The World’s Simplest Card Trick
Rewrite Advice
The paragraph is an introduction to the Rebuttal argument. The author argues that fighting in hockey, when it’s retaliatory and conducted by “enforcers” whose job is to dole out justice to bullies who pick fights with star players, actually REDUCES violence and injuries, putting a quick end to the feud by sending the clear message that it will not be tolerated.
The full paragraph is shown below, divided into sentences. Recommended alternatives will be revealed. The replacement sentences, if they’re successful, will:
- Express the author’s convictions in bold, clear language.
- Provide evidence instead of hinting at it.
- Call out the opposition’s flawed conclusions, whatever they are.
No idea comes without a counterargument and this theory remains true in regard to fighting in hockey.
Even the best and truest thesis can be argued, so there are critics of fighting in hockey.
Critics take a surface level look at the violent aspect of the game but fail to appreciate the positivity and safe environment it creates.
They see a drop of blood on the ice, but can’t calculate the carnage that drop of blood prevents.
Without a true deep dive into the understanding of the players’ minds on the ice, the opposition would draw an incorrect impression.
They think the fighter loves the violence, when in fact his role is to prevent it.
Additionally, failing to acknowledge the empirical evidence surrounding fighting is another key flaw in the counterargument.
If they bothered to run the numbers, they’d find that teams with feared enforcers suffer far fewer injuries and lost ice-time than teams that let their players get bullied and pushed around.
While fighting in hockey has advantages both seen and unseen on the ice, critics cite injury, and that hockey glorifies violence leaving a bad example for children and viewers.
They let the hard hits blind them to the benefits of hitting back and retreat to platitudes about teaching kids to misbehave by example.
Research Position Paper Due MON DEC 02.
- Distinguish References from the Annotated Bibliography
- The References section at the bottom of every argument, long or short, offers bibliographic notes in AP format to help readers identify sources you have cited in the argument.
- Even for the 3000-word Research Argument, it is not a complete list of every source you consulted or read while preparing your semester’s work.
- Short version: If you quoted, paraphrased, or named the author or the article in your argument, it gets a Reference. If you didn’t, it doesn’t.
- The Annotated Bibliography is a separate post and a separate piece of work that goes in your Portfolio individually.
- The Annotated Bibliography evolves from your Proposal+5. Add any sources you’ve consulted since you posted your Proposal+5 along with their Background and “How I Used It” paragraphs.
- It provides bibliographic information in AP format for all the important sources you consulted in your research, whether or not you quoted or named them in your arguments.
- It also contains the two sections “Background” (a Purposeful Summary of the important arguments the material provides) and “How I Used It,” (an explanation of how the work supports your argument or provides counterarguments).
- The References section at the bottom of every argument, long or short, offers bibliographic notes in AP format to help readers identify sources you have cited in the argument.
- How to Build the Portfolio
- Consult the Portfolio Checklist for the 8 needed items.
- Open any item in Edit mode.
- From the sidebar, under Categories, check the special category that identifies your Portfolio post.
- The nomenclature is: PORTFOLIO/PortfolioUsername
- For username Blooming Mystery, the category is Portfolio Blooming Mystery
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- For username Blooming Mystery, the category is Portfolio Blooming Mystery
- Update your post.
- Find the results in the sidebar of the home page for our blog.
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. - When your listing shows 8 items, your Portfolio is complete.
- In the example, Blooming Mystery has added just one item to the Portfolio.
- OmgMafia‘s Portfolio needs one more item.
Counterintuitive Fall 2024 
Class Notes: 11/27/24
World’s Simplest Card Trick
-Hodges literally just had us shuffle the cards 7 times, just for him to lay them all out. That was the trick.
-I was confused at first, but then I understood that there are way more than a million ways for those cards to be placed. 8 x 10^67 will lead to the number of how many different orders the cards could have been in.
-It is wild because this trick really is very simple, but it is funny because the trick is just about the order of the cards.
-I did enjoy the chessboard story as he did the trick!
-Everyday the impossible happens all the time, don’t take life for granted.
Rebuttal rewrite advice:
-Must identify your point of view and the opposition you are arguing with. Show how our point of view differs from our rebuttal opponent
-Don’t make the argument/ our paragraphs boring. Just stating things will not do justice to keep the audience’s attention.
-If we link our sources directly in our text, Hodges will greatly appreciate it.
*Research Position Paper due Monday Dec 2 aka Sunday night 11:59
When doing this research paper, make sure to use transitions to help blend the 3 arguments together. We don’t want to just copy and paste each essay because then we will have 3 introductions and 3 conclusions. This will make our paper look horrible.
