and sunglasses to her keys in hand and coffee meant to start up her day.This mother showed is quite different compared to the two parents that have been shown previously as she seems more organized and efficient.

4.0:09-0:11 – The next scene shows her answering a call as her eyes reflect through the rear view mirror. The shot of the rear view mirror then transitions to the back seat which reveals a car seat still in the scene. The seemingly well put together mom is doing everything by answering the call and simply overlooks one important factor, her child .

5.0:11-0:13 The camera pans over to the baby still in the car seat with the mother in the background walking away which can be seen through the front windshield.While a hot car is uncomfortable the baby in this scene is calm and unaware of his conditions.This scene shows how easy it is to forget when the child is so calm and a simple detail escapes your mind.

6.0:13-0:18 The camera zooms into her coffee cup which earlier was used as a visual sign that this mom was ready to start her day of errands with her child. However the most interesting part of this cup is the condensation around it and the ice slowly begin to melt which shows just how hot it really is in the car.At this point in the video the mother has only been gone a few second so the coffee symbolizes just how quickly the conditions can change for a baby in the car. 

7.0:18-:0:20 We see a reflection on the outside of the car next to the window.The reflection is of the child’s mother running back to the car in panic realizing what she forgot in the previous scene.In the background we see shots of a plaza and dry cleaners which reinforced the idea of her running errands in the beginning. 

8.0:20-0:23 The mother has a look of relief as she unlocks the car and picks up her child safely.What i think is important to note in this scene is how unbothered the baby is while the mom is very grateful and crying. The baby is still calm which I think is very indicative of just how long the baby was left in the car and while the tragedy in this video was seemingly prevented it shows how easy it is for a second of forgetfulness can turn quickly into a tragedy.

9:0:23-0:27 The scene once again shows the reflection in the cars outside windows but this time it shows the mother and son walking away from the car and the situation. They walk into what seems to be a grocery store.This part shows just how fast it can all happen but how pivotal that moment between parking and getting out the car can be and can quickly change everyone’s life.

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1 Response to Visual rewrite- Patrickthestar1

  1. davidbdale's avatar davidbdale says:

    You didn’t ask for feedback, but just for your own reference, this is the description one of your classmates produced for the first second of a similar video on the dangers of heatstroke.

    0:00: Immediately, the first appearance on the screen is a child (white) that is sitting in the center foreground where we are at the same eye level as the child. It appears that the child is sitting on top of a rectangular carpet on a wooden floor in a narrow beige hallway with multiple pathways with different entrances which indicates that the child is inside of a house. There’s one entrance to the right side of the child of the screen, one doorway entrance behind the child towards background, which is the end of the hallway, and one to the left end of the hallway which appears to extend further left. The door at the end of the hallway is slightly open which emits a color of baby blue.

    The child’s face shows a hue of red and scrunched up which appears that the child is crying in the scene. What was the child crying about? Is the child throwing a tantrum? The child looks around the age of one to three years old because of the fully-grown blond hair that is draped down to shoulders lengths and is wearing a diaper. We would assume the child would be a boy despite having long hair because of the color clothing. The child is wearing baby blue, and white horizontal stripes across the T-shirt, and a pair of dark blue baby crocs, but apparently the child is missing one of the crocs because the child is only wearing a sock and one croc. Could that be the reason why the child is crying and throwing a tantrum? It could also be a girl despite the color clothing. The child is looking a little to the right side then proceeds to look upwards. Why is the child looking there? Is it the culprit of what made the child cry or the aftermath of what happened? As the child was crying, the camera slowly moved to the left as it follows the motion of the child lifting both of its legs up while still sitting on the carpet floor, then slowly stops and wobbles back and forth a little as the child’s legs came back down onto the carpet. Suggests that the camera could be following the motion of the child’s tantrum.

    The way they make this scene to make the child stand out more is not only because the child is at the center foreground, but the difference of the amount of color that is shown on the screen. There are more beige colors than baby blue where the color of the baby blue from the door, and the color of the child’s shirt is one-third of the overall screen that is centered vertically while two-thirds of the screen is beige colored which is from the left and right side of the screen vertically. Not only that, but the door that is emitting baby blue helps to show the outlines of the child’s head to prevent the blends between beige and blond. Another important key factor of how the child stands out is how the overall scene is mostly straight vertical lines while the only horizontal line we see is the shirt that the child is wearing.

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