Moon Duchin, a Tuft’s University professor, has come up with a way to identify the disadvantages of gerrymandering. Gerrymandering manipulates the shape of electoral district votes for a particular party. They now are in control of the local legislature and are benefited more than any other party. Minorities overrule the majority of the voting causing their votes to be more valuable than any other group or party. This has caused endless problems in government because it has resulted unfair in a democracy for the minority to overrule the majority group. Duchin has come up with a way to train mathematicians so they can appear in courts as witnesses to redrawn or take electoral districts.
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Counterintuitive 
Your paragraph expresses a recognizable attitude to a named problem, Moana. Every bit of that is good and worth improving. Let’s look at individual sentences.
I think I understand your point, but you don’t mean EXPLOIT. I exploit a person’s weakness, for example, when I take advantage of him, make him work for nothing, or seize his property.
Manipulate is the perfect verb here (and that means the odds of your sentence being successful are about 80%). You COULD SAY, and probably should say, that the “particular party” is the party that controls the local legislature, and that the party they benefit is their own.
Maybe you mean OVERRULE here, Moana. That would work nicely. “It so happens” means that an accident occurred, but we both no gerrymandering is quite deliberate, so don’t confuse your readers. Finally, you mean THEIR (not there) and THAN (not then).
Maybe. It’s possible the minority party is smarter and SHOULD be in control. But that’s not your point. Name the problem. It’s fundamentally unfair in a democracy for the minority to overrule the majority.
Your reactions are most welcome.
Please consider revising for an upgrade.
So far, 2/3
Better, but a little sloppy. A few corrections, please:
Moon Duchin, a Tuft’s University professor, has come up with a way to identify the disadvantages of gerrymandering. Gerrymandering manipulates the shape of electoral district votes for a particular party, [punctuation] they now are in control of the local legislature and the party they benefit is from [why from?] their own. Minorities overrule the majority of the voting causing their votes to be more valuable than any other group or party. This has caused endless problems in government because it [verb?] unfair in a democracy for the minority to overrule the majority group, [punctuation] Duchin has come up with a way to train mathematicians so they can appear in courts as witnesses to redrawn in [what does that mean?] electoral districts.