Robust Verbs (Revised) – yardie

Posted on December 2, 2024 by yardie

Addicts from Vancouver are stealing, participating in prostitution, and committing theft to support their daily dosages of heroin. Addicts have a hard time keeping jobs, interacting with people, and maintaining healthy relationships. The “free heroin for addicts” program says they are helping the issue by injecting clean, fake heroin into addicts to satisfy their hunger for the drug. Although this strategy, done by the “free heroin for addicts” program, may lower the crime rates on the streets and keep addicts out of hospital emergency rooms, it still doesn’t end their addictions. Simply removing the addicts from the streets won’t ever actually solve the problem but continue to feed heroin users’ addictions in a different location.

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2 Responses to Robust Verbs (Revised) – yardie

  1. davidbdale's avatar davidbdale says:
    December 3, 2024 at 2:02 pm

    You solved most of the errors of the original material, yardie, but the sentences you’ve produced don’t themselves do much to maximize the power of robust subjects and verbs.

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  2. davidbdale's avatar davidbdale says:
    December 6, 2024 at 6:12 am

    Remarkably better, yardie, and definitely time to end this cycle of revisions, but, for the record, may I just gently point out that even after all the improvements, it’s still possible to invigorate your verbs.

    Addicts from Vancouver are stealing, participating in prostitution, and committing theft to support their daily dosages of heroin

    —”stealing” is robust enough for sure

    —”participating” is very weak compared to “prostitution,” so, in some paragraphs, you should substitute “prostituting themselves,” but you could always rely on “selling their bodies for sex.”

    —”committing” is also weak compared to “theft,” but “thieving” is admittedly weird, and you’ve already used the synonym “stealing.” The best would be a verb that combines theft and violent confrontation, and that word is “mugging.”

    Readers don’t pay as much attention to participating and committing as they do to stealing and mugging.

    Regraded.

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