Polio Notes-dunkindonuts

White paper-

  • preliminary paper, repository for our sources and thinking, practice/sample paper, place to try out ideas, collection of purposeful summaries, make notes to ourselves of what is lacking
  • add to the “messiness” of our thinking, can add or delete information
  • by the end of this, should have to shrink it down to get to the straight point of view
  • collect sources, read sources, write about sources as I read them, write new sources suggested by a developing hypothesis, write about those sources, incorporate someone else’s point of view of what you found important in that source.
  • add quotes
  • variety of purposeful summaries
  • result in argument able to prove

RESEARCH CHALLENGE: Virus that causes polio thrives during mayhem and conflict, but why do are children mainly impacted, whereas adults can fight off the virus.

PRACTICE OPENING

When it comes to polio, younger children are more likely than not the group that contracts this disease. They are left in sickness and nothing to help them get out of this horrible state. Since children are more susceptible and surrounded by the harmful illness, it spreads easier to them. Rather than adults developing this disease, they are just left to take care of their children instead.

 

This entry was posted in dunkindonuts, Polio Notes. Bookmark the permalink.

One Response to Polio Notes-dunkindonuts

  1. davidbdale says:

    Here’s something interesting, Donuts. You show a talent for brief and cogent summary in the Notes part of this assignment. Then, when your job is to produce your own writing, you become wordy and repetitive. Have you ever noticed that?

    You weren’t distracted by details taking lecture notes: you focused right in on the Rules: “Write about sources as I read them,” and “Shrink it down.” You sucked the fat from my presentation like a bariatric surgeon.

    But you produced this:

    When it comes to polio, younger children are more likely than not the group that contracts this disease. They are left in sickness and nothing to help them get out of this horrible state. Since children are more susceptible and surrounded by the harmful illness, it spreads easier to them. Rather than adults developing this disease, they are just left to take care of their children instead.

    Which translates to:

    Children are more susceptible than their parents to polio, which leaves the children helpless and burdens their healthy parents with caring for them.

    Reply, please. Feedback is a conversation.

Leave a Reply

Please log in using one of these methods to post your comment:

WordPress.com Logo

You are commenting using your WordPress.com account. Log Out / Change )

Twitter picture

You are commenting using your Twitter account. Log Out / Change )

Facebook photo

You are commenting using your Facebook account. Log Out / Change )

Google+ photo

You are commenting using your Google+ account. Log Out / Change )

Connecting to %s