Robust Verbs-CourageTheCowardlyDog

The Paragraph:

There is a huge problem in Vancouver with heroin addicts committing crimes to support their habits. The “free heroin for addicts” program is doing everything they can to stop the addicts. The problem is that there is a large crime rate due to the addicts. It is obvious that addicts have a hard time getting through their day to day lives. Daily activities such as jobs, interactions, and relationships are hard to maintain because of the fact that they are using. By heroin users being addicted, they will do whatever they have to do to get their hands on the drug. The types of crimes committed are those of breaking and entering as well as stealing. There are no limits to where they will go to retrieve this drug so that they can feed their addiction. The problem with this program is that it won’t help to ween these addicts off using heroin. It is only trying to save the city from rising crime rates that they’re up to. By providing the drug, these addicts will be off the streets, which in turn will prevent them from committing minor street crimes. This will also keep the heroin users out of the hospital. It is pointless that the hospitals have to deal with people that want to use bad drugs or unsanitary needles and find themselves being unable to afford hospital bills and hard to cope without the drug. This program gives people free heroin in the cleanest way possible. This will in turn fix the city  but not the addiction that these people face.

Revisions

Heroin addicts in Vancouver tend to commit crimes to support their bad habits. The “free heroin for addicts” program attempts to do everything that can be done to stop addicts. They naturally have a hard time trying to get through and maintain their day-to-day lives because of the fact that they are using. Because of this addiction, the type of crimes they are willing to commit is very concerning seeing as they will do whatever they can to get their hands on anything that will help out this addiction. The main concern with this program would be that they won’t be getting rid of the addiction, they would just be getting them off of the streets. By doing this, they will be helping hospitals actually see patients that want help. The program helps fix the problem of addicts on the street by giving them free heroin in the cleanest way possible but won’t help with their addiction.

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1 Response to Robust Verbs-CourageTheCowardlyDog

  1. davidbdale's avatar davidbdale says:

    This satisfies the bare requirement of the assignment, which was to fix the errors in the original. It does little to improve the quality of the paragraph beyond that.

    Graded.

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