robust verbs-dancestar10

Vancouver is facing a huge problem with heroin addicts committing crimes to support their habits. The “free heroin for addicts” program is doing everything they can to stop the addicts. The problem is that crime rates are going up due to addicts. Addicts have a hard time getting through their day to day lives such as jobs, interactions, and relationships due to the fact that they are using. By heroin users being addicted, they will do whatever they have to do to get their hands on the drug. The types of crimes committed are breaking and entering as well as stealing. Addicts have no limits to where they will go to retrieve this drug so that they can feed their addiction. The program won’t help ween these addicts off using heroin,It is only trying to save the city from rising crime rates. By providing the drug, these addicts will be off the streets, which will prevent them from committing minor street crimes. This will also keep the heroin users out of the hospital. It is pointless that the hospitals have to deal with people that want to use bad drugs or unsanitary needles and find themselves being unable to afford hospital bills and hard to cope without the drug. This program gives people free heroin in the cleanest way possible. This will in turn fix the city  but not the addiction that these people face.

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1 Response to robust verbs-dancestar10

  1. davidbdale says:

    You’ve made a start, DanceStar, but there’s so much left to do. You’ve left at least six examples of the verb to be, the weakest, least robust verb. Your last five sentences start with either This, or It is, or a faulty By phrase. Read some examples of your classmates’ work and see what you can do to improve this draft.

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