2nd Person– MAD ClTY

  1. Taxpayers wonder whether the amount spent on students makes a difference. Ask any parent whose child goes to an expensive school, and they will say, “Yes.”
  2. There are different types of injuries that happen in each sport. Contrary to what most think, if surgery is performed before any injury occurs, it could make an athlete stronger.
  3. Imagine drugs consuming the body. The mind is now committed to obtaining the drug, no matter the consequences.
  4. By inviting Syrians, they’re creating more problems than they are solving.
  5. Does the idea of not actually having money on-hand sound trivial?
  6. The little green piece of paper known as money holds no actual value other than the cost of production, and yet we will go our entire lives to acquire more of those little green pieces of paper just so we can take them and stick them in a bank.
  7. So just remember, when reading a bank statement or looking at a dollar bill, it is made-up value that someone decided to create. Without it, we might still have to trade with goods like livestock and produce.
  8. I now understand that a dollar is only worth its exchange value.
  9. Being able to walk around with money without holding it brings me back around to the idea of the stone because, just like stone currency, there isn’t a need to be in physical possession of these Bitcoins to own them.
  10. We hear people talk about the American Dream, which requires having enough of these pieces of paper to be financially stable. Think about it deeply: the realization that receiving enough of these pieces of paper called money is the basis of our whole life.
  11. Monet is an adroit concept, and its pursuit lasts a lifetime. Our goals from the moment we start school is to join the game of making enough of these pieces of paper to make life more fun and acceptable.

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1 Response to 2nd Person– MAD ClTY

  1. davidbdale's avatar davidbdale says:

    You’ve gone out of your way to create new sentences that don’t require pronouns and, therefore, avoid the 2nd-Person Ban through inventiveness, which I admire and will reward with a lavish grade.

    I do want to pick a few nits:

    Taxpayers wonder whether the amount spent on students makes a difference. Ask any parent whose child goes to an expensive school, and they will say, “Yes.”

      —The singular/plural problem presented by singular pronouns is LESS objectionable now than ever before, but still hurts ears like mine. I’d solve the disagreement between “any parent” (singular) and “they will say” (plural) by eliminating the “they.”

      Consider: Any parent whose child goes to an expensive school, and would say, “Yes, it does.”

      Contrary to what most think, if surgery is performed before any injury occurs, it could make an athlete stronger.

      —Avoid needles “it”s whenever possible.

      Consider: Contrary to what most think, surgery performed before any injury occurs could make an athlete stronger.

      Does the idea of not actually having money on-hand sound trivial?

      —Unless it’s used as an adjective, “on hand” needs no hyphen.

      A hyphen-needed example: What’s your cash-on-hand situation?

      I now understand that a dollar is only worth its exchange value.

      —Only matters Only when it matters.
      —Your sentence says a dollar is worth its exchange value, but it’s not determined by its exchange value; it’s not influenced by its exchange value; it’s not the equivalent of its exchange value; . . . .

      Consider: I now understand that a dollar is worth only its exchange value.
      Consider: I now understand that a dollar is worth nothing but its exchange value.

      Our goals from the moment we start school is to join the game of making enough of these pieces of paper to make life more fun and acceptable.

      —Probably a typo. The correction is “Our goal . . . is.”

      Consider: Our goal from the moment we start school is to join the game . . . .

      Beautiful work. Some of your best language use since the beginning of the semester.

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