-We can go in a back and forth scenario between our definition and causal argument in our paper.
-If we didn’t use a source from our proposal+5, then explain why we didn’t use it.
-In order to put things into our portfolio, just edit the item you want in it, and add it to the portfolio (your name) category. There should be 8 things in our portfolio by the time we are done
Class notes- figure8clementine
The World’s Simplest Card Trick
The chances that anymore who shuffled a pack a cards in the same way twice is spectacularly small because the possible to repeat the order the exact same way is 8*10^67. It is impossible since it happens everyday, but it is possible if we are aware of our surroundings if we look closely. Moral of the story, don’t take life for granted.
You can put links into your research paper to help readers to follow through your sources. The same way you can put links in the reference page by putting them in the title of your sources.
When compiling your research paper, rewrite your introductions of each argument to make sure that the transition goes smoothly.
Add your sources into the references page only if you actually cite, quote, or mention of the article or author while the rest of the sources goes to the autobiography.
Class Notes-phoenixxxx23
–The chessboard story:
The chances you and I exist are less then the chances of getting this exact combination of cards
-The odds of us being here are insanely small
-THE IMPOSSIBLE HAPPENS EVERY DAY, just like us sitting in this class right now
-No idea comes without a conterargument
-Hyper links!
-The final paper due Dec 2
-Include the strongest arguments in the portfolio
Class Notes 11.27.24
rebuttal rewrite
annotated bibliography
research
11.27.24
Card Trick
Rebuttal Paragraph
Research Paper Stuff
RIDDLE
-Odds against stuff are crazy, but things can happen anyway
Rewrite Advice
-Be clear in what you’re going to say.
-Missing evidence of violence. Tell us who has gotten hurt
-Which is what? Get to what you’re trying to say
-Can’t tell what side their argument is on
Research Paper
-Due Dec. 2nd!
-USED research goes into References and Annotated Bibliography
-Talk about core values 100 words or so for Reflective statement
-8 items in portfolio!
(thanks for letting us go early, have a great thanksgiving!!!)
11/27
Class Notes 11/27/24
Class notes:
Class Notes 11/27/24
Make your claim clear. Use plain language if possible.
Only things that are cited go in the references section. Anything that helped shape your argument can go in the annotated bibliography.
Class Notes 11/27
The World’s Simplest Card Trick – 52!, 8X10^67, impossible things happen all the time
Annotated Bibliography Advice – all references are supposed to be in it, not everything in it will be cited by papers, only 2 papers go into portfolio
Assignments:
Research Position Paper Due MON DEC 02
Class Notes 11/27
-The deck of cards were shuffled and laid out on the desk. The order the cards were in was a probability so small that it is close to impossible that they have ever been laid out in that order before. The probability of having the same order of cards is 8*10^67. The chances we exist are less then this probability and we mustn’t take it for granted.
-The portfolio has a total of 8 items in the portfolio
-every source must have a citation
-Final paper due Dec 2nd
-The 2 strongest arguments should be included in portfolio
Class Notes
Class Notes 11/27/2024
Card Trick– Don’t take your life for granted because we are impossible.
Rewrite Advice–
Research Position Paper
Link sources in research paper
Alphabetize references
We started class with our professor doing a card trick. His deception of incompetency convincing. The trick was not a magic trick at all, it was simply laying out a deck of cards on a table while telling a story, then proclaiming this sequence of cards is unheard of and unique! He went on to “calculate” the probability of this sequence. The point? A way to ice break and pick up chicks maybe? I am still not sure, but it was entertaining to say the least.
He then went on to give advice on rebuttals that would influence the course of my thesis paper. He wanted us to aim for demolishing any potential counter points. Here I was going be chivalrous and acknowledge a few holes in my thesis. But after hearing him talk, I am going to be more ruthless and construct a facade. A sharp eye can still see the issues in my research paper and where the duct tape, bubblegum, and dreams hold it together.
Then again maybe it’s like an artist thing where we are our own best critic. We are so close to the project we can see our own flaws. Funny enough I have worked so long on my thesis and read though it so many times that it doesn’t make sense to me anymore, like a word that is repeated outload many times until it doesn’t sound like a word anymore, but just a mechanical manipulation of sound.
He then went over the portfolio. I am somewhat confused, but then again, I have been busting my butt to play catch up since my first flawed research paper. That paper was a time sink, and the only reason I did it, is to show the professor that this is a dead-end subject. It was the equivalent of looking up why the sky is blue and just finding the answer. There is no way to get 3,000 words on something so straightforward while being meaningful, not fluffing, and meeting the professor’s bullet point requirements. Starting another research project from 0 and having less time to do it has been nothing but a heavy cross to carry.