Origanal paragraph- “There is a huge problem in Vancouver with heroin addicts committing crimes to support their habits. The “free heroin for addicts” program is doing everything they can to stop the addicts. The problem is that there is a large crime rate due to the addicts. It is obvious that addicts have a hard time getting through their day to day lives. Daily activities such as jobs, interactions, and relationships are hard to maintain because of the fact that they are using. By heroin users being addicted, they will do whatever they have to do to get their hands on the drug. The types of crimes committed are those of breaking and entering as well as stealing. There are no limits to where they will go to retrieve this drug so that they can feed their addiction. The problem with this program is that it won’t help to ween these addicts off using heroin. It is only trying to save the city from rising crime rates that they’re up to. By providing the drug, these addicts will be off the streets, which in turn will prevent them from committing minor street crimes. This will also keep the heroin users out of the hospital. It is pointless that the hospitals have to deal with people that want to use bad drugs or unsanitary needles and find themselves being unable to afford hospital bills and hard to cope without the drug. This program gives people free heroin in the cleanest way possible. This will in turn fix the city  but not the addiction that these people face.”

Revision- Vancouver is seeing a rising crime rate from heroin addicted criminals. Since so many thefts are commited soley to afford heroin, the “free heroin for addicts” program suggests that addicts are provided free and cleaner heroin to make it unneccacary to steal. This will keep heroin addicts off the street, and cleaner needles and injection methods will keep them out of hospitals. This doesn’t help the people addicted to the drug but it would make the city a cleaner and safer place for regular citizens to live. It has reached a point where people using drugs are not the responsibility of the city, and if they are choosing to end their life one needle at a time, then the priority is getting them off the streets and ending unsanitary methods of the drug.